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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is hilarious! You have some imagination Bill and this is a fun write and I love the personalities of each animal! I enjoyed your write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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This is hilarious! You have some imagination Bill and this is a fun write and I love the personalities of each animal! I enjoyed your write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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Thanks, Dolly
Comment from nomi338
Here I sit, and no I won't quit. Take me to jail and give me some time, but before you do I claim the pot as mine! Tell the boys to strike up the band, because Holy Moley, I won the hand!
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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Here I sit, and no I won't quit. Take me to jail and give me some time, but before you do I claim the pot as mine! Tell the boys to strike up the band, because Holy Moley, I won the hand!
Comment Written 25-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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This could be it
Comment from Dawn Munro
D-o-o-o-a-a-a-n-n k-n-n-n-o-o-w-w a-a-s-s I-i-i c-a-n. A-a-a b-i-i-t t-t-o-o-o f-a-a-a-s-s-t f-o-o-r m-e-e.
B-u-u-t S-s-l-l-o-o-o-t-t-h-h-s-s l-i-i-i-k-k-e-d i-i-t.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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D-o-o-o-a-a-a-n-n k-n-n-n-o-o-w-w a-a-s-s I-i-i c-a-n. A-a-a b-i-i-t t-t-o-o-o f-a-a-a-s-s-t f-o-o-r m-e-e.
B-u-u-t S-s-l-l-o-o-o-t-t-h-h-s-s l-i-i-i-k-k-e-d i-i-t.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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That's some slow motion stuff!
Comment from LIJ Red
Ya can't beat the house, or Lancey(ask Steve Mcqueen) and the years have left me totally beached by the jargon, but I enjoyed the mental pictures of multinational possums and roosters with hole cards. And if it walks like a duck and quacks like a duck
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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Ya can't beat the house, or Lancey(ask Steve Mcqueen) and the years have left me totally beached by the jargon, but I enjoyed the mental pictures of multinational possums and roosters with hole cards. And if it walks like a duck and quacks like a duck
Comment Written 25-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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Thanks, LIJ, for offering this last line. Bill
Comment from Spitfire
Clever to ask the reader to supply the last line. Good job of writing in animal talk and using colloquialisms. I had to read it out loud and that was fun. Sounds raunchy at times. Each character has a distinctive personality that comes through. Can't think of a last line except for maybe "We're all out of doughnuts, but how about quakers?"
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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Clever to ask the reader to supply the last line. Good job of writing in animal talk and using colloquialisms. I had to read it out loud and that was fun. Sounds raunchy at times. Each character has a distinctive personality that comes through. Can't think of a last line except for maybe "We're all out of doughnuts, but how about quakers?"
Comment Written 24-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
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That could be it. Once you accept the idea of these animals playing poker, the line makes perfect sense.
Comment from lyenochka
"Have a heart, Officer. I'm just a duck under the gun in the muck."
Have no clue about poker or most card games. Enjoyed the dialect-infused speech.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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"Have a heart, Officer. I'm just a duck under the gun in the muck."
Have no clue about poker or most card games. Enjoyed the dialect-infused speech.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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Thank you, lyenochka. You are the first reviewer to give me a final line. Bill
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I got the "under the gun" and "muck" terms from a poker terminology site. ☺
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Nice!
Comment from Thomas Bowling
The big winner is the bobcat. He eats the other players. He should have held out he won the pot. If he had played longer he would have won more hands, and then feasted.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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The big winner is the bobcat. He eats the other players. He should have held out he won the pot. If he had played longer he would have won more hands, and then feasted.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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The bobcat was actually a declawed, transgender, vegetarian, as well as an undercover vice officer.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This fantasy script about duck and their world of play is fascinating with the lessons on living and playing; good narrative and dialogues are funny and humorous; I liked.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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This fantasy script about duck and their world of play is fascinating with the lessons on living and playing; good narrative and dialogues are funny and humorous; I liked.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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Thanks, ALD
Comment from Ulla
Wonderful, Bill, I liked it a lot and it made me laugh throughout. But I must concede defeat. I cannot provide a punch line. Not much help there. All the best. Ulla:))
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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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Wonderful, Bill, I liked it a lot and it made me laugh throughout. But I must concede defeat. I cannot provide a punch line. Not much help there. All the best. Ulla:))
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Comment Written 24-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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No takers on that punch line. I'm thinking of giving the duck the possum's personality and going for the 'wise quack' at the end.
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Not a bad idea at all. I wish.I could be of more help.
Comment from JanPerry
Exceptional. Very funny. I love the ideas for a script. Its very original, very clever indeed. It makes me feel good as I have a rapor for animals.
Only, its too long for a card game as I believe these guys wouldn't last that long before they flee away!
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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Exceptional. Very funny. I love the ideas for a script. Its very original, very clever indeed. It makes me feel good as I have a rapor for animals.
Only, its too long for a card game as I believe these guys wouldn't last that long before they flee away!
Comment Written 24-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2017
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Had to get them through five cards. Thanks for the exceptional review. Bill
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U could have them come back to finish the game. Gosh I can't even get a man to hang around so long!
