Out of Wedlock
A Quatern71 total reviews
Comment from flylikeaneagle
T - I love your courage to try these poems and your amazing words!
Get a shot gun - opps - no, Las Vegas... prayers...
Fathers need to be responsible for the babies. They enjoyed the moment.
Babies are precious. On bended knee, a wedding soon and a loving wife
for the couple with plans for a future and a baby. Great poem.
I like how you add sentences and keep on going in para 2. I like your
rhymes and movement. Great poem and message. Get married.
flylikeanegle - nancy
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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T - I love your courage to try these poems and your amazing words!
Get a shot gun - opps - no, Las Vegas... prayers...
Fathers need to be responsible for the babies. They enjoyed the moment.
Babies are precious. On bended knee, a wedding soon and a loving wife
for the couple with plans for a future and a baby. Great poem.
I like how you add sentences and keep on going in para 2. I like your
rhymes and movement. Great poem and message. Get married.
flylikeanegle - nancy
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Nancy. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your kind words and the six stars. Glad you enjoyed it! All the best, Tony
Comment from Fridayauthor
This reads very smoothly and tells a story in a strong way. I like the repetition of the line. It works well in this tale. I appreciate the subtleness of the "finger..fingers"
Excellent posting and most enjoyable.
Thank you.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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This reads very smoothly and tells a story in a strong way. I like the repetition of the line. It works well in this tale. I appreciate the subtleness of the "finger..fingers"
Excellent posting and most enjoyable.
Thank you.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Fridayauthor. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your kind words. Glad you enjoyed it! All the best, Tony
Comment from JDRBAR
Very interesting. However, I have to ask...first verse...who's bound for hell, him, or her? It's unclear. I saw no nits or anything else to criticize. Good luck wit h this.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very interesting. However, I have to ask...first verse...who's bound for hell, him, or her? It's unclear. I saw no nits or anything else to criticize. Good luck wit h this.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, JDR. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your comments. In answer to your question, it seems that in the minds of society at the time, it was she who was destined for Hell - though I rather think it should have been him. All the best, Tony
Comment from Drew Delaney
Your choice of the repeated line is what worked so well, I think. That line flows nicely through all the stanzas and is so meaningful. A wonderful piece of poetry. Drew
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Your choice of the repeated line is what worked so well, I think. That line flows nicely through all the stanzas and is so meaningful. A wonderful piece of poetry. Drew
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Drew. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your kind words. Glad you enjoyed it! All the best, Tony
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Tony, This one is so sad really. I do think in this day and age a ring is not necessarily what every woman wants no matter the circumstance. This is well written and I enjoyed your style. You are truly a wonderful poet! xoxo deborah
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Hi Tony, This one is so sad really. I do think in this day and age a ring is not necessarily what every woman wants no matter the circumstance. This is well written and I enjoyed your style. You are truly a wonderful poet! xoxo deborah
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Deborah. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your comments, which echo my sentiments exactly, and your kind words about the poem. Glad you enjoyed it! All the best, Tony
Comment from Gloria ....
Ah yes, a beautiful Quatern, Tony. The subject matter difficult and the elegance of your wording in combination with a soft presentation makes this a fine, fine poem. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017
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Ah yes, a beautiful Quatern, Tony. The subject matter difficult and the elegance of your wording in combination with a soft presentation makes this a fine, fine poem. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks, Gloria, for reading, and for your kind comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Out of Wedlock', is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017
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"Out of Wedlock', is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks, Duchess, for reading, and for your kind comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a tender relation, expectation of love and affectionate caring from father as and when feasible by outstretching her arms and fingers, love is so passionate; I liked.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017
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This speaks a tender relation, expectation of love and affectionate caring from father as and when feasible by outstretching her arms and fingers, love is so passionate; I liked.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks, Alcreator, for reading, and for your kind comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from nomi338
Fortunately for the children born out of wedlock today, they do not suffer the shame and ostracism that children once had to endure in earlier times. This is probably due in large part to the fact that there are so many now. The person who might shout out the intended insult, may be in fact in the very same boat as the one being insulted.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017
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Fortunately for the children born out of wedlock today, they do not suffer the shame and ostracism that children once had to endure in earlier times. This is probably due in large part to the fact that there are so many now. The person who might shout out the intended insult, may be in fact in the very same boat as the one being insulted.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks, Nomi, for reading, and for your comments. Norms have certainly changed in recent years - in some ways for the better and in others, possibly for the worse. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
I really like this with the slight changes to the repeating line. Excellent poem with the abba rhyme scheme. Lovely work, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017
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I really like this with the slight changes to the repeating line. Excellent poem with the abba rhyme scheme. Lovely work, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks, Debbie, for reading, and for your kind comments. Best wishes, Tony
