Out of Wedlock
A Quatern71 total reviews
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi Tony;
thank you for sharing your well structured quatern with us. I loved the presentation, and your choice of words. The picture was simply perfect for the words of the poem.
Great job,
~patty~
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Hi Tony;
thank you for sharing your well structured quatern with us. I loved the presentation, and your choice of words. The picture was simply perfect for the words of the poem.
Great job,
~patty~
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Patty. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your kind words. Glad you enjoyed it! All the best, Tony
Comment from country ranch writer
Yes back in my time a child male born out of wedlock was considered a hastened for no father was present. In today's world it is an everyday occourance because no one wants to be tied to the other. It is a shame the ones that suffer are the children.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Yes back in my time a child male born out of wedlock was considered a hastened for no father was present. In today's world it is an everyday occourance because no one wants to be tied to the other. It is a shame the ones that suffer are the children.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, CRW. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your interesting comments. All the best, Tony
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Hope all is well with with you.
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All fine! Just exceptionally busy at the moment! Thanks for asking! Best wishes, Tony
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Okay just being nosey
Comment from Bucketlist
Another poetic rendition of children conceived without marriage. The same mentality of love them, and then ditch them is eloquently covered. This was an enjoyable read , the reality of it is a frequent problem.
Trisha
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Another poetic rendition of children conceived without marriage. The same mentality of love them, and then ditch them is eloquently covered. This was an enjoyable read , the reality of it is a frequent problem.
Trisha
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Trisha. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your kind words and observations. Glad you enjoyed it! All the best, Tony
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No problem,thanks for replying
Comment from Marvin Calloway
An unusual tale, well-told, laced with sadness.
The distressed damsel holds out hope while avoiding a personal hell.
She bravely accepts her situation.
I don't suppose we'll ever learn why.
Marv
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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An unusual tale, well-told, laced with sadness.
The distressed damsel holds out hope while avoiding a personal hell.
She bravely accepts her situation.
I don't suppose we'll ever learn why.
Marv
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Marvin. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your comments. All the best, Tony
Comment from estory
I think this image of the outstretched hand and arm captures this sense of an incomplete or unconsummated relationship. You have that hand stretched out to the fingertips, which really heightens the sense of reaching out, of desire, but then she waves adieu, the darkness swallows it all up. Happiness is out of reach. estory
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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I think this image of the outstretched hand and arm captures this sense of an incomplete or unconsummated relationship. You have that hand stretched out to the fingertips, which really heightens the sense of reaching out, of desire, but then she waves adieu, the darkness swallows it all up. Happiness is out of reach. estory
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, estory. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your interesting comments about the outstretched hand. All the best, Tony
Comment from Stacia Ann
Arresting title and visual!
A spooky view on adultery/abandonment as a descent into hell. I was reminded of 19th century novels such as "Madame Bovary" and "Sister Carrie" and how the title characters' lives fell apart and sent them to metaphoric hell for their "sin." Most of the "blame" here, however, seems to be placed on the male partner for his abandonment--he is the one going to hell, "bound for hell." However, as she's "drifting down," maybe she is too?
The rhyme and meter work really well. I like the repetition of "her arm's outstretched"--why? For help? To reach the lover? I think it's up to reader interpretation.
Thanks for sharing this!
Stacia
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Arresting title and visual!
A spooky view on adultery/abandonment as a descent into hell. I was reminded of 19th century novels such as "Madame Bovary" and "Sister Carrie" and how the title characters' lives fell apart and sent them to metaphoric hell for their "sin." Most of the "blame" here, however, seems to be placed on the male partner for his abandonment--he is the one going to hell, "bound for hell." However, as she's "drifting down," maybe she is too?
The rhyme and meter work really well. I like the repetition of "her arm's outstretched"--why? For help? To reach the lover? I think it's up to reader interpretation.
Thanks for sharing this!
Stacia
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Stacia. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your observations and kind comments. Glad you enjoyed it! All the best, Tony
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No, problem, Tony--I do the same thing with the delayed responses! Thanks for sharing your work.
Stacia
Comment from Janet Foor
A thought provoking story in this well written piece Tony told with tenderness and compassion. Very nice enjambment and rhyme. Very well done my friend.
Blessings
Janet .
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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A thought provoking story in this well written piece Tony told with tenderness and compassion. Very nice enjambment and rhyme. Very well done my friend.
Blessings
Janet .
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Janet. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your kind words. Glad you enjoyed it! All the best, Tony
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a stunning write - although I am unfamiliar with the form by its definition, it doesn't matter to me - the poem is articulate and fluid in movement and style, and I was immersed in the read...
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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In my opinion, a stunning write - although I am unfamiliar with the form by its definition, it doesn't matter to me - the poem is articulate and fluid in movement and style, and I was immersed in the read...
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Eve. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your kind words. Glad you enjoyed it! All the best, Tony
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You are more than welcome, Tony, and no problem at all - life does have its priorities..Eve
Comment from Brigitte Elko
This is a very powerful and well written poem. The selected picture is perfect to exemplify the content of the penned poem. Wonderful job!
Fan Friend,
Brigitte
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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This is a very powerful and well written poem. The selected picture is perfect to exemplify the content of the penned poem. Wonderful job!
Fan Friend,
Brigitte
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Brigitte. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your kind words. Glad you enjoyed it! All the best, Tony
Comment from Mark Valentine
An age-old tale finds brilliant and poignant expression in your words. Absolutely brilliant use of enjambment. "to" and "too", and the different connotations of an outstretched arm, to make this one heart-wrenching.
They don't get much better than this.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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An age-old tale finds brilliant and poignant expression in your words. Absolutely brilliant use of enjambment. "to" and "too", and the different connotations of an outstretched arm, to make this one heart-wrenching.
They don't get much better than this.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Mark. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your kind words and the six stars. Glad you enjoyed it! All the best, Tony
