The Missing Zebra
Story with exactly 50 words3 total reviews
Comment from Lucian Carter
I'm confused. So a zebra enters a video game, changes its skin pattern, and that makes it a cross-dresser? I literally have no idea what's going on here. It is fifty words, so you met the rules of the contest. Beyond that, I know some cross-dressers and they might be insulted by this. Good effort, nice joke in the notes.
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I'm confused. So a zebra enters a video game, changes its skin pattern, and that makes it a cross-dresser? I literally have no idea what's going on here. It is fifty words, so you met the rules of the contest. Beyond that, I know some cross-dressers and they might be insulted by this. Good effort, nice joke in the notes.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2017
Comment from teols2016
This is quite amusing. Zebras can be cunning. I do wonder how this one changed so much. Well done and best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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This is quite amusing. Zebras can be cunning. I do wonder how this one changed so much. Well done and best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Hello Teols. Thank you for your much appreciated compliments. If you really want to know, the inside info on the zebra's changing now is revealed in my author's notes.
Comment from moongirlwriter
Very cute story that my grandchildren would enjoy! The graphic also works perfectly with the story. I have one suggestion, I think the story flows better if you traded:
was spotted later. . .with "was later spotted", it seems to flow better for me, anyway. Fun story.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2017
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Very cute story that my grandchildren would enjoy! The graphic also works perfectly with the story. I have one suggestion, I think the story flows better if you traded:
was spotted later. . .with "was later spotted", it seems to flow better for me, anyway. Fun story.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2017
Thank you so much Moongirlwriter, for your splendid review and excellent suggestion, which I have gratefully taken, and, of course for your generous sixer.
Your comments are even more appreciated than you could have thought when you wrote them. They'd always be a pleasure to receive, but they are particularly encouraging now, because I just received a four from a reviewer who said he didn't understand it -"I literally have no idea what's going on here." (Maybe we could get one of your grandchildren to explain it to him?)
Thanks again for everything.
Don (aka Ogden)
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guess ya gotta have grandkids. You are welcome.
I think that reviewer is not in touch with the real world. . .whoever it is, they need to stop wriitng and come out and smell the fresh air now and then. :)
