United VS Disunited
United we stand and divided we fall.62 total reviews
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a graphically written expression of life today - well constructed in its fluid movement from stanza to stanza. While the rhyme is a bit uneven in spots, it does not diminish the stark reality the work presents...
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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In my opinion, a graphically written expression of life today - well constructed in its fluid movement from stanza to stanza. While the rhyme is a bit uneven in spots, it does not diminish the stark reality the work presents...
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much for your so balanced words having positive approach. I'm extremely sorry for the delay caused by my sudden illness.
~ RP
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You are very welcome indeed, RP, and hope your recovery is progressing speedily...Eve
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Thanks, Eve. I'm almost quite well now.
Nothing serious. Such fluctuations are a part of life.
Have a pleasant weekend!
~ RP
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I agree, RP, and I've had a few fluctuations, too - I'm glad to hear you're recovering - keep it up...Eve
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Thank you, Eve. Now I'm perfectly well.
With best wishes,
~ RP
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I'm glad to hear it, RP - thumbs up...
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Thank you, Eve.
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You are very welcome, RP...Eve
Comment from His Grayness
Certainly very well written and equally well presented in coloration and font presentation. The alarm is strong and totally viable, although truly shameful to our human population. We need a solid, strong plan to deal with the insanity facing America and the world, now really endorsed by the horrific massacre in Las Vegas last night. I just moved from there and as a music lover living nearby Mandalay Bay Hotel, I would have certainly been there myself with family and friends....perhaps not here in Northern Kentucky writing this in perhaps (temporary safety?????) HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
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Certainly very well written and equally well presented in coloration and font presentation. The alarm is strong and totally viable, although truly shameful to our human population. We need a solid, strong plan to deal with the insanity facing America and the world, now really endorsed by the horrific massacre in Las Vegas last night. I just moved from there and as a music lover living nearby Mandalay Bay Hotel, I would have certainly been there myself with family and friends....perhaps not here in Northern Kentucky writing this in perhaps (temporary safety?????) HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much, and extremely sorry for the delay caused by my sudden illness.
With best wishes,
~ RP
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Thanks to you!!! I love it! Vance
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I hope you are well and thank you for your kind words. Vance
Comment from LIJ Red
The more small cultic nations that get nukes, the sooner and more certain is disaster in a world that is too crowded for such dangerous games. Excellent abab
rhymes on a scary situation.
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The more small cultic nations that get nukes, the sooner and more certain is disaster in a world that is too crowded for such dangerous games. Excellent abab
rhymes on a scary situation.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much, and extremely sorry for the delay caused by my sudden illness.
~ RP
Comment from flylikeaneagle
RP - great rhymes for the ABAB contest. I like your message of
upward and downward. Look at the trials and birth pains our USA
country is going through. We don't need two bullies battling for
who is best - let's check it out - no- too crazy. Time to pray....
I woke up during the night and started praying...LasVegas tragedy.
flylikeaneagle - nancy
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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RP - great rhymes for the ABAB contest. I like your message of
upward and downward. Look at the trials and birth pains our USA
country is going through. We don't need two bullies battling for
who is best - let's check it out - no- too crazy. Time to pray....
I woke up during the night and started praying...LasVegas tragedy.
flylikeaneagle - nancy
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Hello Flylikeaneagle,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and heart touching worsa. I'm extremely sorry for the delay caused by my sudden illness.
~ RP
Comment from Poetic Friend
I have to agree with all of your well-expressed sentiments. The world in which we live is so divided, both nationally and internationally. Nationally, it is race vs. race; sexual preference vs. sexual preference; Democrat vs. Republican; and Trump vs. America. Internationally, it is non-America v. America.
Technically, you executed the rhyme scheme superbly. The meter reads perfectly. Not one line seemed forced.
Good luck in the contest. This is powerful entry.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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I have to agree with all of your well-expressed sentiments. The world in which we live is so divided, both nationally and internationally. Nationally, it is race vs. race; sexual preference vs. sexual preference; Democrat vs. Republican; and Trump vs. America. Internationally, it is non-America v. America.
Technically, you executed the rhyme scheme superbly. The meter reads perfectly. Not one line seemed forced.
Good luck in the contest. This is powerful entry.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Hello Poetic Friend,
Thank you very much for your so lovely words and Good Luck Wishes. I'm extremely sorry for the delay caused by my sudden illness.
~ RP
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written ABAB poem. When people stand together as one force there is not anything that can break them apart. When they are not united it is much easier to break their power.
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A very well-written ABAB poem. When people stand together as one force there is not anything that can break them apart. When they are not united it is much easier to break their power.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much, and extremely sorry for the delay caused by my sudden illness.
~ RP
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
How very true this is, my friend. It is a frightening time in the world with so much hatred and violence. I just heard we had a horrific mass shooting in Las Vegas. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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How very true this is, my friend. It is a frightening time in the world with so much hatred and violence. I just heard we had a horrific mass shooting in Las Vegas. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Hello Debbie,
Thank you very much for your so lovely words and Best Wishes. I'm extremely sorry for the delay caused by my sudden illness.
~ RP
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
This is a great ABAB poem entry, my friend. You rhymed a terrific perspective on this world today. Nicely done! Good luck. ~Kerry
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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This is a great ABAB poem entry, my friend. You rhymed a terrific perspective on this world today. Nicely done! Good luck. ~Kerry
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much for your so lovely words and Good Luck Wishes. I'm extremely sorry for the delay caused by my sudden illness.
~ RP
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Oh, I am so sorry, I hope it's nothing serious, Get well soon, my friend, and no worries, I'm always late with review and reply, just can never catch up:))
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Thanks, Kerry Robinson. I'm almost quite well now.
Nothing serious. Such fluctuations are a part of life.
Have a pleasant weekend!
~ RP
Comment from JDRBAR
Not bad, but it could use a few perks. The meaning is clear, but I feel it get there awkwardly.
Or else the only way is downward
Perhaps you could say...Divided our path is downward. That would contrast the word United. Just my opinion.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Not bad, but it could use a few perks. The meaning is clear, but I feel it get there awkwardly.
Or else the only way is downward
Perhaps you could say...Divided our path is downward. That would contrast the word United. Just my opinion.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Thank you.
Comment from Hopefully oppressed
I see what ABAB is now. I really don't know much about the mechanics of poetry, so I can't give you pointers. I can let you know how it made me feel. It makes me feel like I am not alone in the belief that government is a downfall of humanity and if the people don't start thinking on their own we will go downward.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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I see what ABAB is now. I really don't know much about the mechanics of poetry, so I can't give you pointers. I can let you know how it made me feel. It makes me feel like I am not alone in the belief that government is a downfall of humanity and if the people don't start thinking on their own we will go downward.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much, and extremely sorry for the delay caused by my sudden illness.
~ RP
