My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 50 "Who?"a collection of my poetry
30 total reviews
Comment from Heather Knight
This is cute, Patty. I like the playful rhymes you've used.
It's fun to see how we all write very different poems based on the same picture.
Thanks for sharing yours.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017
This is cute, Patty. I like the playful rhymes you've used.
It's fun to see how we all write very different poems based on the same picture.
Thanks for sharing yours.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017
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Hi Maria;
thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem for the Picture This challenge. I'm glad you enjoyed it,
~patty~
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Hi Patty
A lovely, fun minute poem, you have brought Jim to life and yes he certainly doesn't look wise he looks baffled........great stuff.
Mitchell
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017
Hi Patty
A lovely, fun minute poem, you have brought Jim to life and yes he certainly doesn't look wise he looks baffled........great stuff.
Mitchell
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017
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Hi Mitchell;
thank you so much for reading this silly little poem. I'm glad you liked it,
~patty~
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem and excelkent interpretation of the picture this challenge. The owl is a prominent figure in the picture and caught the most attention .
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017
A very well-written poem and excelkent interpretation of the picture this challenge. The owl is a prominent figure in the picture and caught the most attention .
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017
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Hi Sandra;
thank you so much for reviewing this little poem of fun,
~patty~
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
An excellently done minute poem for this challenge and it does fit the picture very well. I love minute poems for whimsy and fantasy.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017
An excellently done minute poem for this challenge and it does fit the picture very well. I love minute poems for whimsy and fantasy.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017
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Hi Barb;
I'm glad you enjoyed this little piece of whimsy for this challenge,
~patty~
Comment from kiwisteveh
I must be confused as well - at first glance I thought that was a rabbit!
Your Minute poem is well done (although a purist might hope for stricter meter in a couple of places). I like that you break the stereotype of the wise old owl.
'Who is it sits...' to start may be a little smoother, and why not change 'ruled' to 'rules' to fit in with the present tense throughout the rest of the poem?
Steve
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
I must be confused as well - at first glance I thought that was a rabbit!
Your Minute poem is well done (although a purist might hope for stricter meter in a couple of places). I like that you break the stereotype of the wise old owl.
'Who is it sits...' to start may be a little smoother, and why not change 'ruled' to 'rules' to fit in with the present tense throughout the rest of the poem?
Steve
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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Hi Steve;
changed the 'ruled' back to 'rules.' A reviewer before you had suggested the change, and I couldn't figure out why.
Your comment on the first line is probably because I used 'Who's it that sits...' (I was limited by syllable count.)
I know my meter isn't the best -- that's why I'm going to take Jim's class!
thanks for the review,
~patty~
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Yeah, I forgot about the 8 syllable requirement. You could change it to something like:
'I wonder who's upon the branch...'
Comment from c_lucas
Despite popular belief, the Owl is not very intelligent. This is very well very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. Their is good imagery.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
Despite popular belief, the Owl is not very intelligent. This is very well very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. Their is good imagery.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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Hi Charlie
thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem,
~patty~
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You're welcome, Patty. Charlie
Comment from lyenochka
A fun minute poem, Patty! I still am puzzled by the creature. I think it's the offspring of the Owl and the Pussycat. It doesn't look fully an owl or cat or bunny. And yes, he does look a bit confused and spaced out.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
A fun minute poem, Patty! I still am puzzled by the creature. I think it's the offspring of the Owl and the Pussycat. It doesn't look fully an owl or cat or bunny. And yes, he does look a bit confused and spaced out.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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Hi there;
thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I thought the owl really looked strange, so that's why I made him a bit of an oddball.
~patty~
Comment from poetwatch
I can picture Jim. Good humor poem, for Jim does not rules the dark if he misses his mark. How about if you use ruled instead of rules? I like it, for to paint a picture in words is the hardest thing a poet as well as writer must do to grab the readers attention.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
I can picture Jim. Good humor poem, for Jim does not rules the dark if he misses his mark. How about if you use ruled instead of rules? I like it, for to paint a picture in words is the hardest thing a poet as well as writer must do to grab the readers attention.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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Hi there;
thank you so much for the review. I tried 'ruled' instead of 'rules,' but I didn't like it as much, and neither did a few reviewers - so, I changed it back.
I appreciate your time and suggestions,
~patty~
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The pleasure is all mine, for I'm learning from the best. I don't know how to write humor so give me a few other examples. Please.
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I will do my best
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Excellent minute poem, my friend. Well worded with good rhyme and steady meter. You have grown so much as a poet and author, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
Excellent minute poem, my friend. Well worded with good rhyme and steady meter. You have grown so much as a poet and author, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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Hi Debbie;
thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your comments - I'm glad you can see my growth!
~patty~
Comment from Bucketlist
It was a different way to describe the owl, in minute style . Thankfully, it was a quick read
( I've been reviewing all day) and I enjoyed your version. Thanks for sharing
Hugs, Trisha
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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
It was a different way to describe the owl, in minute style . Thankfully, it was a quick read
( I've been reviewing all day) and I enjoyed your version. Thanks for sharing
Hugs, Trisha
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Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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Hi Trisha;
thank you so much for the review and stars,
~patty~