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...a Picture This Poem50 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
Good satire and a fine ekphrastic response to the image. Good form and presentation. Excellent pivot line. The closing line is cliché but works well because it's got the extra oomph from the context. Good child-like POV and voicing.
No suggestions.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Good satire and a fine ekphrastic response to the image. Good form and presentation. Excellent pivot line. The closing line is cliché but works well because it's got the extra oomph from the context. Good child-like POV and voicing.
No suggestions.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 12-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my tanka for the 'Picture This Challenge.' I'm glad you enjoyed it,
~patty~
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:-)))
Comment from kahpot
WOW I find these words brilliant I think ( my view) two people may be cheating but realize ( as you say) two heads ( if we can agree) the answer will be the best ( right)
wouldn't it be great if all could put their heads together and we may come up with an answer very well said and done****kahpot
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WOW I find these words brilliant I think ( my view) two people may be cheating but realize ( as you say) two heads ( if we can agree) the answer will be the best ( right)
wouldn't it be great if all could put their heads together and we may come up with an answer very well said and done****kahpot
Comment Written 12-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Hi there;
thank you so much for the Exceptional rating of this piece. I enjoy the 'Picture This' challenges because they make me write ekphrastically, rather than writing, and then finding the artwork. I'm glad you enjoyed this one,
~patty~
Comment from sandy montgomery
Cooperation and friendship are expressed in your piece. I like your take on the challenge. I feel you met the challenge and created a charming poem. Thank you for sharing your work.
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Cooperation and friendship are expressed in your piece. I like your take on the challenge. I feel you met the challenge and created a charming poem. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my tanka for the 'Picture This Challenge.' I'm glad you enjoyed it,
~patty~
Comment from Leineco
Nicely done Patty :-)
-Effective pivot line
-Clearly reflects/sharpens the image used as prompt
-Great use of tanka's short/long/short/long/long format
-I really like the way your words sharpened my focus on the picture!
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Nicely done Patty :-)
-Effective pivot line
-Clearly reflects/sharpens the image used as prompt
-Great use of tanka's short/long/short/long/long format
-I really like the way your words sharpened my focus on the picture!
Comment Written 11-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my tanka for the 'Picture This Challenge.' I'm glad you enjoyed it,
~patty~
Comment from Aussie
I have read many of these contest entries. Yours is the best as far as bringing voice to the situation. You make the children come alive and that is a winner I think. Well done poet.
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I have read many of these contest entries. Yours is the best as far as bringing voice to the situation. You make the children come alive and that is a winner I think. Well done poet.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Hi, Aussie;
thank you so much for the Exceptional rating of this 'Picture This' challenge. I'm glad you felt I brought voice to the children in the forefront of the picture. Your kind words mean a great deal to me,
~patty~
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Most Welcome!
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Excellent contest entry!
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Children are so precious and will be our leaders one day. XXK.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Patty,
This is the third Picture This poem I read. I used to be part of it until they grow too big for me. I am glad you are having fun. You did a good job with yours. It's true, two heads think better than one.
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Hello, Patty,
This is the third Picture This poem I read. I used to be part of it until they grow too big for me. I am glad you are having fun. You did a good job with yours. It's true, two heads think better than one.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my tanka for the 'Picture This Challenge.' I'm glad you enjoyed it,
~patty~
Comment from gramalot8
Hi. This was great. Your words so captured for me the right feeling one gets as we look at this picture. I most definitely see those two young boys working together, reading together, trying to solve a problem together. Great job and thanks for sharing this with us. Gramalot8
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Hi. This was great. Your words so captured for me the right feeling one gets as we look at this picture. I most definitely see those two young boys working together, reading together, trying to solve a problem together. Great job and thanks for sharing this with us. Gramalot8
Comment Written 11-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my tanka for the 'Picture This Challenge.' I'm glad you enjoyed it,
~patty~
Comment from crzypnter
A well written poem stated in few words with a wonderful message. I also liked thepicture that was chosen. Fits thetheme. Thanks for sharing. God bless
August
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A well written poem stated in few words with a wonderful message. I also liked thepicture that was chosen. Fits thetheme. Thanks for sharing. God bless
August
Comment Written 11-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my tanka for the 'Picture This Challenge.' I'm glad you enjoyed it,
~patty~
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL! That was so funny! You did a grand job with this challenge, Patty.
I haven't written mine yet. It's good that we can promote them properly now. Well done, my friend. Sandra xxxx
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LOL! That was so funny! You did a grand job with this challenge, Patty.
I haven't written mine yet. It's good that we can promote them properly now. Well done, my friend. Sandra xxxx
Comment Written 11-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my tanka for the 'Picture This Challenge.' I'm glad you enjoyed it,
~patty~
Comment from apky
I only have a couple of hours a week, Patty.
But I enjoyed this one and it reminded me of my own school days.
Dis I tell you I have a foundation for talented but poor kids in Kenya? They are such joy to be with and work so hard they make me ashamed of the way I often treated
school as something I had to do - they love to go to school!
Talk soon,
Aki
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I only have a couple of hours a week, Patty.
But I enjoyed this one and it reminded me of my own school days.
Dis I tell you I have a foundation for talented but poor kids in Kenya? They are such joy to be with and work so hard they make me ashamed of the way I often treated
school as something I had to do - they love to go to school!
Talk soon,
Aki
Comment Written 11-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my tanka for the 'Picture This Challenge.' I'm glad you enjoyed it,
~patty~
