Veronica Remembers
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Calin's Back"An illegitimate child is born to famous parents
8 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Intriguing, well written and addictive, I read your note that you don't publish so much these days because you write books, I understand and I wish you great success, you are a talented writer and no word is wasted here, best of luck, no sixes left, but this deserves one, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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Intriguing, well written and addictive, I read your note that you don't publish so much these days because you write books, I understand and I wish you great success, you are a talented writer and no word is wasted here, best of luck, no sixes left, but this deserves one, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017
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Thank you Dolly, this one is presently doing the rounds of agent's. I appreciate your comment
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Okay, I'm up to date. This is an intriguing story. I think Calin will get to the bottom of it, and learn a lot more than he bargained for. Very well written and makes me want more. Well done, I'll have to wait for the next part. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Okay, I'm up to date. This is an intriguing story. I think Calin will get to the bottom of it, and learn a lot more than he bargained for. Very well written and makes me want more. Well done, I'll have to wait for the next part. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 29-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Thank you Sandra. I really appreciate your comments. Sorry about the delay in the next post, should be there tomorrow.
Comment from LaRosa
' While never forgotten, the past was just that, passed. And a way beyond change.'
Hardest thing in life? getting past the past even though the
computer brain won't forget, it just files and saves...
I am unsure of what 'a way beyond change' means. Hafta think on it.
' Some things were too deeply ingrained to ever allow any deletion.'
'To Tyler, Calin had never died. He'd been betrayed, but never beaten.'
A lot of people are in these shoes, can relate to the statement. :)
'He loved the feeling of freedom the run engendered. True peace, the sound of the bird life and wind rustling through the trees. And most of all the absence of the intrusion of man and his noise making machines.'
Then POW, the machine noise, the intrusion. Nicely done!
Now the invader must run to engender his own freedom. I love how you worked
this in!
I do enjoy your writing skills, your ability to weave ideas without literally stating them.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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' While never forgotten, the past was just that, passed. And a way beyond change.'
Hardest thing in life? getting past the past even though the
computer brain won't forget, it just files and saves...
I am unsure of what 'a way beyond change' means. Hafta think on it.
' Some things were too deeply ingrained to ever allow any deletion.'
'To Tyler, Calin had never died. He'd been betrayed, but never beaten.'
A lot of people are in these shoes, can relate to the statement. :)
'He loved the feeling of freedom the run engendered. True peace, the sound of the bird life and wind rustling through the trees. And most of all the absence of the intrusion of man and his noise making machines.'
Then POW, the machine noise, the intrusion. Nicely done!
Now the invader must run to engender his own freedom. I love how you worked
this in!
I do enjoy your writing skills, your ability to weave ideas without literally stating them.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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You have provided the boost this writer needed. I'm in the process of searching for an agent. I think I stand a better chance of winning the lottery and I don't even have a ticket.
Thank you for reading and then postong suck a fantastic review
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I was confused at first when I started reading this chapter but I like where it went after a while.All the names are confusing to me. After I sorted it out I was pleased with the direction it was taking. Maybe Jackson will get the help he needs now. Well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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I was confused at first when I started reading this chapter but I like where it went after a while.All the names are confusing to me. After I sorted it out I was pleased with the direction it was taking. Maybe Jackson will get the help he needs now. Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Thank you Nancy and I apologise for the confusion with the characters. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review
Comment from frogbook
Good writing. Tense and intriguing. Good progression of the story and strong characterizations. Should turn into a great novel.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Good writing. Tense and intriguing. Good progression of the story and strong characterizations. Should turn into a great novel.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Frogbook, your comments are much appreciated.
Comment from Mistydawn
This is a very interesting chapter, well-written the plot moves along nicely. The dialogue seems natural. Your hook at the end leaves us wondering what will happen next. What did the guy get into and can Tyler help him out without blowing his cover. Nice job.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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This is a very interesting chapter, well-written the plot moves along nicely. The dialogue seems natural. Your hook at the end leaves us wondering what will happen next. What did the guy get into and can Tyler help him out without blowing his cover. Nice job.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Mistydawn, what a delightful sounding name.
Thank you for reading and reviewing Veronica Remembers.
Comment from royowen
So Roberts/Tyler discovers Jackson Moffat trying to kill himself by gassing himself in his car, immediately he returns to being Calin Roberts again. I wonder how he LANs to help Moffat, but probably a revenge motive has been triggered. Well done, Bob, excellent story, blessings, Roy
Typo Can the bank (can) tell you wre the money is?
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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So Roberts/Tyler discovers Jackson Moffat trying to kill himself by gassing himself in his car, immediately he returns to being Calin Roberts again. I wonder how he LANs to help Moffat, but probably a revenge motive has been triggered. Well done, Bob, excellent story, blessings, Roy
Typo Can the bank (can) tell you wre the money is?
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Thank you Roy. Your comments are always appreciated.
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Welcome Bob
Comment from beizanten
A very interesting background summary, you definitely caught my interest! Interesting first paragraph true time heal most thing. AN interesting plotline and characters
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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A very interesting background summary, you definitely caught my interest! Interesting first paragraph true time heal most thing. AN interesting plotline and characters
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Thank you beizanten for reading and reviewing my work. I truly appreciate your comments
