Slow Touch
A sensual nod to the beauty of touch.17 total reviews
Comment from frierajac
It is a though you are hiding very close up in the senses and attempting to
give them the added grace of a rhyme to the meter. As if 'a tacit testing of all human hearts' refers to the 'affect', the emotional life expressed.
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It is a though you are hiding very close up in the senses and attempting to
give them the added grace of a rhyme to the meter. As if 'a tacit testing of all human hearts' refers to the 'affect', the emotional life expressed.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2017
Comment from RGstar
Nicely written author. Pockets of beautiful writing. Even though a tilt towards erotica, this could have been entered in the love poetry competition, such its diversity.
You certainly have the talent.
Good luck with your writing.
My best wishes.
RGstar
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Nicely written author. Pockets of beautiful writing. Even though a tilt towards erotica, this could have been entered in the love poetry competition, such its diversity.
You certainly have the talent.
Good luck with your writing.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
Comment from Pantygynt
This maintains the meter really well. You should join our meter Bleaters club if you enjoy this sort of thing.
It may be a matter of regional accent but I did find that "You rotate fingers warmly as you go" felt a little strained as, where I come from, we stress the second syllable of the word "rotate", so
"Rotate your fingers warmly as you go" sounds more iambic to me. Different regional pronunciations are the devil where metre is concerned and where someone obviously knows the drill for a particular metre, as you clearly do, I hesitate to criticise.
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This maintains the meter really well. You should join our meter Bleaters club if you enjoy this sort of thing.
It may be a matter of regional accent but I did find that "You rotate fingers warmly as you go" felt a little strained as, where I come from, we stress the second syllable of the word "rotate", so
"Rotate your fingers warmly as you go" sounds more iambic to me. Different regional pronunciations are the devil where metre is concerned and where someone obviously knows the drill for a particular metre, as you clearly do, I hesitate to criticise.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
Comment from patcelaw
This is beautifully written and has for me a message that is poignant/ I have been a widow now for twenty-two years and I can say the thing I miss the most is the touch of his loving hand as he hold me close. Patricia
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This is beautifully written and has for me a message that is poignant/ I have been a widow now for twenty-two years and I can say the thing I miss the most is the touch of his loving hand as he hold me close. Patricia
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there;
This poem is lovely. I like the rhyme and rhythm and the words took me down a sensuous path. Your piece certainly does remind us of the sensuality of just touching.
Thank you for sharing this well-written piece,
~patty~
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Hi there;
This poem is lovely. I like the rhyme and rhythm and the words took me down a sensuous path. Your piece certainly does remind us of the sensuality of just touching.
Thank you for sharing this well-written piece,
~patty~
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Slow Touch", is an extremely well-written and semi-erotic piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll keep reading.
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"Slow Touch", is an extremely well-written and semi-erotic piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll keep reading.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2017
Comment from Thomas Bowling
It sounds like you want a person with a slow hand. Never give up until you find that special person. This is an excellent poem with perfect rhythm. Keep looking.
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It sounds like you want a person with a slow hand. Never give up until you find that special person. This is an excellent poem with perfect rhythm. Keep looking.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2017
Comment from Liberty Justice
Five stars. Excellent use of literary devices like metaphors, personifications, and similies. Indeed, your verses flow with great anticipation of lovemaking and the suspense of what happens next. You have a creative eloquent way of wording these events with mystery and wantings. Check out mine also and my two books. thanks. lol liberty justice your friend.
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Five stars. Excellent use of literary devices like metaphors, personifications, and similies. Indeed, your verses flow with great anticipation of lovemaking and the suspense of what happens next. You have a creative eloquent way of wording these events with mystery and wantings. Check out mine also and my two books. thanks. lol liberty justice your friend.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2017
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A sensual write full of feeling and yearning. Love is something we all need and touching can be so satisfying and healing, a beautiful rhyming write, love Dolly x
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A sensual write full of feeling and yearning. Love is something we all need and touching can be so satisfying and healing, a beautiful rhyming write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Oct-2017
Comment from Brigitte Elko
This is an exciting blend of the old and the new style of writing poetry. You not only combine them well but the implication of time on the sensual and sexual love is subtly penned. The ending , as the beginning, bring this poem together for perfect closure. Well done my friend. One of my few six stars reserved for the best, is yours.
Fan Friend,
Brigitte
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2017
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This is an exciting blend of the old and the new style of writing poetry. You not only combine them well but the implication of time on the sensual and sexual love is subtly penned. The ending , as the beginning, bring this poem together for perfect closure. Well done my friend. One of my few six stars reserved for the best, is yours.
Fan Friend,
Brigitte
Comment Written 22-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much Brigitte. easy
