Comment from Octavia

Excellent

Interesting poem, Phillip.
Sounds like you had a very nice mom.

"So, I barged in and change the topic " either barge and change or barged and changed the topic. Keep tenses agreeing.

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thanks, Octavia. I changed it just now. You are a lifesaver.

Phillip

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Good

I enjoyed it. I thought the last stanza was especially strong. A couple of the rhymes did seem a little forced. Not sure what killing that white pigeon line was all about! That must be some family. But otherwise this was terrific. An enjoyable and well written poem.

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 Comment Written 20-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thanks, Michael. I happy that you read it.

Phillip

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very interesting and good poem you have penned about the conversation with your mom. It looks like you two talked about a lot, but did not bring up some things either. That was probably a good idea. Very good wording and great imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thanks, for reading, Teri7.

Phillip

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Phillip,

Well!! Look at you!! Working so hard to get along with your mom regardless of what anyone else does or says. I'm very proud of you!!

This was a very nice poem. I enjoyed the unexpected word choices and unusual rhymes. Good work!!

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thanks, Robyn

Phillip

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks that how one from his mother learns the art of expression and continues working in cooperation with others and today he is popular co-operator not agitator; I liked.

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thanks, for reading, Alcreator.

Phillip

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Yes you are so right, conversation is everything and it can either open things or close them completely. Nicelly done in message, a little rough in ease of reading

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

You are the best at this Poem writing, Barb. I'm just trying to improve my writing and make the poem limit.

Phillip

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Good for you to be a "cooperator" (like this new word!). And we all need more peace makers like you who consider the effects of speech. I think the "white pigeon" is symbolic of peace? After all, doves are a kind of pigeon.
A few minor points:
"Discussing politic mixed with religion " (politics)
"She never, oh never listen to hype " (listens)

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 Comment Written 20-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thank, lyenochka. You are my lifesaver.

Phillip