Danger Lurks
Frighten mouse stays safe6 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This trinet, Danger Lurks, has the proper set up and revisits the Hickory Dickory Dock story with the inclusion of the ever-hungry-for-mouse-meat cat. MOUSE it's what's for dinner.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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This trinet, Danger Lurks, has the proper set up and revisits the Hickory Dickory Dock story with the inclusion of the ever-hungry-for-mouse-meat cat. MOUSE it's what's for dinner.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Thanks for the read and the comments.
Comment from Pantygynt
This sounds like an interesting variation on the nursery rhyme
Hickory, dickory dock
The mouse ran up the clock
The clock struck one
The mouse ran down
Hickory dickory dock.
Either way the weight of the mouse on the pendulum would play merry hell with the timekeeping.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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This sounds like an interesting variation on the nursery rhyme
Hickory, dickory dock
The mouse ran up the clock
The clock struck one
The mouse ran down
Hickory dickory dock.
Either way the weight of the mouse on the pendulum would play merry hell with the timekeeping.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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You are correct it is a variation of Hickory Dickory Dock. Thanks for the read. And you bet his scrapper l believe would "play hell with the timekeeping."
Comment from Mimi Linny
Adorable Trinet about a curious little mouse! Nice rhythm that reads very smoothly. The flow of the story is perfect and is a great piece for the writing prompt entry!. Loved it!
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Adorable Trinet about a curious little mouse! Nice rhythm that reads very smoothly. The flow of the story is perfect and is a great piece for the writing prompt entry!. Loved it!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Thanks for the read and the encouraging words. Much appreciated.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Dear Anonymous Poet;
Thank you for sharing your entry for the Trinet Poetry contest. You nailed the requirements of the poetic form, and I think this would be a great piece for children. The photo you chose reminded me of the little mouse in the Christmas cartoon. He breaks the clock and needs to go back and fix it so Santa will come to the town.
~patty~
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Dear Anonymous Poet;
Thank you for sharing your entry for the Trinet Poetry contest. You nailed the requirements of the poetic form, and I think this would be a great piece for children. The photo you chose reminded me of the little mouse in the Christmas cartoon. He breaks the clock and needs to go back and fix it so Santa will come to the town.
~patty~
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Thanks for the read and the story. Not familiar with the mouse that breaks a clock. Sounds cute.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
I enjoyed this one and voted for it. I like how it tells a story in so few syllables and the presentation is awesome. I hope it goes well for you in this contest. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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I enjoyed this one and voted for it. I like how it tells a story in so few syllables and the presentation is awesome. I hope it goes well for you in this contest. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Thanks much for your read and your comments.
Comment from miajaffri
You followed the Trinet form as you told the story of the mouse. I like the line
chimes time, a good description of the grandfather clock. I like the "s" alliteration.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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You followed the Trinet form as you told the story of the mouse. I like the line
chimes time, a good description of the grandfather clock. I like the "s" alliteration.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Thanks much for your read and your comments.
