Skeleton Music
When Needs Must4 total reviews
Comment from Brigitte Elko
This is an entertaining limerick and i loved the picture. I read out loud more than once, the last line didn't flow for me with the other lines. No offense meant, just my opinion.
Good luck in the contest.
Fan Friend,
Brigitte
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
This is an entertaining limerick and i loved the picture. I read out loud more than once, the last line didn't flow for me with the other lines. No offense meant, just my opinion.
Good luck in the contest.
Fan Friend,
Brigitte
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
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you're right. think I could've done better, but wrote it in a hurry at the last minute. thanks for your good wishes
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My pleasure. truly fun to read.
Comment from moongirlwriter
very cute but the second line has too many syllables, it has 9. I like it because it makes Halloween fun and not scary. The artwork is so very cute too.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
very cute but the second line has too many syllables, it has 9. I like it because it makes Halloween fun and not scary. The artwork is so very cute too.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
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when - one syllable
alive - two syllables
played - one syllable
on - one syllable
xylophones - three syllables
total - eight syllables - right?
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Actually no, with xylophones, I think it's actually 4. If you say it out loud, you'll see: x' y' lo' phones'
I still loved it, such fun to read.
Comment from Bill Schott
This Halloween limerick, Skeleton Music, follows the beat of the limerick pretty close, and the humor of the situation is clear. Xylophone players are truly dedicated to the craft.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2017
This Halloween limerick, Skeleton Music, follows the beat of the limerick pretty close, and the humor of the situation is clear. Xylophone players are truly dedicated to the craft.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2017
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thanks, Bill. when I entered, there was only one skeleton in the limerick, but I could only find a picture of two, so had to change it on the spot.
Comment from RodG
I wonder if they played that oldie "Dry Bones." A fun limerick that made me chuckle. Interesting that these two were Latin. Had they once played in a mariachi band? Well-chosen rhymes.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
I wonder if they played that oldie "Dry Bones." A fun limerick that made me chuckle. Interesting that these two were Latin. Had they once played in a mariachi band? Well-chosen rhymes.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Dem bones, dem bones, dem dry bones? They prob'ly did.
Thanks for the neat review.