Honesty
A mother and daughter share coffee.5 total reviews
Comment from apky
Always the curious denial of abused women that is never easy to justify. Then they start stumbling all over their own words, making the fact that they're not telling the truth crystal clear.
I liked the the oblique and clever way you tell the story.
Well done.
If it's reported speech, not thought, then you need to add the open quote: (")So, it's easier to lie to your mother, and yourself?"
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2017
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Always the curious denial of abused women that is never easy to justify. Then they start stumbling all over their own words, making the fact that they're not telling the truth crystal clear.
I liked the the oblique and clever way you tell the story.
Well done.
If it's reported speech, not thought, then you need to add the open quote: (")So, it's easier to lie to your mother, and yourself?"
Comment Written 17-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2017
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Thank you for your appreciation and fine rating.
Comment from jenintorre
A very sad dribble flash fiction. An all too familiar story told in only fifty words.
Very concisely written. I wish you lots of luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2017
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A very sad dribble flash fiction. An all too familiar story told in only fifty words.
Very concisely written. I wish you lots of luck in the competition.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2017
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Thank you for the appreciation and associated stars. Good luck in your own writing.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about a discussion on sharing a cup of coffee between a mother and daughter; mater came a violent turn; daughter had to take a decision proving to be true to herself; I liked.
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This speaks about a discussion on sharing a cup of coffee between a mother and daughter; mater came a violent turn; daughter had to take a decision proving to be true to herself; I liked.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2017
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Glad you liked it and thank you for the fine rating!
Comment from pbomar1115
Wow. Having a conversation with an abused woman--sadly to admit--produced a winner. It made me feel the anger the mother had and the fear the daughter concealed. Great piece.
Phillip
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2017
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Wow. Having a conversation with an abused woman--sadly to admit--produced a winner. It made me feel the anger the mother had and the fear the daughter concealed. Great piece.
Phillip
Comment Written 17-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2017
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Appreciate you appreciation, and thanks for the nice rating.
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You're welcome.
Phillip
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
That last line tells the whole tale in itself, doesn't it. Well written little piece.
So, it's easier to lie to your mother, and yourself?" - need opening speech marks here.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2017
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Hi there,
That last line tells the whole tale in itself, doesn't it. Well written little piece.
So, it's easier to lie to your mother, and yourself?" - need opening speech marks here.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2017
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Thanks for your appreciation, the stars, and the boo-boo catch.
