~ The Martinez Mad House ~
A daily writing prompt on Family10 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Everyone's family is unique but there are similarities in households and how they are run depending on your status in life, but no matter who you are your family are everything, great rhymes and sentiments here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Everyone's family is unique but there are similarities in households and how they are run depending on your status in life, but no matter who you are your family are everything, great rhymes and sentiments here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much Dolly!! I'm so thankful for the wonderful comment n high amount of stars. Thank you for the smile you've given me
Comment from Oatmeal
The theme flowed well all through your poem. The arrangement looks nice.
I only spotted a couple of errors. Send me a message when they have been fixed and I will renew your stars.
I guess that I wanted to tell you that if two words rhyme and then you add an S to one of them then they no longer rhyme. This means that some of your lines do not rhyme. I am very sorry. There is a rhyming dictionary on the net at rhymezone.com.
Leo my son well he's quite easy with goals
He's handsome and loyal with a Godly soul
Honestly we're as simple as can be
We love garage sales, coupons and picnics by the trees
Everything else looks wonderful!
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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The theme flowed well all through your poem. The arrangement looks nice.
I only spotted a couple of errors. Send me a message when they have been fixed and I will renew your stars.
I guess that I wanted to tell you that if two words rhyme and then you add an S to one of them then they no longer rhyme. This means that some of your lines do not rhyme. I am very sorry. There is a rhyming dictionary on the net at rhymezone.com.
Leo my son well he's quite easy with goals
He's handsome and loyal with a Godly soul
Honestly we're as simple as can be
We love garage sales, coupons and picnics by the trees
Everything else looks wonderful!
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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No need to apologize for your honesty. I have always respected your comments and rating of my writing. I completely understand what message you're giving me and you're absolutely correct!! I will fix it up tonight and only IF you're okay with doing so, you're welcome to change my stars.
You've always been so.kind n sweet to me. It saddens me to of let you down my friend.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Poet,
A lovely poem on the topic of your own personal family. *smile* They sound like an awesome bunch -- and it sounds like you are more than just a wee bit proud of them, too. hahaha! Nice stuff. Good luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Dear Mystery Poet,
A lovely poem on the topic of your own personal family. *smile* They sound like an awesome bunch -- and it sounds like you are more than just a wee bit proud of them, too. hahaha! Nice stuff. Good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Thank you so very much!!
Comment from oliver818
Nice poem, I like the way you captured your family members im just a few lines each, but still managed to give a clear image. Thanks for sharing and have a great day. Best of luck with the competition too
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Nice poem, I like the way you captured your family members im just a few lines each, but still managed to give a clear image. Thanks for sharing and have a great day. Best of luck with the competition too
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much for the amazing comment and rating. It means more to me than you know!!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written family poem. Our family are always the best for us. Each one had their own character and.personality and that give us a variety of people we learn to love.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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A very well-written family poem. Our family are always the best for us. Each one had their own character and.personality and that give us a variety of people we learn to love.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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I couldn't agree more!! Thank you so much for the comment and rating. It means a great deal to me.
Comment from luther maddox
wish I could give this a six star rating, it deserves it. It shows the love you had and have for your family and all the things in between. We know how life is when it comes to family, there are so many personalities dancing through the bedrooms and hallway closets. You never knew how much you love until we have family.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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wish I could give this a six star rating, it deserves it. It shows the love you had and have for your family and all the things in between. We know how life is when it comes to family, there are so many personalities dancing through the bedrooms and hallway closets. You never knew how much you love until we have family.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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I couldn't agree more. I am very grateful and thankful for the amazing comment and rating. It means so much to me!!
Comment from Mustang Patty
Dear Anonymous poet;
this is a wonderful entry for the family contest. Within the lines of your poem, you have given us the background of your family and told us of the members who bring you joy.
I loved the line, 'Our then small apartment turned into our palace.'
Well done and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Dear Anonymous poet;
this is a wonderful entry for the family contest. Within the lines of your poem, you have given us the background of your family and told us of the members who bring you joy.
I loved the line, 'Our then small apartment turned into our palace.'
Well done and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Thank you so very Much!!
Comment from RodG
A good description of this close-knit family which claims to be "just like yours." The Speaker, the mother, is very proud of her daughter and son. I like the message delivered in your final stanza. Rod
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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A good description of this close-knit family which claims to be "just like yours." The Speaker, the mother, is very proud of her daughter and son. I like the message delivered in your final stanza. Rod
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much!! I really appreciate you comment n rating.
Comment from Kazzawin
What a lovely snapshot of family life.
Yes, you have written things which could so easily be part of anybody's family and yet are completely unique to yours. I love your flow and the love within these words.
You have selected a busy, bright and somewhat crazy piece of art as an accompaniment...which probably sums up your family perfectly.
Good job : )
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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What a lovely snapshot of family life.
Yes, you have written things which could so easily be part of anybody's family and yet are completely unique to yours. I love your flow and the love within these words.
You have selected a busy, bright and somewhat crazy piece of art as an accompaniment...which probably sums up your family perfectly.
Good job : )
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Thank you.... Im try thankful for your great comment and rating.
Comment from Lucian Carter
I accidentally reviewed this on a draft. As a complete work it's better, but problems remain.
There are execution problems, too many for such a small piece:
Why two question marks in the first line?
It should be Heaven's not Heavens
The "As hard as" line is utterly confusing. I have no idea what you are trying to say.
As a whole it's interesting, sometimes moving.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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I accidentally reviewed this on a draft. As a complete work it's better, but problems remain.
There are execution problems, too many for such a small piece:
Why two question marks in the first line?
It should be Heaven's not Heavens
The "As hard as" line is utterly confusing. I have no idea what you are trying to say.
As a whole it's interesting, sometimes moving.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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I apologize but I was in the middle of typing it all out. Please if you would like return to read the entire completed poem. It is honestly much better done. Thank you so much in advance.
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Always keep your work in Preview mode until you are 100% sure it is ready.
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I am so sorry for the huge disappointment. I did have fun writing this about my small family however maybe I should just throw in the towel and delete. i surely did not mean to embarrass myself. Again I apologize
