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Grandpa's Alpha and Omega

He Came and was gone!

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Comment from Lulube
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Well I'm certainly glad you had some notes to go with this shorty. At first, my mouth was hanging open, then I read again, and yep, I thought you were a cold SOB, but then I read the notes, and well, I take back my thought. But a good job a summing things up in 4 lines.

lulube

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
    Hey, Lulube!
    Who to hell are you calling "SHORTY?" I'm 6' 2" and still growing! Suggestion! Before you go calling an Author a "SOB," read the damn notes. Now, the only positive words I see are, "I take back my thought. But a good job a summing things up in 4 lines." Are you listening? "I highly recommend, that you take a course in diplomacy, then white-out all of your negative thoughts. "Just a THOUGHT," Lulube! Best wishes for a great week ahead, "KILLER BEE!"
    :))) Bill (Junglefighter)
reply by Lulube on 05-Nov-2017
    Sorry I offended you, not intentional at all. Wasn't referring to you as shorty, I was referring to the 4 lines to the poem. I wasn't calling you an SOB, it was a first thought that I instantly got rid of when I read your notes. That is how your 4 lines hit me, sorry for being honest to the effect. So if you read the comments again, with your diplomacy, I'm sure you will read things differently. I think your work is awesome and you should lower that defense you got going on. and the only good bee is the bumble bee, very loyal and domestic, not known to attack unless threatened.

    lulube
reply by Lulube on 05-Nov-2017
    I feel that |I need to explain further because I am not the type to go around offending people on this site.
    First thing is, seeing a baby as your photo, next a "To grandpa" okay, the baby is saying something to grandpa, lastly the 4 lines that give the fighting imagery of the birth of this baby to having his footprints taken, (they do this in the hospital) to dying. just like that. hit me as being cold. So, that's how some ones work can be interpreted without the author having an inkling about it.

    lulube
Comment from gloria ...
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Aw, this is adorable with the cute lil baby telling grandpa some amazing facts of life. You covered the span of it all in just the required amount of syllables. :))

Best wishes to you in the contest. This is gonna be a tough contest for the judges.

Gloria

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
    Hi Gloria,
    Thank you for the review and kind words. Your taking time to read my work, "Is an honor!" So, British Columbia, Canada, huh? Been there--it's beautiful in late spring and summer. Are you listening, Gloria? "You are beautiful!" Just love the glasses. Guess what? I did not write, "Grandpa's Alpha and Omega" to win a contest, (never won with the committee judging) I wrote it for my grandpa and friends on FanStory. Hello, "My friend!"
    Bill
Comment from Joy Graham
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This is definitely a short poem. I think your author notes helped me understand it. I love the picture of the baby :) I always cringe that something awful might happen to the baby in the message. I think this poem tells the birth and long life followed by death? We leave our footprints behind as a way of saying we were there.

Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
    Hi Joy,
    Thanks for the review and kind words. Your taking time to read my work, "Is an honor!" Oh, my goodness! Calgary, Alberto, Canada, huh? Been there--"It's beautiful in late spring and summer." Hey! Congratulations on you're being published in the
    Saturday Evening Post. Your writing is awesome. Wishing you a great week ahead, happiness and good health.
    Bill
Comment from kathleenspalding
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Ah, that is so beautiful. A lovely tribute to your Grandpa with a great poem and beautiful use of picture, font, colors and format. Sorry I have no sixes left. Well done!

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017
    Hi Kathleen,
    Thanks for the review and kind words. Your taking time to read my work, "Is an honor!" Ah, I didn't want the sixth star--I just wanted "Your hug and friendship." Hello, friend! Best wishes for a great week ahead.
    Bill
reply by kathleenspalding on 04-Nov-2017
    You're welcome and thanks, hope you have a great weekend, too.
Comment from Paul Bownas
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A short life indeed! but not a bad one. I like the way life has been compacted, because to oneself life seems to last forever, but in the span of things it really is just a blink. I wonder how long it will be before we, like the dinosaurs, become extinct?

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
    Hello Paul,
    Thanks for the review and kind words. Your taking time to read my work, "Is an honor!" Small world, Cobrom, Victoria, Australia. Been there! So you are a World War II baby, huh? And as well, a Vietnam Veteran having spent seven years in the Royal Australian Navy, two-years of which, was in Submarines. A "SALUTE," my dear friend! My older cousin (fathers side) served in Vietnam as a Navy Seal, and was killed while on a mission in the Red River along the Mekong Delta. In Iraq, (1991) I had the distinct honor, of leading a Joint Services Commando Team in battle. Fighting along side me, was an Australian Commando from the 4th. Battalion. I'm here today--to say, "he saved my butt," a couple of times! He was strong like a chain when the guns were blazing and yet, "gentle as a lamb when the smoke had cleared away." Might I recommend, when the PDS syndrome knocks on your door--"don't let it in." Been there--done that! There are times, that I wanna beat my fist into the wall and scream; "God help me!" Then I seem to hear a voice whisper; "Help yourself, my Son--with the tools I have given you!" I'm still working with my tools, Paul--how bout you? When you're feeling down, and the demons are biting at your mind, it might help to go read my Novel, "The Colors of Courage!" It certainly clears my mind when I'm writing it--maybe it'll clear you'rs to read it. Best wishes on "Kicking the demons tail," my dear friend--"just use a bigger stick," OK?
    Respectfully,
    Bill (Junglefighter)
Comment from pome lover
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oh! I thought you meant he died as a baby. I'm glad you explained. Seems Grandpa left his mark on you, though you only describe his aching bones and reluctant entry into this world.
Wish you had given us a bit more about him so we could get to know him a little. And get to know you, too.
pome lover

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
    Greetings, my dear friend!
    Thanks for the review and kind words. Your taking time to read my work, "Is an honor!" Hey, y'all! How's everything in Texas, beautiful? Congratulations on your book, "The Worst Five Months Ever!" I'll order and read it. OK! If you wanna know more
    about my grandpa and myself, go read my Novel "A Truck Load of Hard Times!" I am presently working chapter 11 of 20. My
    cousin out in California is "Directing at MGM." We were "Joined-at-the-hips" as kids, while growing up in Pigeon Forge, TN.,
    better known as "Dollywood" now. We're meeting there next spring to discuss filming a family movie of my book--"IF"-- I can
    ever get the time to finish it up. Oh, I'm not making excuses! However, I am presently 1st. Vice Commander, National American Legion, Adviser to the Secretary of Defense for our Commando Operations in Iraq/Afghanistan, doing Speaking Presentations to raise $$$$ for our Little Angels in the St. Jude Children's Hospital in Memphis, TN., and that is not to mention--writing 4-novels. I have asked God; "Please! Give me another 24-hours in each day, Father!" "Do the best with the
    time I have given you, my Son," He answered! Best wishes for a great week ahead, my dear friend--"may the Angels touch
    your face!"
    Respectfully,
    Bill (Junglefighter)
reply by pome lover on 05-Nov-2017
    Bill - goodness, you are busy! You do, indeed, need more time in a day.
    Best of luck with your movie! I can't think of a better incentive for finishing that book!
    My little book is about bullying. Thank you so much for buying a copy - tho the publishers charged too much. Will look for yours, I guess, in your portfolio - since it's not finished?
    Texas is great, tho I'm ready for some cool weather.
    Good luck to you!
    Katharine - pome lover
Comment from mermaids
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You sum up life in few words. I like the line about the footprints, we do leave our footprints in life, it is our path. Excellent short poem that says much and makes the reader think.

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
    Oh, my God! "Six cats and a weenie dog." Dose your husband get anything to eat at all? I read your Profile--its commendable. God bless--for the kindness you offer up, "To our Angels in the Nursing Home." Thank you for the review, kind words, and walking along the pathway to my heart. Wishing you--"A great week ahead, good health and happiness always."
    Respectfully,
    Bill (Junglefighter)
reply by mermaids on 06-Nov-2017
    Three of the cats have passed on. We still have three cats, our wiener dog and two guinea pigs. Life is full. Elaine
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2017
    Hi beautiful,
    Sweet, Jesus! I would say; "Life is full!" Well, almost anyway, but you have room for this...
    "Best wishes for good health and happiness
    always." Did that fit, Elaine?
    Hugs,
    Bill
reply by mermaids on 09-Nov-2017
    Always a pleasure to read your words. Elaine
Comment from Angela VA
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This is a powerful poem. I'll bet your grandpa would have liked it. Maybe he is able to see it, where he is now. Thanks for sharing this work with us.

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
    Hello, Beautiful!
    I read your Profile--Its commendable. God bless--for your talent and gift to our kids, in tutoring them an in-depth knowledge in our way of life. Thanks for instilling in their minds--the pride to stand tall, proud and sing; "God bless America--my home, sweet home." Look up there on the pole, "Ole Glory is waving a SALUTE," to you, my dear friend. Please! Smile--then go have a piece of apple pie. Grandma is baking one, "Especially for you." Yummy, yummy! I can smell it cooking in the oven of the ole wood burning stove. Oh, I'll get it to you quick, "Before Grandpa eats it!" Thanks for the review and kind words. Your taking time to read my work, "Is an honor!" I look forward to reading you'rs as well! Wishing you a great week ahead, good health and happiness always.
    Respectfully,
    Bill (Junglefighter)
Comment from robyn corum
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Bill,

This is a smart little poem that sums up an entire life in just a few words. *smile* You know, they say it's what in that (-) dash on the headstone that's most important and it sounds like your grandfather was a cool guy. Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
    Hello, Beautiful!
    Your kind words, "Walks the pathway to my heart." Thanks for the review! Your taking time out to read my work, "Is an honor," sweetheart. Oh, yes! My grandpa was a "whippersnapper." Know what a whippersnapper is? If not--I'll tell you next time, OK?
    If you really want to know more about Grandpa and me, go read "Saying goodbye to Grandpa," Chapter 8 of "A Truck Load of Hard Times." Oh, what to..."you know?" I'm gonna tell you what a "Whippersnapper" is! In the Smoky Mountains back home
    in Tennessee, when we men get all ..."you know?" From looking at a woman who is, ..."you know again," we call her a beautiful, "Whippersnapper!" Now, don't you say, "I never share with you. Of course, you only write to say, "I love you, Bill!" You never come to see me. If you will--"I'll buy you something pretty!" Thanks again, Robyn, for stopping by and reading my work. Wishing you a great week ahead, good health and happiness always.
    Respectfully,
    Bill (Junglefighter)
reply by robyn corum on 05-Nov-2017
    Happily married, Bill. Happily married.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
    Shucks! I never have luck anymore. Guess I'll just have to play "my ace in the hole," huh? I'm so happy--"your happily married," my beautiful friend. God bless!
    XXBill
reply by robyn corum on 05-Nov-2017
    I thought you had a relationship with one of the lady poets here, Jim...?
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
    Hey, beautiful! My name is Bill--not Jim. Just so you know something about me; "I am flamboyant, flirty, friendly and just plain love people in this beautiful world we live in. Guess what? "I thought," is two painful words at times. I thought, "The Isis guerrillas--would not shoot me in the ..."oh, you know?" Ouch! Are you listening, Robyn? My name is Bill--not Jim!
    XXBill
reply by robyn corum on 05-Nov-2017
    Sorry for the goof. I obviously know what your name is -- I used it right at the beginning. *smile* (My mind is not what it used to be, unfortunately.)

    I didn't mean to offend. Thanks!
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
    Oh, your mind is "sharp as a tack," so knock it off you "silly-goose!" So, you goofed--welcome to the real world, and see the beauty that God created for all of us. I am smiling, Robyn--"and you made me do it!"
    XXBill
Comment from jaded831
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Death is not a pleasant topic, yet you managed to make the subject enjoyable. Your words express the old saying we die so others can live. The picture drew me in, I'm glad I stopped by, your poem helped getting older easier.

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2017


reply by the author on 05-Nov-2017
    Hi, Carolyn Marie Baatz!
    I just read your Profile Biography--It is awesome! Are you listening? "You are a beautiful woman--inside and out!" You said; "My poem helped getting older easier!" Sweet, Jesus! You look like a kid, playing in the sand-box, who is having so much fun, that you wouldn't stop to go potty--and ..."oh, you know?" Age is a psychological knock--"open the door when you're ready," my dear friend. Thank you for the review and kind words. Your taking time out to read my work, "Is an honor!" Wishing you a great week ahead, good health and happiness always.
    Respectfully,
    Bill (Junglefighter)