Comment from Sugarray77

Exceptional

Great story of a family celebrating Clampett style. Story flows well and is amplified by adding real touches about a soldiers' life and contrasting how his two worlds are so different.

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2017

Thanks :)

Comment from teols2016

Excellent

I definetly didn't know where this story was going and I was just as curious as the Sargent. Too bad for the sad ending. Well done and good luck.

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017

I'm glad to hear it left you in suspense. Do you think it'd be better with a happy ending?

reply by teols2016 on 10-Nov-2017

No, it works well as is.

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

This is certainly an unusual tale, a very well written and easy to follow. The dialogue that you created made the characters seem real. Well written and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017

Thank you for the feedback. Do you think it'd be better with a happy ending?

Comment from RodG

Excellent

This story is amusing and also very emotive as the reader quickly sympathizes with Private Jackson who generously gave his whole family a vacation and a pet. We also like Boyle who sincerely has the best interest of his men in mind. A delightful story with a sad but believable ending.

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2017

Thank you for the feedback. Do you think it'd be better with a happy ending?

reply by RodG on 10-Nov-2017

I recently entered two contests with entries that were sad or grim and quickly discovered voters prefer happy or positive works. Your present ending works for me, but you may discover I am in the minority. Rod