Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

I admit I see what I don't have - quite an admittance for 'Loverboy', in love with love. To me this is a sentimental journey of love and hope and emotions. Hope I'm someone near right. Enjoyed this one,
cheers
valda

 Comment Written 24-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017

YES! You are exactly right. Thank you. I'm hard to get most of the time because I just write. LOL Thanks a million. mike

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, Michael;
A very poignant and thought-provoking piece. Is this a bit biographical? One can be searching for love, and appearing like they haven't a care in the world. So, I can relate to the words. I marvel at the free verse, because you make it look so easy,

~patty~

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017

Thanks, Patty

It's biographical to a degree. Time isn't always now or then though. :))

Think of free verse as formal poetry where gremlins came in and scattered it around to suit themselves or A GREMLIN. ;)) mike

reply by Mustang Patty on 23-Oct-2017

LOL

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Truly marvelous free verse poem, my friend. I lvoe the striking closing note (pu intended).


Outstanding imagery, voicing, tone and tenor.

Superb originality.

Superb sculpting of cadences via formatting.


Superb flow.

Superb presentation!


Favorite bits:

am I truly a martyr
a lover
who requires
not


is there love
without
return

AND

why not a flutter
in my chest
where the pounding
is anvil dull
like shoes forged
for an old horse


No nits. It flows fine without punctuation. However, personally, I would opt to use question marks (no other punctuation) where appropriate.

The emotional overtones are exceptional!

Loved this. Wish I had six.

Love,
rd

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2017

As always, your approval is worth a million sixes. I guess I'm afraid it looks odd with question marks but no other punctuation. But I did add them as you suggested and actually it doesn't look strange at all really. I think it's just weirdness on my part. LOL
Thanks so much. I always think about spacing and punctuation now thanks to you. :)) mike

reply by rama devi on 22-Oct-2017

Hee hee - thanks for trying them out. To me, it looks odd to have a question without them! LOL glad you liked the idea. I's so pleased with how your finesse in sculpting phrasing has evolved, my friend.

Best, rd