Slowly letting the mind glow
picture prompt for October 617 total reviews
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, really well constructed - while just a bit uneven in rhyme in a couple spots, it in no way detracts from the quality of the write. This is so easily corrected, simply by reading the poem aloud several times and adding, deleting or changing words. I do it all the time with my writing - I think I revise more than I write...
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In my opinion, really well constructed - while just a bit uneven in rhyme in a couple spots, it in no way detracts from the quality of the write. This is so easily corrected, simply by reading the poem aloud several times and adding, deleting or changing words. I do it all the time with my writing - I think I revise more than I write...
Comment Written 13-Oct-2017
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Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
This is such a sweet and darling poem you penned on this picture challenge.
I love the first verse:
"Slowly letting the mind glow
Finding ways for dreams to flow
Along the years memory flies
With longing for these precious ties"
there all so wonderful, the last stanza has a bit of sadness to it. Wonderfully done, my friend. ~Kerry
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
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This is such a sweet and darling poem you penned on this picture challenge.
I love the first verse:
"Slowly letting the mind glow
Finding ways for dreams to flow
Along the years memory flies
With longing for these precious ties"
there all so wonderful, the last stanza has a bit of sadness to it. Wonderfully done, my friend. ~Kerry
Comment Written 13-Oct-2017
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Comment from Liberty Justice
Five stars for you, dear poet. Reminds one of their own school days, when young minds were learning. Very inspiration poems and words prompting children to learn and work together. liberty justice
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Five stars for you, dear poet. Reminds one of their own school days, when young minds were learning. Very inspiration poems and words prompting children to learn and work together. liberty justice
Comment Written 13-Oct-2017
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Comment from Irish Rain
I used to love learning also. I still do, when its reading something. But try to teach me computer skills, or modern technology, my mind shuts down. I have no interest, period. I guess that's getting old. Or, maybe I'm just satisfied 'as is.' Ha ha....loved this, blessings....
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2017
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I used to love learning also. I still do, when its reading something. But try to teach me computer skills, or modern technology, my mind shuts down. I have no interest, period. I guess that's getting old. Or, maybe I'm just satisfied 'as is.' Ha ha....loved this, blessings....
Comment Written 12-Oct-2017
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Comment from Angela VA
Your poem looks at the beauty and freedom of being young with a quick and inquisitive mind. Growing older can mean not being so quick of mind. I definitely feel that as I age, like the fact that I can't remember the combination of a padlock that I have used for years. Your poem flows well and expresses your thoughts clearly.
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Your poem looks at the beauty and freedom of being young with a quick and inquisitive mind. Growing older can mean not being so quick of mind. I definitely feel that as I age, like the fact that I can't remember the combination of a padlock that I have used for years. Your poem flows well and expresses your thoughts clearly.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2017
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Comment from Heather Knight
So true... When we are young it's so easy to learn new things. I have never lost that eagerness, I love to keep on studying, but of course it's not so easy to memorize things.
Thanks for sharing your take on this picture.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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So true... When we are young it's so easy to learn new things. I have never lost that eagerness, I love to keep on studying, but of course it's not so easy to memorize things.
Thanks for sharing your take on this picture.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2017
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Comment from rama devi
Good reflective write on the theme of aging and the change in mental acuity. A unique response to the picture challenge. Well voiced with fine flow and rhymes. Inventive voicing. Fine work.
One suggestion:
Along the years(,) memory flies
With longing for these precious ties
Potent lines in context:
Learning comes with fear
That more is lost than near
I like your note:
How much I long for days when the mind would explore instead of wander.
Would love to see that woven into stanza somehow!
Warmly, rd
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Good reflective write on the theme of aging and the change in mental acuity. A unique response to the picture challenge. Well voiced with fine flow and rhymes. Inventive voicing. Fine work.
One suggestion:
Along the years(,) memory flies
With longing for these precious ties
Potent lines in context:
Learning comes with fear
That more is lost than near
I like your note:
How much I long for days when the mind would explore instead of wander.
Would love to see that woven into stanza somehow!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 12-Oct-2017
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Comment from PoemsOfDD
Danpald, this is a good interpretation of the Picture Challenge. I found it quite reflective and sad at the same time. Being young with an eager mind ready to learn is something that youth can take for granted and not realise the importance of such times. As age creeps in it becomes much harder. If only there was a cure to longevity in memory and learning. Thank you for sharing this poem. ~DD
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Danpald, this is a good interpretation of the Picture Challenge. I found it quite reflective and sad at the same time. Being young with an eager mind ready to learn is something that youth can take for granted and not realise the importance of such times. As age creeps in it becomes much harder. If only there was a cure to longevity in memory and learning. Thank you for sharing this poem. ~DD
Comment Written 12-Oct-2017
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Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Dan
= So nice to see you pop up.
= Interesting how we look at going to school. As much as you liked it, I hated it. LOL
= Even now, I would NOT want to do it over.
= However, I would't mind taking a history class for the heck of it. Hated it back then.
= Strange, how we evolve.
= Excellent interpretation.
Cheers, J (*<*)
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Hi, Dan
= So nice to see you pop up.
= Interesting how we look at going to school. As much as you liked it, I hated it. LOL
= Even now, I would NOT want to do it over.
= However, I would't mind taking a history class for the heck of it. Hated it back then.
= Strange, how we evolve.
= Excellent interpretation.
Cheers, J (*<*)
Comment Written 11-Oct-2017
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Comment from Leineco
I particularly like the way you intentionally allowed the
rhyme scheme to slowly unravel as the poem progressed...
much like most of us perceive our own "intellectual"
abilities and endeavors to have, shall we say, degraded
with age.
Oh, how what once we took for granted has now become
(at times) our nemesis! ;-)
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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I particularly like the way you intentionally allowed the
rhyme scheme to slowly unravel as the poem progressed...
much like most of us perceive our own "intellectual"
abilities and endeavors to have, shall we say, degraded
with age.
Oh, how what once we took for granted has now become
(at times) our nemesis! ;-)
Comment Written 11-Oct-2017
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