Haiku(luscious orchard scents)
Nature Haiku6 total reviews
Comment from sandy montgomery
Congratulations on your win. Great satori. Good form. I like your presentation very much. No spag. Lusious is a great word. Very well done congratulations again. Thank you for sharing your work I.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
  |
Congratulations on your win. Great satori. Good form. I like your presentation very much. No spag. Lusious is a great word. Very well done congratulations again. Thank you for sharing your work I.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
-
And thank you for such an encouraging review - it's difficult to gauge what actually works sometimes, isn't it ?zanya
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I could smell the scent oozing from your words which prickled my senses into smelling the luscious apples and freshly cut grass, no need for artwork here, your words brought the picture, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
|
I could smell the scent oozing from your words which prickled my senses into smelling the luscious apples and freshly cut grass, no need for artwork here, your words brought the picture, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
-
Wow - what a superb review - thanks for reading zanya
Comment from BeasPeas
This is very nice. Image is beautiful and your entire haiku is elegant. Each word chosen is a sensory experience. I wish you luck in the contest with this fine entry. Marilyn
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
|
This is very nice. Image is beautiful and your entire haiku is elegant. Each word chosen is a sensory experience. I wish you luck in the contest with this fine entry. Marilyn
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
-
I am simply thrilled with this review -thanks for reading zanya
-
Good for you, Zanya. I just checked and see it won first place. Great job. Congratulations. Marilyn
Comment from June Sargent
Beautiful sentiments expressed in a few words. Lovely way to remember the fall. Lively artwork is perfect match. Ican smell the orchard! Should do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
|
Beautiful sentiments expressed in a few words. Lovely way to remember the fall. Lively artwork is perfect match. Ican smell the orchard! Should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
-
Thanks for reading and a superb review zanya
Comment from rspoet
This is a very fine haiku and entry for the contest
with excellent imagery of the orchard and scents
Good grammatical connection in present tense
and a fine reflective satori line
Excellent picture, too
Nicely done
Good luck in the contest
RS
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
|
This is a very fine haiku and entry for the contest
with excellent imagery of the orchard and scents
Good grammatical connection in present tense
and a fine reflective satori line
Excellent picture, too
Nicely done
Good luck in the contest
RS
Comment Written 30-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
-
Thanks for a superb review zanya
Comment from Lucian Carter
I like fruit. While the image is of apples, there are many different types of orchards and this sentiment is true of all of them. The syllables work perfectly, which is pretty normal for a Haiku. :)
I'm just not sure the satori counts as a real "a-ha" moment. It's certainly true, but is it a revelation? I'm not sure.
Still, it's quite good and I was happy to read it.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
|
I like fruit. While the image is of apples, there are many different types of orchards and this sentiment is true of all of them. The syllables work perfectly, which is pretty normal for a Haiku. :)
I'm just not sure the satori counts as a real "a-ha" moment. It's certainly true, but is it a revelation? I'm not sure.
Still, it's quite good and I was happy to read it.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
-
Thanks for reading and reviewing zanya
