Broken-Hearted Bar Boy Blues
free verse57 total reviews
Comment from His Grayness
The imagination and creativity behind this work is amazing! The packaging of this work is marvelous and really captures the reader at the outset. The GRIP is splendid and has the reader fully engaged with awesome imagination that actually pulls the reader into the bar and almost can smell the beer and popcorn! I cannot imagine a single thing that would improve this work in any way and thank this author for a real delight! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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The imagination and creativity behind this work is amazing! The packaging of this work is marvelous and really captures the reader at the outset. The GRIP is splendid and has the reader fully engaged with awesome imagination that actually pulls the reader into the bar and almost can smell the beer and popcorn! I cannot imagine a single thing that would improve this work in any way and thank this author for a real delight! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Wow. Thanks for the kind words and compliments. I couldn't ask for more. mike
Comment from robina1978
Nice the colours of the letters changing. It is about bar boy blues. Who has not had these once. I know we did, long time ago. A nice photo complements this well written free verse.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Nice the colours of the letters changing. It is about bar boy blues. Who has not had these once. I know we did, long time ago. A nice photo complements this well written free verse.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Hi, Ine
Great to hear from you. So pleased you enjoyed. Thanks a million. mike
Comment from nomi338
Blessed or cursed with the skill and the will, the writer writes of both joy and pain, the scars that remain, the bitter memories he must retain, the stubborn mind he tries to retrain. All of this is grist for the mill. All of this serves to feed a greedy and unforgiving muse. Let the writer write on.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Blessed or cursed with the skill and the will, the writer writes of both joy and pain, the scars that remain, the bitter memories he must retain, the stubborn mind he tries to retrain. All of this is grist for the mill. All of this serves to feed a greedy and unforgiving muse. Let the writer write on.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Ahh, wonderful insightful words, most appreciated. Thanks a million. mike
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Thank you for submitting such a fine work. I jave been inspired to turn my comments into a poem. It is still in the works, but I expect, hopefully that it will be good.
Comment from Pantygynt
I found this really quite compelling. It seemed we entered the bar together though not in company, and it was mid afternoon, the lunch crowd gone and after-workers not yet assembled as this poem embarked on a serious drunk to lose the blues, an aim it never achieved becoming ever more blue and wallowing in the sour taste of self pity, as beer after beer cascaded into an empty stomach with absolutely no effect whatsoever.
This is one of the most effective "blue mood" poems I have ever read. I found it brilliantly depressing.
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I found this really quite compelling. It seemed we entered the bar together though not in company, and it was mid afternoon, the lunch crowd gone and after-workers not yet assembled as this poem embarked on a serious drunk to lose the blues, an aim it never achieved becoming ever more blue and wallowing in the sour taste of self pity, as beer after beer cascaded into an empty stomach with absolutely no effect whatsoever.
This is one of the most effective "blue mood" poems I have ever read. I found it brilliantly depressing.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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I'm humbled. Wonderful praise, especially coming from one of the very best here. Thanks a million. I'm framing this and ignoring all others. mike
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Your contest entry is extremely sad. I have often wondered about those bar stools. I am sure your poem will show well, your talent shines through. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Your contest entry is extremely sad. I have often wondered about those bar stools. I am sure your poem will show well, your talent shines through. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Too kind as always. Thanks a million, Barbara. mike
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I like your style, Mike, it's uniquely you. So you came home early to write this? It was well worth it, if you hadn't and you'd had another few drinks, the words would have taken a hike and you wouldn't have been able to write it. Well done, my friend, I did enjoy it. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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I like your style, Mike, it's uniquely you. So you came home early to write this? It was well worth it, if you hadn't and you'd had another few drinks, the words would have taken a hike and you wouldn't have been able to write it. Well done, my friend, I did enjoy it. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Yep, I really did. LOL Kinda sad or maybe kinda good ... I haven't decided.
So pleased you enjoyed, especially the style since this IS actually my style. Thanks a million. mike
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. Sometimes it is better to love someone only in your dreams when the dream come true we are often disappointed in the reality.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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A very well-written poem. Sometimes it is better to love someone only in your dreams when the dream come true we are often disappointed in the reality.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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So true, Sandra. Well put. Thanks so much. mike
Comment from nordicgirl
Ha! Sure, you left a bar alone.
Anyway, this is awesome. From the opening description, soooo accurate, to the end, exactly what it is like, especially when he/she has dumped you. Damn, I love how you describe HER when she asks about you. That hits home hard. In the end, there is no way you can accept that it is over. At least I see it that way. Your best style. Just laying it out YOUR way. NG
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Ha! Sure, you left a bar alone.
Anyway, this is awesome. From the opening description, soooo accurate, to the end, exactly what it is like, especially when he/she has dumped you. Damn, I love how you describe HER when she asks about you. That hits home hard. In the end, there is no way you can accept that it is over. At least I see it that way. Your best style. Just laying it out YOUR way. NG
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Ahh. You know me too well ... I guess because you DO know me too well. LOL
You have this spot on. Well, at least I got some chicks to tell me I'm wonderful and hot. HAHAHA! You'd be surprised how much that helps. Thanks a bunch. michael
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
wow what an interesting read and next time you decide to take someone home...call me...
Sad, true to some, interesting, thought provoking as you always do,
had to read it a second time to fully understand as I have a hard time following the broken lines. Sorry
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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wow what an interesting read and next time you decide to take someone home...call me...
Sad, true to some, interesting, thought provoking as you always do,
had to read it a second time to fully understand as I have a hard time following the broken lines. Sorry
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Yeah, me and my broken lines and colours. LOL
You can run the cursor over it to get it all in one colour. A good trick when the font is too dark too.
Glad you liked. mike
Comment from c_lucas
I'm sure everyone has found themselves
Seeking companionship from a bottle
Hoping in this dark interior
To find a meaning to their life
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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I'm sure everyone has found themselves
Seeking companionship from a bottle
Hoping in this dark interior
To find a meaning to their life
***
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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So very true, Charlie. Thanks a million. mike
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You are welcome, Michael. Charlie
