from my window
haiku 4/7/428 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Enjoy the mood this haiku expresses. The world is framed in the window and the trees "wave" just like one would wave goodbye to someone. And the swiftness of the autumn breeze portends the coming of winter and the loss of leaves. Great use of the w alliteration and the rhymes of leaves and breeze.
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Enjoy the mood this haiku expresses. The world is framed in the window and the trees "wave" just like one would wave goodbye to someone. And the swiftness of the autumn breeze portends the coming of winter and the loss of leaves. Great use of the w alliteration and the rhymes of leaves and breeze.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2017
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Thank you, Lyenochka,, I appreciate you took the time to review my poem.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello Sister. I was so happy to see you today. Your verse is like a sweet hello to your friends to yourself. I've yet to master the haiku but, seems no need when I can read such a beautiful accounting with yours. Peace be with you always xoxo d
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Hello Sister. I was so happy to see you today. Your verse is like a sweet hello to your friends to yourself. I've yet to master the haiku but, seems no need when I can read such a beautiful accounting with yours. Peace be with you always xoxo d
Comment Written 04-Oct-2017
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Thank you, sister,, I appreciate you took the time to review my poem.
Comment from zanya
A beautiful cameo of Autumn portrayed eloquently here in the succinct format of the
Haiku evoking the seasonal blustery winds - and an appropriate pic to accompany
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A beautiful cameo of Autumn portrayed eloquently here in the succinct format of the
Haiku evoking the seasonal blustery winds - and an appropriate pic to accompany
Comment Written 04-Oct-2017
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Thank you, zanya,, I appreciate you took the time to review my poem.
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your 4-7-4 poem "From My Window". You had all your lines and syllables correct and you chose a lovely photo.
All the best.
Marybell1.
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I enjoyed reading your 4-7-4 poem "From My Window". You had all your lines and syllables correct and you chose a lovely photo.
All the best.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2017
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Thank you, Marybell, I appreciate you took the time to review my poem.
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
Comment from rama devi
Nice simple image with a hidden overtone of interconnection. Good form. Good word economy. Good presentation. Excellent phonetics with the alliteration and consonance of W. Sounds super read aloud--flows like a swift breeze!
Love,
rd
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Nice simple image with a hidden overtone of interconnection. Good form. Good word economy. Good presentation. Excellent phonetics with the alliteration and consonance of W. Sounds super read aloud--flows like a swift breeze!
Love,
rd
Comment Written 04-Oct-2017
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Thank you, Rama Devi,, I appreciate you took the time to review my poem. Love and Peace
Gypsy
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Love and peace! :-))
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing your tribute to autumn in this 4-7-4 haiku with its alliteration of "w's" and seasonal colors. The photograph looks like it could have been shot from your window. Smiles and enjoy the Fall- Joan
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Thank you for sharing your tribute to autumn in this 4-7-4 haiku with its alliteration of "w's" and seasonal colors. The photograph looks like it could have been shot from your window. Smiles and enjoy the Fall- Joan
Comment Written 04-Oct-2017
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Thank you, Joan,, I appreciate you took the time to review my poem.
Comment from Oatmeal
GYPSY BLUE ROSE,
Very reflective, all thoughts are very well described, understandable and comprehensible. Well chosen words are excellent. The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well.
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
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GYPSY BLUE ROSE,
Very reflective, all thoughts are very well described, understandable and comprehensible. Well chosen words are excellent. The theme is strong. Your feelings are expressed well.
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
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Comment Written 04-Oct-2017
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Thank you, Oatmeal,, I appreciate you took the time to review my poem.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Gypsy;
thank you for sharing your five-seven-five or haiku about the breezes of autumn and the changes they bring.
As always, your work adheres to the poetic form, is well presented, and a pleasure to read,
~patty~
I'm getting a bit stingier with stars. Some of us are doing our best to make the rating system fairer. If you give everyone a '5,' and you only have six '6s,' then some of the people getting fives aren't being judged fairly.
****** (6) stars = EXCEPTIONALLY OUTSTANDING
***** (5) stars = EXCELLENT (Enjoyable to read and NO errors)
****(4) stars = GOOD (Adjustments Needed)
*** (3) stars = Below Average
** (2) stars = BELOW AVG (Needs work)
* (1) star = POOR (MAJOR Revisions needed)
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Hi Gypsy;
thank you for sharing your five-seven-five or haiku about the breezes of autumn and the changes they bring.
As always, your work adheres to the poetic form, is well presented, and a pleasure to read,
~patty~
I'm getting a bit stingier with stars. Some of us are doing our best to make the rating system fairer. If you give everyone a '5,' and you only have six '6s,' then some of the people getting fives aren't being judged fairly.
****** (6) stars = EXCEPTIONALLY OUTSTANDING
***** (5) stars = EXCELLENT (Enjoyable to read and NO errors)
****(4) stars = GOOD (Adjustments Needed)
*** (3) stars = Below Average
** (2) stars = BELOW AVG (Needs work)
* (1) star = POOR (MAJOR Revisions needed)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Thank you, Patty,, I appreciate you took the time to review my poem.
