Cold Blue Yonder
Who am I? Too easy, I guess...18 total reviews
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Good morning, Maria: This was a very interesting assignment for this Fabulous Free Versers club. Your entry is great but I am puzzled as to who it is. You read so much more than i do so i would probably never guess who it is. It sounds like someone who is committing suicide in the water. The rocks in the pockets are supposed to make this person down into the water and stay down long enough to drown, I suppose. Am I right about this much?
It is a sad poem but is a splendid job with it. I do feel for this character.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Good morning, Maria: This was a very interesting assignment for this Fabulous Free Versers club. Your entry is great but I am puzzled as to who it is. You read so much more than i do so i would probably never guess who it is. It sounds like someone who is committing suicide in the water. The rocks in the pockets are supposed to make this person down into the water and stay down long enough to drown, I suppose. Am I right about this much?
It is a sad poem but is a splendid job with it. I do feel for this character.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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You're totally right. I'll give you a clue. She was a famous British writer.
Thanks for your review, Tier.
Comment from Sis Cat
Maria, I cannot identify the subject of your poem but I enjoyed your free verse anyway. To me it describes a person committing suicide by drowning. I do not know why, but I thought of Virginia Wolfe who died by drowning. When I looked it up I discovered she had filled her pockets with stones and walked into the River Ouse, thus your lines:
I'm walking on,
I don't look back.
Deeper and deeper
Till I have sunk.
This was a great loss to world literature. I take a little solace in your fine tribute to a superb writer who "feels no more."
Thank you for sharing the results of your challenge.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Maria, I cannot identify the subject of your poem but I enjoyed your free verse anyway. To me it describes a person committing suicide by drowning. I do not know why, but I thought of Virginia Wolfe who died by drowning. When I looked it up I discovered she had filled her pockets with stones and walked into the River Ouse, thus your lines:
I'm walking on,
I don't look back.
Deeper and deeper
Till I have sunk.
This was a great loss to world literature. I take a little solace in your fine tribute to a superb writer who "feels no more."
Thank you for sharing the results of your challenge.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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You guessed correctly, Andre.
Thanks for reading.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written free verse poem. It seems like someone who wants to end their own life by walking into the cold blue water until there are more life inside them andvtheu become one with the dark nothingness.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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A very well-written free verse poem. It seems like someone who wants to end their own life by walking into the cold blue water until there are more life inside them andvtheu become one with the dark nothingness.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Exactly. Do you know who the person is?
Thanks for reading.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Maria
= I like your interpretation of the prompt.
= I've written mine, but want to tweak it a bit more before posting.
= Fun challenge. You did an excellent job.
= Love you picture choice--serene.
Cheers, J (*<*)
Have a good day/evening!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Hi, Maria
= I like your interpretation of the prompt.
= I've written mine, but want to tweak it a bit more before posting.
= Fun challenge. You did an excellent job.
= Love you picture choice--serene.
Cheers, J (*<*)
Have a good day/evening!
Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Thanks for reading, Jax.
I also like the picture very much.
Comment from DR DIP
It's funny Maria, I love your words in this write and your structure but it is rather cryptic and I have read it several times trying to get the right interpretation. You say it is too easy. Well I am struggling to guess I will continue to work on it.
dip
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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It's funny Maria, I love your words in this write and your structure but it is rather cryptic and I have read it several times trying to get the right interpretation. You say it is too easy. Well I am struggling to guess I will continue to work on it.
dip
Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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I can give you a clue, Mark. The narrator is a famous British writer who killed herself by walking into a river with stones in her pockets.
Thanks for reading.
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bloody hell They must have been big stones! funny way to get your rocks off! lol
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem with such good descriptive wording and really beautiful art work you have chosen. You did a really great job with this! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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This is a very well written poem with such good descriptive wording and really beautiful art work you have chosen. You did a really great job with this! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Thanks for reading, Teri. Have a lovely day.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks that man may sometime wish to act like someone popular or consider himself his own favourite poet or philosopher or artist but whatever one should be a real person; I liked.
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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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This speaks that man may sometime wish to act like someone popular or consider himself his own favourite poet or philosopher or artist but whatever one should be a real person; I liked.
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Well, in fact, I was talking about a famous British writer who committed suicide... ;)
Thanks for reading.
Comment from Irish Rain
I don't know who this is. Somebody who obviously drowned themselves...but they were very poetic...I love the phrase, 'I live in silver.' Beautiful, blessings...
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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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I don't know who this is. Somebody who obviously drowned themselves...but they were very poetic...I love the phrase, 'I live in silver.' Beautiful, blessings...
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Yes, I'll give you a clue. The narrator was a famous woman writer who committed suicide by walking into a river outside her home.
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Plath stuck her head in the oven...Virginia Wolfe?
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Yes. ;)
