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Lai6 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
So you're straying off into the esoteric now are you Ellijay? I like the phonetics in the title. It sounds like a gun's ricochet. It's a sound I prefer on drums though.
Some vivid and not so pleasant imagery in this one, but it is signature authentic you.
Gloria
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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So you're straying off into the esoteric now are you Ellijay? I like the phonetics in the title. It sounds like a gun's ricochet. It's a sound I prefer on drums though.
Some vivid and not so pleasant imagery in this one, but it is signature authentic you.
Gloria
Comment Written 18-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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The title is a corruption of Edwin Starr lyrics..."War! Huh! Good God, Y'all! What is it good for?"" We played those anti-war 1960s songs a lot--in the barracks. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing. I fear this poetic style is not me, exactly.
Comment from country ranch writer
People have no value for life. Where did God go wrong turning this would into a shooting match? What give one the right to take a life of innocents? Satan is a foot in this and the world is going to hell taking others to hell with him. What goes around comes around Sata so watch your back
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2017
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People have no value for life. Where did God go wrong turning this would into a shooting match? What give one the right to take a life of innocents? Satan is a foot in this and the world is going to hell taking others to hell with him. What goes around comes around Sata so watch your back
Comment Written 18-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2017
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They say Satan's first order of business is convincing us he does not exist. Some bad things that happen every day sure look like his work. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Lai poem. It seems like a difficult format that you have mastered. A great subject choice too. As old as the human race is, is how long human lives n conflict with each other.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2017
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A very well-written Lai poem. It seems like a difficult format that you have mastered. A great subject choice too. As old as the human race is, is how long human lives n conflict with each other.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2017
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I followed the directions and this is what came out. Another form I don't expect to use much. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from JennaG
Your Lai poem is well written and makes a powerful statement about the frightening world we live in today. I like that you chose not to use any artwork. This leads the reader to pay more attention to your words which are strong and well-thought-out.
Thank you for giving this form a try! :)
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2017
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Your Lai poem is well written and makes a powerful statement about the frightening world we live in today. I like that you chose not to use any artwork. This leads the reader to pay more attention to your words which are strong and well-thought-out.
Thank you for giving this form a try! :)
Comment Written 18-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2017
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Edwin Starr gave me the title, and Frank Yerby and others the idea of a chivalrous code. The Lai is not an easy form for me. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from damommy
This is a scary and brutal time to live in. More than any other, I think.
You've done well with the lai form, and showed how there are hidden dangers in our country.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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This is a scary and brutal time to live in. More than any other, I think.
You've done well with the lai form, and showed how there are hidden dangers in our country.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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The amount of genocides and killing fields would get us kicked out of the Star Trek Federation, for sure. Thanks very much for reading my attack on the Lai. I don't think I see any reason to use it often.
Comment from Priest B. Brown
As I read this very intense poem, I see the social commentary embedded in it.
"Bushwhacker yet he
said hero to be--
sniper.
Hides in land of free,
mangles you and me"
The injustice and cavalier attitudes that will take life and oppress others is the blight of our land.
Great piece.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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As I read this very intense poem, I see the social commentary embedded in it.
"Bushwhacker yet he
said hero to be--
sniper.
Hides in land of free,
mangles you and me"
The injustice and cavalier attitudes that will take life and oppress others is the blight of our land.
Great piece.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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I don't think that men are averaging any worse or better than ever. We just have so many people and so much media coverage.
TV shows where cops sweat suspects and slap them around give people and cops ideas. Too many countries are pressure cookers about to explode. Thnaks very much for reading and reviewing.
