The Jilting of Jenny
a page from a story 1229 words5 total reviews
Comment from frierajac
I'm sure you must have had many fine comments on this. Reading it reminded me of the word, 'flibberty gibbet' as I guess it is a slang noun or a metaphor for a
particular type of character, perhaps the young person in this who leaves the
old Gramps in the lurch.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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I'm sure you must have had many fine comments on this. Reading it reminded me of the word, 'flibberty gibbet' as I guess it is a slang noun or a metaphor for a
particular type of character, perhaps the young person in this who leaves the
old Gramps in the lurch.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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This is a page from a story, and nothing is quite what it seems at first glance, but yes, it would seem that the protagonist
has been misled by a passing fanny. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from apky
I like your use of slangs that come from the region. You also do a great job with vivid descriptiopns that bring the scenes to a reader's imagination.
I had some minor trouble at the beginning which quickly levelled out as I got into the story. l felt sorry for both Jenny and poor Tee Mott.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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I like your use of slangs that come from the region. You also do a great job with vivid descriptiopns that bring the scenes to a reader's imagination.
I had some minor trouble at the beginning which quickly levelled out as I got into the story. l felt sorry for both Jenny and poor Tee Mott.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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It's a major chore to make a part of a story stand strong all on its own. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing this page.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is very well written, my friend. Interesting and well thought out and worded. I have never tried a pickled egg and don't ever intend to. I love the accidental--sort of--great one. Take care, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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This is very well written, my friend. Interesting and well thought out and worded. I have never tried a pickled egg and don't ever intend to. I love the accidental--sort of--great one. Take care, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2017
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Pickled eggs are delicious, depending on the skill of the pickler and the choice of herbs to add to the vinegar. They have to be hard-boiled to begin. Thanks very much for reading my page, and the sixth star makes my day!
Comment from KNim
I loved the use of "local slang" and your description sets the scene very well.
That being said, I have to admit at first reading, I was confused. The opening seemed disjointed (who was widow Hardy...she was never mentioned again?) Once I saw this was a prequel and I read a second time, it made more sense to me. Your writing achieved it's mark...l felt bad for Jenny, but even worse for Tee Mott.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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I loved the use of "local slang" and your description sets the scene very well.
That being said, I have to admit at first reading, I was confused. The opening seemed disjointed (who was widow Hardy...she was never mentioned again?) Once I saw this was a prequel and I read a second time, it made more sense to me. Your writing achieved it's mark...l felt bad for Jenny, but even worse for Tee Mott.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was very enjoyable. The Coo-coo-ka-chew line was so funny. You have wonderful characters that really came alive in this story. And the story kept my interest. Great job.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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I thought this was very enjoyable. The Coo-coo-ka-chew line was so funny. You have wonderful characters that really came alive in this story. And the story kept my interest. Great job.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
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You, sir, are a gentleman and a scholar for such a morale-boosting review of a post that got a chilly reception indeed. I knew I did not write for everyone, and my writing is a hobby, with no plans to publish, but I do like for an occasional reader to speak his mind. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing and especially for the sixth star.
