Out of Wedlock
A Quatern71 total reviews
Comment from jenintorre
I enjoyed reading your sad and interesting poem. It was very well written with
Good rhyme and an unusual format that I haven't come across before. Nice one.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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I enjoyed reading your sad and interesting poem. It was very well written with
Good rhyme and an unusual format that I haven't come across before. Nice one.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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Many thanks for your review, Jein. Appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Curly Girly
This is an excellent Quatern poem that tells a truthful story about life. These days the word 'Bastard' is hardly heard and has become redundant. Sadly, with so many bastards in society, it is now virtually the norm. The use of this word is offensive and un-PC but remains truthful. As soon as people don't like the truth, they change the rules.
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This is an excellent Quatern poem that tells a truthful story about life. These days the word 'Bastard' is hardly heard and has become redundant. Sadly, with so many bastards in society, it is now virtually the norm. The use of this word is offensive and un-PC but remains truthful. As soon as people don't like the truth, they change the rules.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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Many thanks for your review, Nicole. Appreciated! You're right! Norms have shifted quite a bit! Best wishes, Tony
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Yes, and it's false.
Example:
Take the word 'wicked'.
According to my MS Word programme, the synonyms are:
good, great, terrific, cool, fabulous
Now, how misleading and incorrect is that?
What will the kids of the future really know if they are taught wrong?
One has to wonder if there's not some sort of social engineering going on behind scenes.
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Yes - another word that has been hijacked and had its meaning altered. I commonly hear youngsters here saying that things are 'wicked' and 'cool' when they mean quite the opposite.
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Tony;
-what a wonderful story within a poem that I believe it may be about a relationship outside of wedlock, "She tasted of forbidden bless," and now she is haunted with the fact that she is remembering her marriage and the thoughts that brought about their marriage, "the hollow promise made last spring."
-I also believe because of her infidelity, she is reminded of the time. She was previously married to her husband, "the best the father will renew the hollow promise made last spring, and bended knee, with writing ring. Her arm outstretched..... Her finger, too."
-The perfected technique and style of this poetry is what makes this poem so great and following it was an exceptional task completed well, very well.
-The picture of the floating arm with hand outstretched is perfect and supportive to the conceptual theme of this poem and a good choice for picture.
-Thanks for sharing this, Tony, and take care and have a good one my dearest friend with all the family and friends that you have close to you.
Alex
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Cheers, Tony;
-what a wonderful story within a poem that I believe it may be about a relationship outside of wedlock, "She tasted of forbidden bless," and now she is haunted with the fact that she is remembering her marriage and the thoughts that brought about their marriage, "the hollow promise made last spring."
-I also believe because of her infidelity, she is reminded of the time. She was previously married to her husband, "the best the father will renew the hollow promise made last spring, and bended knee, with writing ring. Her arm outstretched..... Her finger, too."
-The perfected technique and style of this poetry is what makes this poem so great and following it was an exceptional task completed well, very well.
-The picture of the floating arm with hand outstretched is perfect and supportive to the conceptual theme of this poem and a good choice for picture.
-Thanks for sharing this, Tony, and take care and have a good one my dearest friend with all the family and friends that you have close to you.
Alex
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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Many thanks for your review, Alex. Appreciated! Best wishes to you and yours, Tony
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You are extremely and very welcome, Tony.
Alex
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Do people even get married anymore? It is a rare thing to see an engagement announcement or a marriage announcement anymore.
Most of the children are from unwed mothers. The Guys get them pregnant and move out. Good poem Tony. I saw nothing wrong. Poetic license not needed if you ask me. Well done. Nancy
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Do people even get married anymore? It is a rare thing to see an engagement announcement or a marriage announcement anymore.
Most of the children are from unwed mothers. The Guys get them pregnant and move out. Good poem Tony. I saw nothing wrong. Poetic license not needed if you ask me. Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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Many thanks for your review, Nancy. Appreciated! You're right! Norms have shifted quite a bit! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from frierajac
Perhaps the reason why the quatrain as a stanza has been so prevalent is that it reminds of a four walled room in which we live. I can see that the poor wench
has been taken advantage of. This is seems to me like a surviving standpoint of earlier decades.
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Perhaps the reason why the quatrain as a stanza has been so prevalent is that it reminds of a four walled room in which we live. I can see that the poor wench
has been taken advantage of. This is seems to me like a surviving standpoint of earlier decades.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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Many thanks for your review, Carolyn. Appreciated! You're right! Norms have shifted quite a bit! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from barbara.wilkey
In today's society it doesn't seem the stigma is attached to unwed mother's or the child as it was in my younger days. At least not at my school, where almost every child in my class has a single mom and unknown father. Your poem is extremely emotional and you did a wonderful job writing it.
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In today's society it doesn't seem the stigma is attached to unwed mother's or the child as it was in my younger days. At least not at my school, where almost every child in my class has a single mom and unknown father. Your poem is extremely emotional and you did a wonderful job writing it.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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Many thanks for your review, Barbara. Appreciated! You're right! Norms have shifted quite a bit! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from c_lucas
Why should a child has to suffer a label (BASTARD)
Because of the act of two adults
Giving in to sexual instincts-lust?
The child had no say in the matter.
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
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Why should a child has to suffer a label (BASTARD)
Because of the act of two adults
Giving in to sexual instincts-lust?
The child had no say in the matter.
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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Many thanks for your review, Charlie. Appreciated! You're right! Children should not be made to suffer from the consequences of their parents' actions. Unfortunately, they often do.! Best wishes, Tony
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You're welcome, Tony. Charlie
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Quatern. The lines flow well and the repeating line is strong and get the message through. Sometimes it is better to let the untrustworthy father go and raise the child alone. He may just cause more trouble and disruption in the child's life.
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A very well-written Quatern. The lines flow well and the repeating line is strong and get the message through. Sometimes it is better to let the untrustworthy father go and raise the child alone. He may just cause more trouble and disruption in the child's life.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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Many thanks for your review, Sandra. Appreciated! You're probably right! An absent father is often preferable to a bad one! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Pantygynt
I think we must grant you an extension to your poetic license for the creative way you manage your prepositons. I can't help feeling you missed an opportunity to stick "two" fingers up at the bastard's father. I don't think he'll be coming back. they seldom do. Had you done that I would have had to give you a six.
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I think we must grant you an extension to your poetic license for the creative way you manage your prepositons. I can't help feeling you missed an opportunity to stick "two" fingers up at the bastard's father. I don't think he'll be coming back. they seldom do. Had you done that I would have had to give you a six.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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Many thanks for your review, Jim. Appreciated! You're right! She'd have been better advised to give him the finger. Of course, I don't specify which finger she had stretched out! Best wishes, Tony
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I am on old fashioned guy. This one finger stuff is so continental. Two fingers was good enough for the archers at Agingourt and it should be good enough for her too.
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or, in the words of Flanders and Swann
"When I was a little wolf cub and you were a brownie,
We did everything a wolf cub and brownie should do.
I wanted to be a boy scout so I could salute you
With three fingers vertical instead of just two.
Follow me, follow me,
We?ll go to the grotto, and get slightly blotto.
To hell with the motto! Just fo-o-ollow me."
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...or was it Paddy Roberts?
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was a very sad one, Tony. Many young girls are promised love and marriage and believe it. Then they become pregnant and suddenly they are on their own. An old story but one that always brings pain. Well done, my friend another well-written poem. :) Sandra. xx
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That was a very sad one, Tony. Many young girls are promised love and marriage and believe it. Then they become pregnant and suddenly they are on their own. An old story but one that always brings pain. Well done, my friend another well-written poem. :) Sandra. xx
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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Many thanks for your review, Sandra. Appreciated! An old story indeed, but sadly one still in common currency! Best wishes, Tony
