Beauty in the Norm
How do I begin when the beginning is ...37 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written introduction. In a world of madness it is not easy to find beauty or normal. When the norm is to be mad there is no place for normal. Outside beauty always proof to be ugly inside.
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A very well-written introduction. In a world of madness it is not easy to find beauty or normal. When the norm is to be mad there is no place for normal. Outside beauty always proof to be ugly inside.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
Comment from nordicgirl
Bad? Honestly, I don't know how bad this can be if it cracked me up big time. A snake`s asshole? Too funny. This is going to be a great trilogy. You are going to have to polish your seduction powers to get backing though. I think you may still have it. HEHEHE!! NG
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Bad? Honestly, I don't know how bad this can be if it cracked me up big time. A snake`s asshole? Too funny. This is going to be a great trilogy. You are going to have to polish your seduction powers to get backing though. I think you may still have it. HEHEHE!! NG
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Well I read this, then read the requirements and then read again, and I reckon you've nailed the criteria for a very bad opening line. Good luck with the financial backing LOL and in the contest.
cheers.
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Well I read this, then read the requirements and then read again, and I reckon you've nailed the criteria for a very bad opening line. Good luck with the financial backing LOL and in the contest.
cheers.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
Comment from beizanten
Well , congratulation it is both dull and confusing which mean you had done well and might actually had a chance to win
Keep up the good work!
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Well , congratulation it is both dull and confusing which mean you had done well and might actually had a chance to win
Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
Comment from Sis Cat
Yes, this is a beautifully bad first line right down there with "It was a dark and stormy night." It can't get any worse than what you penned. Truth be told, it takes craft and humor to achieve what you accomplished in your opening line about the abnormal Norm the alien. You broke every rule in the book to pen this--overuse of Norm and its derivatives, passive, long sentence. Your closing clause was hilarious:
Norm could never attain the beauty to be normal in a world where beauty was uglier than a snake's asshole seen through a kaleidoscope.
Thank you for scaring. I think I will pass on your novel, but I wish you success in the contest with this How Bad Can It Be? entry.
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Yes, this is a beautifully bad first line right down there with "It was a dark and stormy night." It can't get any worse than what you penned. Truth be told, it takes craft and humor to achieve what you accomplished in your opening line about the abnormal Norm the alien. You broke every rule in the book to pen this--overuse of Norm and its derivatives, passive, long sentence. Your closing clause was hilarious:
Norm could never attain the beauty to be normal in a world where beauty was uglier than a snake's asshole seen through a kaleidoscope.
Thank you for scaring. I think I will pass on your novel, but I wish you success in the contest with this How Bad Can It Be? entry.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
Comment from Octavia
Awesome, Michael. Horribly, terribly awesome. I wonder how those creative ideas flow through your head. I got my laugh for the day. The author notes are hilarious.
Sorry - I'm outta sixes. (but I think I might get $$$ to back your trilogy when I show them you first sentence)
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Awesome, Michael. Horribly, terribly awesome. I wonder how those creative ideas flow through your head. I got my laugh for the day. The author notes are hilarious.
Sorry - I'm outta sixes. (but I think I might get $$$ to back your trilogy when I show them you first sentence)
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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I'm looking forward to our future partnership. I'll have to get to work on those novels. WE are going to be rich, famous and no doubt idolized by the world. All in a days work. Thanks a million. mike :))
Comment from rheabug
This is a clever sentence for your first in a trilogy. Thank you for sharing this and I will be delighted to see your addition to this presentation. HUGS.......
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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This is a clever sentence for your first in a trilogy. Thank you for sharing this and I will be delighted to see your addition to this presentation. HUGS.......
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Comment Written 27-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Thanks so much, Rhea. So pleased you enjoyed. Hugs back. mike :))
