Out of Wedlock
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Comment from robina1978
Really nice to see this form again. The nice photo of an arm complements it perfectly. I did not mind at all that you changed the repeating line ever so slightly. I assume you used the right amount of syllables. It also flows well. Pity for this lady
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Really nice to see this form again. The nice photo of an arm complements it perfectly. I did not mind at all that you changed the repeating line ever so slightly. I assume you used the right amount of syllables. It also flows well. Pity for this lady
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Robina. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your kind words and the six stars. Glad you enjoyed it! All the best, Tony
Comment from Rasmine
Hello,
Hope you are fine. This is a really neat poem. With your illustration, I can picture the hand outstretched. In my imagination, I can too.
Have a great day!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Hello,
Hope you are fine. This is a really neat poem. With your illustration, I can picture the hand outstretched. In my imagination, I can too.
Have a great day!
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Rasmine. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your kind words. Glad you enjoyed it! All the best, Tony
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend this is well written again the quality shows in this writing the plight of a pregnant mother trying to do her best in the only way possible well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Yes my friend this is well written again the quality shows in this writing the plight of a pregnant mother trying to do her best in the only way possible well done regards Jill
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Jill. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your kind words and the six stars. Glad you enjoyed it! All the best, Tony
Comment from Ogden
Does the ambivalent wonton really want a kiss from the bastard's father to whom she extends the bent finger?
Good writing, Tony, and who cares about the repeating line?
Don
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Does the ambivalent wonton really want a kiss from the bastard's father to whom she extends the bent finger?
Good writing, Tony, and who cares about the repeating line?
Don
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Don. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your kind words. Glad you enjoyed it! Perhaps it was not the ring finger that she extended! All the best, Tony
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You are welcome, Tony. I hope your absence was not because of unwanted events. As to the lady in question, given the circumstances, I assumed the finger was her middle one.
Don
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your poem "out of Wedlock". You rhymed it well following the rules for this genre and you chose an appropriate picture.
All the best.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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I enjoyed reading your poem "out of Wedlock". You rhymed it well following the rules for this genre and you chose an appropriate picture.
All the best.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Marybell. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your kind words. Glad you enjoyed it! All the best, Tony
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
Comment from sandy montgomery
Well done. I like this form. It suits your words and subject well. I like the refrain quality of the repeated line. The image is perfectly chosen your presentation is very well chosen in reflecting the work. Good job.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Well done. I like this form. It suits your words and subject well. I like the refrain quality of the repeated line. The image is perfectly chosen your presentation is very well chosen in reflecting the work. Good job.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Sandy. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your kind words. Glad you enjoyed it! All the best, Tony
Comment from DonandVicki
Your poem does what all good poetry should do and that is touch a note within the reader and open their imagination. Excellent choice of artwork to complement the poem.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Your poem does what all good poetry should do and that is touch a note within the reader and open their imagination. Excellent choice of artwork to complement the poem.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, DonandVicki. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your kind words. Glad you enjoyed it! All the best, Tony
Comment from GWinterwin
I read this and my heart goes out to every young girl or woman of any age left to face this kind of situation. I have three sons and I always told them as they were growing up, if you get a girl pregnant and don't marry her, you will move out and she will be allowed to move in if she wants. I despise a man who is not man enough to fulfill an obligation in which he was part of making.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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I read this and my heart goes out to every young girl or woman of any age left to face this kind of situation. I have three sons and I always told them as they were growing up, if you get a girl pregnant and don't marry her, you will move out and she will be allowed to move in if she wants. I despise a man who is not man enough to fulfill an obligation in which he was part of making.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, GW. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your personal comments and kind words. All the best, Tony
Comment from Angela VA
This is a strong poem with good emotion. Things are different in this day and age and the stigma has lessened, so I see this as set in the past. I especially liked the ending of her outstretched finger, for a ring.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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This is a strong poem with good emotion. Things are different in this day and age and the stigma has lessened, so I see this as set in the past. I especially liked the ending of her outstretched finger, for a ring.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, Angela. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your kind words. Glad you enjoyed it! All the best, Tony
Comment from JW
Thanks for sharing this poem. However, as primarily a novelist, I don't fully understand it. Just because one is out of wedlock, why would they be doom for Hell? Or perhaps, I'm understanding this wrong. JW
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Thanks for sharing this poem. However, as primarily a novelist, I don't fully understand it. Just because one is out of wedlock, why would they be doom for Hell? Or perhaps, I'm understanding this wrong. JW
Comment Written 02-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
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Very many thanks for your review of "Out of Wedlock" a couple of weeks ago, JW. I'm afraid I've not been on site much recently, but I appreciated your interesting comments. I agree with your point of view. Unfortunately, in days gone by there was much prejudice and it still exists in many places. All the best, Tony
