Bar stool babe
A sad character study.15 total reviews
Comment from Judvan2
Great concept and progression of thought. I love free verse with attitude. This is it! Good write. Good luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing. Judy
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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Great concept and progression of thought. I love free verse with attitude. This is it! Good write. Good luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing. Judy
Comment Written 30-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
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I really appreciate your comments. Thank you so much. Jen.
Comment from For better for verse
I'm sure I knew a girl like this once.
Great piece of writing, and very perceptive and true to life.
Have a night out in Manchester, you'll see what I mean.
Well done.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2017
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I'm sure I knew a girl like this once.
Great piece of writing, and very perceptive and true to life.
Have a night out in Manchester, you'll see what I mean.
Well done.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2017
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Thanks a lot.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You painted a colourful picture here and I could see this girl perfectly! I loved your poem and wish I had a six to give because your descriptions were spot on! Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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You painted a colourful picture here and I could see this girl perfectly! I loved your poem and wish I had a six to give because your descriptions were spot on! Love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much Dolly. I appreciate your comments. Jen (a fellow Brit.)
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I never understood why people thought they were so appealing and continued every night so desperate for anything. But then I have never been there yet. Very good descriptons in short strong phrases.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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I never understood why people thought they were so appealing and continued every night so desperate for anything. But then I have never been there yet. Very good descriptons in short strong phrases.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Yet?? Thanks. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your rather descriptive poem "Bar stool Babe". You rhymed it well and you chose a good sketch.
All the best
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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I enjoyed reading your rather descriptive poem "Bar stool Babe". You rhymed it well and you chose a good sketch.
All the best
Marybell1.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Thanks for your comments
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
Comment from Thesis
Hmmm, without looking, I know the type. I see her sitting there when I walk in and go to the other side of the bar. Unfortunate that she has such low self esteem that she waits for someone to either buy drinks or tell her sad tale to, but I have no patience. I want to drink hard, then go home to crash. Not prepared for drama.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Hmmm, without looking, I know the type. I see her sitting there when I walk in and go to the other side of the bar. Unfortunate that she has such low self esteem that she waits for someone to either buy drinks or tell her sad tale to, but I have no patience. I want to drink hard, then go home to crash. Not prepared for drama.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Gramma for reading.
Comment from robyn corum
Wow. Sounds like the kind of cool girl I'd wanna hang with -- oh, wait. Not.
*smile* Although that's not quite fair. She might be the salt of the earth and just had a few hard breaks. Sad how we have a tendency to judge people by looks, eh? I'll give her a second chance, I think. *smile* Thanks for sharing and good luck!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Wow. Sounds like the kind of cool girl I'd wanna hang with -- oh, wait. Not.
*smile* Although that's not quite fair. She might be the salt of the earth and just had a few hard breaks. Sad how we have a tendency to judge people by looks, eh? I'll give her a second chance, I think. *smile* Thanks for sharing and good luck!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Thanks for reading and commenting
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem and character study. The girl on the bar stool.night after night waiting for someone who need to take her away for a while she makes a lonely picture while waiting.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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A very well-written poem and character study. The girl on the bar stool.night after night waiting for someone who need to take her away for a while she makes a lonely picture while waiting.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2017
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Thanks for reading commenting.
Comment from DR DIP
Jen you have obviously seen this stereotype sitting at the bar like many of us What a sad life I must say. You have covered every feature of this girl in descriptive detail well done
dip
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Jen you have obviously seen this stereotype sitting at the bar like many of us What a sad life I must say. You have covered every feature of this girl in descriptive detail well done
dip
Comment Written 06-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much for your comments.I think we've all seen her.
Comment from Bill Schott
This character study poem, Bar Stool Babe, has the classic tells of a lounge lizard trying too hard to remain whatever age she skipped over between princess and everybody's-next-one.
Sun bed brown.... tattooed backside...fag-stained fingers
All great phrasing for this poem.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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This character study poem, Bar Stool Babe, has the classic tells of a lounge lizard trying too hard to remain whatever age she skipped over between princess and everybody's-next-one.
Sun bed brown.... tattooed backside...fag-stained fingers
All great phrasing for this poem.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much.
