Broken-Hearted Bar Boy Blues
free verse57 total reviews
Comment from jaded831
Wow, you captured the feeling of a night in the local bar well. You truly painted quite a picture. Every section created a different picture, but each flowed right into the next. Using the colored fonts and black background added to your poem. The entire presentation gets a thumbs up.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Wow, you captured the feeling of a night in the local bar well. You truly painted quite a picture. Every section created a different picture, but each flowed right into the next. Using the colored fonts and black background added to your poem. The entire presentation gets a thumbs up.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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I'm delighted you enjoyed, especially the presentation etc. This is my style when I'm writing the way I WANT to write. Thanks so much. mike
Comment from DR DIP
Wow Michael you have such a unique way of setting out your poetry I really like this Everyone knows how a night at the local bar can go. Drinking checking out the talent in the pub put in the lines trying to win them over with idle chat and body language.
Thanks for sharing.
dip
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Wow Michael you have such a unique way of setting out your poetry I really like this Everyone knows how a night at the local bar can go. Drinking checking out the talent in the pub put in the lines trying to win them over with idle chat and body language.
Thanks for sharing.
dip
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Hey, Doc
Thanks a million. I'll try and pop by soon. I know I'm a terrible fan. Everyone I know seems to end up in the hospital lately. It couldn't be me could it? LOL mike
Comment from Possummagic
I enjoyed your poem on "Broken Hearted Bar Boy Blues" and it should do well in the contest you have entered into. Your poem flowed well at times and a bit staggered at others. All in all however a great poem. Good luck. pM
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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I enjoyed your poem on "Broken Hearted Bar Boy Blues" and it should do well in the contest you have entered into. Your poem flowed well at times and a bit staggered at others. All in all however a great poem. Good luck. pM
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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I have a pretty wild and free style. Pleased you enjoyed it anyway and managed to get through it okay. Thanks a million. mike
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You're welcome. PM
Comment from Heather Knight
This is lovely as usual. You have a unique style different from everything else I have ever read.
I also like the way you present your poem. The way it looks on the page is very important.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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This is lovely as usual. You have a unique style different from everything else I have ever read.
I also like the way you present your poem. The way it looks on the page is very important.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Hi, Maria
As always, you say something to make my evening. What a lovely thing to hear. I'm so pleased you enjoyed.
Thanks so very much. mike
Comment from RGstar
Good work put into this. I read twice as to get the deeper meaning, if one, as there were many twists. With this kind of write one has to be careful, for though so much strength and depth, thought and delivery, it has to be read twice, for the first time, I found myself concentrating too much on the format and what will change next, instead of the depth and what is write. Perhaps something to consider next time. Having said that, I read again, more knowing, and found a well written work.
Well done.
RGstar
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Good work put into this. I read twice as to get the deeper meaning, if one, as there were many twists. With this kind of write one has to be careful, for though so much strength and depth, thought and delivery, it has to be read twice, for the first time, I found myself concentrating too much on the format and what will change next, instead of the depth and what is write. Perhaps something to consider next time. Having said that, I read again, more knowing, and found a well written work.
Well done.
RGstar
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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I'll think about it, Roy. I do get a mixed reaction to my formatting I must admit. Perhaps something a bit more standard might be the way to go. But this is ME in my natural state. LOL!
Thanks for taking the time and I'm pleased you ended up enjoying. mike
Comment from jenintorre
Well this was a very powerful peice of poetry. Very sad if indeed it is true. I admit I had to read it twice to fully get the gist. I found it very atmospheric. Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Well this was a very powerful peice of poetry. Very sad if indeed it is true. I admit I had to read it twice to fully get the gist. I found it very atmospheric. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Hi
I think perhaps my formatting with the colours etc, make for a difficult read for some. A couple people say they had to read it more than once. I sure appreciate you taking the time. I'll consider maybe doing less of that in the future. In any case, thanks for taking the extra time and I'm pleased you enjoyed. Thanks so much. mike
Comment from Aussie
I found your story/poem most interesting. It is said, when the drink is in, the brain is out. Bars are places where folks drink for courage to approach strangers. Normally they wouldn't take a second look at. Did you really go home with a bar boy? Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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I found your story/poem most interesting. It is said, when the drink is in, the brain is out. Bars are places where folks drink for courage to approach strangers. Normally they wouldn't take a second look at. Did you really go home with a bar boy? Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
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Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2017
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HAAAAHAHA! No, I didn't go home with anybody. But if I did it would be a bar GIRL for sure. LOL
Glad you found it interesting. It's fun to watch the interactions. Probably not as much fun to participate. mike
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G'day Mike, One never knows these days, same-sex marriage is up for vote in Oz! How stupid the colonial thinking. XXK.
