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Comment from royowen
I loved this, obviously the balding body builder wasn't used to being spoken back to, I once dreamed of the bully standing down when I was a boy. A wonderful outcome to a tense situation. Excellent entry in this contest, most enjoyable, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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I loved this, obviously the balding body builder wasn't used to being spoken back to, I once dreamed of the bully standing down when I was a boy. A wonderful outcome to a tense situation. Excellent entry in this contest, most enjoyable, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Thanks, royowen.
Phillip
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Well done
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Thanks, royowen
Phillip
Comment from country ranch writer
That's one way to get him off your ass. What goes around comes around and he happened to come to the end of his when he ran into the wrath of God
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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That's one way to get him off your ass. What goes around comes around and he happened to come to the end of his when he ran into the wrath of God
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Hahaha! country ranch writer, you are a riot.
Phillip
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Lol
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Lol
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Smiles
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Smiles
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Smiles
Comment from Brigitte Elko
I like the balding body builder image. Good short story for General submission. I am a stickler for details, so here goes: 3rd line from the bottom...period?, reverse this to be grammatically correct. ?. That's just me, a former teacher. Nicely done friend. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
fan friend,
Brigitte
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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I like the balding body builder image. Good short story for General submission. I am a stickler for details, so here goes: 3rd line from the bottom...period?, reverse this to be grammatically correct. ?. That's just me, a former teacher. Nicely done friend. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
fan friend,
Brigitte
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Ok, I will check it out., Thanks, Brigitte.
Phillip
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You are welcome.
Brigitte
Comment from Octavia
Definitely getting muuh better, Phillip. Good for you! You built up the suspense nicely and I am wondering what happens next. Just what opening lines are supposed to do.
Well done.
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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Definitely getting muuh better, Phillip. Good for you! You built up the suspense nicely and I am wondering what happens next. Just what opening lines are supposed to do.
Well done.
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Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Thanks, Octavia.
Phillip
