Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

Back on the romantic theme in this one that has a really good rhythm to it. I think I would have said, "We are blessed BY those above" rather than "from" for two reasons. First for the alliteration and consonance it gives on the "B" and second because, although blessings come FROM we tend to speak of beaing blessed BY. Just a wee thought to be be going on with.

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thanks so much Panty. I have changed it on your advice Thankyou.
Always appreciate your input

dip

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

Dio, this poem makes me long to have my husband back for one more hugs and slobbery kiss. We were married for almost 37 years, which now 22 years later seems like a lifetime. Patricia

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thanks Pat I am glad it struck an emotion with you. Thanks for the lovely comments

dip

Comment from Asem.inspirations

Excellent

Good morning, DIP:

I love the title and the words of this poem and I really love it that you have attached this video. "Throw your arms around me" there's nothing like the warmth of a necessary hug or just a regular hug, just because -- from the one you love.

I must remember to ask Tom for some step by step rules of hoe to post videos and to use the advanced editor correctly. I still keep failing at it. GREAT JOB!

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

I only just learnt how to do it recently and it really is quite easy
GO TO YOUTUBE AND PICK THE CLIP YOU WANT
As it is playing click in the clip in the middle and the symbol <> will appear very quickly hit embed video then go to your post and in the space where authors notes are right click and hit save and a serious of letters and numbers will appear if you were successful

Thanks for your review as always

dip

reply by Asem.inspirations on 20-Oct-2017

Oh okay I will try this with my next, thank you.

Comment from Mitchell Brontė

Excellent

Beautifully written, nice rhyming throughout and the lines .........heartfelt
Another excellent love poem Dip...............
Enjoyed the song as well.
Mitchell

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thanks so much Mitchell if you want to hear the original song by Hunters and collectors THROW YOUR ARMS AROUND ME on youtube.

dip

Comment from Daniel Silverhawk

Excellent

This is another very good poem with Tha abab rhyme scheme. These are my favorite poems to read and usually, to write. You teach me so much about my own writing.
Just a couple suggestions, if I may. Your is misspelled in the title as "you". And, I feel the title should be primarily capitalized except for words such as "and" "of" and other prepositions (I think they are called)but it helps the title to stand out - unless you are looking for a particular look to the poem as a whole.
This is a great poem. I'm sure your wife will love it as well

Thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thanks for picking up on that spelling error Daniel much appreciated.
Fanstory doesn't allow one to Capitalize in upper font the whole title.
Thank you for commenting as always.

dip

reply by Daniel Silverhawk on 20-Oct-2017

I'm not sure what you are saying as far as fanstory not allowing capitalization of every word in the title. I have not had that experience. All my titles have been capitalized to my wishes including the title "An unSentenced Life" unSentenced is capitalized according to my own invention.
Keep up the great work

reply by Daniel Silverhawk on 20-Oct-2017

Actually, title I made reference to is: "unWilling to Work"

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Hey dip, this is catchy little tune. It's your funky rhythm, which is signature you, even though it's a tad more frisky than your usual fare it's still all in good fun.

Gloria

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 Comment Written 20-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thankyou so Much Gloria I always appreciate your comments and reviews.

dip

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem about love and what we like the other person to do and react on your advances. When two people embrace with arms around each other the one thing leads to another. Lol.

Typo
There's no need to be dicreet(discreet)

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 Comment Written 20-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017

Thanks so much Sandra i fixed the spag much appreciated

dip