Graffiti
modified haibun10 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I was getting gas Thursday after work, and went inside the store to get a diet 7up. The man in front of me had swastikas all tattooed all over his arms and legs, even his neck. To be honest I was appalled. I didn't say anything, but I could tell the lady waiting on him was also upset. I am still upset by it.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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I was getting gas Thursday after work, and went inside the store to get a diet 7up. The man in front of me had swastikas all tattooed all over his arms and legs, even his neck. To be honest I was appalled. I didn't say anything, but I could tell the lady waiting on him was also upset. I am still upset by it.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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It's just ugly and wrong. I can't imagine how such things aren't simply condemned in no uncertain terms. No tolerance as far as I'm concerned. Oh well, you can imagine a long rambling speech right about HERE ..... LOL mike
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Michael;
In your attempt to be less vague, you've given us words that can be interpreted in many ways. One of the thoughts that came to mind was the thoughts of an extremist who ends up taking his guns and going on a wild spree, and the other is of someone who hangs their head in shame and hurt over what this country has become,
Well written and well presented. I enjoyed this poem and the deep thoughts it gave me,
~patty~
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Hi, Michael;
In your attempt to be less vague, you've given us words that can be interpreted in many ways. One of the thoughts that came to mind was the thoughts of an extremist who ends up taking his guns and going on a wild spree, and the other is of someone who hangs their head in shame and hurt over what this country has become,
Well written and well presented. I enjoyed this poem and the deep thoughts it gave me,
~patty~
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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I'm pleased it gave you pause to think. I can't ask for more. Thanks so much, Patty. mike
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Mikey, your work is never vague in my opinion. Some readers want everything spelled out for them so they don't have to think. This is a very moving write. You are on one heck of a roll, my friend. I always look forward to your work~Debbie
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Mikey, your work is never vague in my opinion. Some readers want everything spelled out for them so they don't have to think. This is a very moving write. You are on one heck of a roll, my friend. I always look forward to your work~Debbie
Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Aww ... you're too kind. I'm so pleased you enjoyed. I think we're on the same wavelength as I always have the same reaction to your work as well. I'm never lost and I always "get it". It's probably that we're both geniuses. :)) mike
Comment from Heather Knight
I like it, but I'm not sure I get it. So that's your answer.
The mention of Shangri La, plus the picture of the Statue of Liberty make me think of the American dream.
There's also a nightmarish quality about your poem ( the words, the images) that I love.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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I like it, but I'm not sure I get it. So that's your answer.
The mention of Shangri La, plus the picture of the Statue of Liberty make me think of the American dream.
There's also a nightmarish quality about your poem ( the words, the images) that I love.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Yes! You do get it. All of that is a part of it. An immigrant seeking the American Dream and arriving here and finding that it may not be here any longer (the nightmare). With free verse, a lot of it is just impressions and feelings. Thanks so much for reading and giving your impressions. THAT is what we LOVE to hear. :)) mike
Comment from DR DIP
Michael I have been reading your poetry for a while now and you are definitely the thinking poet's poet. I always read your poems a few times aloud to take them in This one wasn't as cryptic or long So I got into it thanks for sharing
dip
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Michael I have been reading your poetry for a while now and you are definitely the thinking poet's poet. I always read your poems a few times aloud to take them in This one wasn't as cryptic or long So I got into it thanks for sharing
dip
Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Great to hear. I tried to be a little less vague than usual. I know I can get "out there" sometimes. LOL
Thanks a million. mike
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Michael,
Not vague, I get it. I love haibun poems. It's such a great combination of prose and poetry.
I like how you described America, "a land soaked in love, fanatic with freedom, haughty with hope and fixed in faith" I love it. Nice alliteration.
I like the picture too. Stupid white supremacists. Great choice for your presentation.
Well done, honey.
gypsy hugs
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Hello, Michael,
Not vague, I get it. I love haibun poems. It's such a great combination of prose and poetry.
I like how you described America, "a land soaked in love, fanatic with freedom, haughty with hope and fixed in faith" I love it. Nice alliteration.
I like the picture too. Stupid white supremacists. Great choice for your presentation.
Well done, honey.
gypsy hugs
Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Aww, thank you. Most people have no idea what I'm talking about. LOL
White supremacists suck. Glad you liked this. One of my Statue of Liberty themed poems. I seem to be on a kick for those lately. Thanks a million. Trying to catch up. :)) mike
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haibun. There ate many different cultures and religions each one different from the other. To understand another's culture is to accept and respect each other in their differences, then there will be peace in the world.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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A very well-written haibun. There ate many different cultures and religions each one different from the other. To understand another's culture is to accept and respect each other in their differences, then there will be peace in the world.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Beautifully put, Sandra
Thanks so much, mike
Comment from sandy montgomery
Not vague at all. Beautifully crafted. I think this is a great social commentary piece. No matter which side of the aisle you are on no one can deny we live in a troubled and divided world. We'll done. Thank you for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Not vague at all. Beautifully crafted. I think this is a great social commentary piece. No matter which side of the aisle you are on no one can deny we live in a troubled and divided world. We'll done. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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So true. Hopefully both sides will see that it is in everyone's interest to reach a solution. Thanks so much. mike
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Whoever wrote that bit of graffiti really did show the powur(??) of the white man. Goodness me, what an idiot. Your poem is very subtle, Mike. I loved the prose style writing, with the foldover rhyme carried on into the following lines. To read it aloud is amazing, it's the way I wish I could stand up and speak in the writers' group I attend. Well done, my friend, it was a pleasure to read. Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Whoever wrote that bit of graffiti really did show the powur(??) of the white man. Goodness me, what an idiot. Your poem is very subtle, Mike. I loved the prose style writing, with the foldover rhyme carried on into the following lines. To read it aloud is amazing, it's the way I wish I could stand up and speak in the writers' group I attend. Well done, my friend, it was a pleasure to read. Sandra xxx
Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Thanks so much, Sandra
I'd love to think you read THIS to your group. :))
I've been working on rhyme and rhythm and trying to make my free verse READABLE. Soooo, I'm thrilled you enjoyed it and found it a good read. mike
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Actually, Mike, I did, I'm sorry I didn't ask your permission but it was on the same night that I reviewed it. I also must tell you, it was very well received. I think some of the members are going to join FS now. They were all asking me questions about it after I'd read your poem so it turned out to be a really interesting evening for them. xxx
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Gee. I'm so honoured and humbled. Thanks so much. Naw, you don't have to ask. I'm thrilled I wrote something anyone had the slightest interest in. :)) mike
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Wow this is excellent of one wishing and praying for a life of dreams and yet the pain of reality enters and takes over. Excellently done
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Wow this is excellent of one wishing and praying for a life of dreams and yet the pain of reality enters and takes over. Excellently done
Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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Thanks Ms. Barb. I'm so pleased you enjoyed. It's wonderful to be understood. :)) mike
