To Let You Go
lyrics in a free verse mix up with rhymes make sense?6 total reviews
Comment from B.B. Rose
A clever approach on all the undesired advice we get from friends and family about our choice of significant others. Your refrain could stand some more rhythm (IMHO)
Everybody tells me
Just to let you go.
They say you're not right for me
But how could they ever know
How the two of us are perfect
When we're left alone?
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2017
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A clever approach on all the undesired advice we get from friends and family about our choice of significant others. Your refrain could stand some more rhythm (IMHO)
Everybody tells me
Just to let you go.
They say you're not right for me
But how could they ever know
How the two of us are perfect
When we're left alone?
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2017
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Yes thank you for your suggestion, it's actually lyrics and that part is more of a chorus than verse. but I get it.
thxs for stopping by and for your support\
lulube
Comment from luther maddox
This is a heart breaking poem, sad, beautifully sad in its own way. It is the polarization of the mind, heart. and spirit. It is the title of one of my works in three parts. Your poem in its essence touches the heart, make it stronger.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2017
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This is a heart breaking poem, sad, beautifully sad in its own way. It is the polarization of the mind, heart. and spirit. It is the title of one of my works in three parts. Your poem in its essence touches the heart, make it stronger.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2017
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Wish it would hurry up with the stronger part. lol I guess I figured I'd have a last relationship till the last day here and poof, it was gone. lol gotta see the humor somewhere or I'll go nuts. thxs for your support in your comments
lulube
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cool.
Comment from TAB_that's me
It makes me so sad when people are lonely. I have a friend that desperately wants to be with someone and she can't find that person. Though I can say that being with the wrong person brings its own sort of loneliness. I hope you find someone who treats you well and makes you happy.
teresa
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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It makes me so sad when people are lonely. I have a friend that desperately wants to be with someone and she can't find that person. Though I can say that being with the wrong person brings its own sort of loneliness. I hope you find someone who treats you well and makes you happy.
teresa
Comment Written 27-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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Just another day in the life. Thxs for your support on the poems and me. I can count on you.\
lulube
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Lulube
= Yep, everyone else has all the answers---then say you shouldn't have listened to them if things go south!
= I like your picture. Is this one of yours? Reminds me of Ohio.
= Thanks for the welcome. Nice to be back.
Cheers ... J (*<*)
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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Hi, Lulube
= Yep, everyone else has all the answers---then say you shouldn't have listened to them if things go south!
= I like your picture. Is this one of yours? Reminds me of Ohio.
= Thanks for the welcome. Nice to be back.
Cheers ... J (*<*)
Comment Written 27-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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Ya, the photos mine, all of them are that I use with the poems. Some don't come across very well though. Thxs for your time to give review. Appreciate it
lulube
Comment from country ranch writer
They say absence make the heart grow fonder who knows for sure only you can tell how you feel about this person. People can't live your life for you though they say other qise
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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They say absence make the heart grow fonder who knows for sure only you can tell how you feel about this person. People can't live your life for you though they say other qise
Comment Written 26-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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Just a lot of blah blah blah going around. I'm open for new. lol thxs for your support.
lulube
Comment from His Grayness
This work is exceptionally well presented in all ways. The coloration and photo is certainly splendid and the writing is also very well done. As to the content of the writing, I did not find it to be very compelling to the reader and though there is a lot of emotion here, it is obviously very private to someone special and I hope for the goodwill of this author, that the message gets through with all the power and sincerity intended. HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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This work is exceptionally well presented in all ways. The coloration and photo is certainly splendid and the writing is also very well done. As to the content of the writing, I did not find it to be very compelling to the reader and though there is a lot of emotion here, it is obviously very private to someone special and I hope for the goodwill of this author, that the message gets through with all the power and sincerity intended. HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment Written 26-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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thxs for your honesty and great comments. Thxs for stopping by
lulube
