Deep in Thought
A Rondelet for the contest82 total reviews
Comment from country ranch writer
Such a beautiful set up for this it stands alone a picture is worth a thousand words. She is contomplating on her days adventures full of excitement and all she had to do was convince mom to let her go outside
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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Such a beautiful set up for this it stands alone a picture is worth a thousand words. She is contomplating on her days adventures full of excitement and all she had to do was convince mom to let her go outside
Comment Written 25-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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Very many thanks, CRW, for your kind review and comments. Much appreciated! Tony
Comment from Boogienights
I really like this contest entry. It follows the rules and I think it will do very well. Liked the picture you put with it , but what I liked the most are the words, which advises that their is much to think about and it would be best to think before we speak. That's what I got out of it anyway.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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I really like this contest entry. It follows the rules and I think it will do very well. Liked the picture you put with it , but what I liked the most are the words, which advises that their is much to think about and it would be best to think before we speak. That's what I got out of it anyway.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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Thanks for another kind review, Boogienights, and for your interesting comments, which were right on the nail. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from krys123
Blessings in Cheers, Tony;
-by utilizing this Rondelet style of poetry within this conceptual theme of thinking before doing you have created an exceptional poem that fits this style so appropriately.
-All the tools necessary for this poem and style have been met and not only met but actually devised in such a way that it is composed with such accuracy.
-Also the moral is a wise one that we should think before we act.
-Who's the picture of? Is that your granddaughter? Anyways with her finger in her mouth. It looks like she's thinking on doing something and it is obviously exceptional for this conceptual theme.
-Thanks for sharing, Tony, and take care and have a good one.
Alex
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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Blessings in Cheers, Tony;
-by utilizing this Rondelet style of poetry within this conceptual theme of thinking before doing you have created an exceptional poem that fits this style so appropriately.
-All the tools necessary for this poem and style have been met and not only met but actually devised in such a way that it is composed with such accuracy.
-Also the moral is a wise one that we should think before we act.
-Who's the picture of? Is that your granddaughter? Anyways with her finger in her mouth. It looks like she's thinking on doing something and it is obviously exceptional for this conceptual theme.
-Thanks for sharing, Tony, and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 25-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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Thanks for your review, Alex. I appreciate your kind comments and the six stars. Yes, that's a picture of my granddaughter in New York. We're looking forward to her being here with us again this Christmas. All the best to you and yours, Tony
Comment from damommy
This is priceless! She look as though she's pondering the mysteries of the universe. Certainly lost in thought. Wouldn't you like to know what she's thinking?
Your poem is delightful in itself, and Teagan's face says it all. 8-)
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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This is priceless! She look as though she's pondering the mysteries of the universe. Certainly lost in thought. Wouldn't you like to know what she's thinking?
Your poem is delightful in itself, and Teagan's face says it all. 8-)
Comment Written 25-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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Thanks for your review, Yvonne. I appreciate your kind comments. It would be fascinating to know what is going on in those small brains! All the best, Tony
Comment from estory
I liked the repetitions, its an interesting musical element, gives you the sense of pondering over a problem or a condition, not easily resolved. It could use an image or something to color it up, maybe estory
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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I liked the repetitions, its an interesting musical element, gives you the sense of pondering over a problem or a condition, not easily resolved. It could use an image or something to color it up, maybe estory
Comment Written 25-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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Again, many thanks for your review. I was interested in your comment about the lack of image. Not sure how that would have happened, for I did post it with one. Best wishes, Tony
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I'm talking about imagery in the language of the poem, here. I don't pay that much attention to accompanying photographs, my focus is on the literature. estory
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Excellent Rondelet Tony. What a lovely
picture of your grand daughter, She truly
seems to be deep in thought. Well done.
Nancy
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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Excellent Rondelet Tony. What a lovely
picture of your grand daughter, She truly
seems to be deep in thought. Well done.
Nancy
Comment Written 25-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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Thanks for your review, Nancy. I appreciate your kind comments. All the best, Tony
Comment from Janet Foor
A sweet Rondelet poem Tony. The little one males a pretty picture looking like she is deep in thought.
Very nice presentation and we might all want to think of her before we speak. Maybe accrue some better words as the world unfolds.
Well done
blessings
janet
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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A sweet Rondelet poem Tony. The little one males a pretty picture looking like she is deep in thought.
Very nice presentation and we might all want to think of her before we speak. Maybe accrue some better words as the world unfolds.
Well done
blessings
janet
Comment Written 25-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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Thanks for your review, Janet. I appreciate your kind comments. All the best, Tony
Comment from Octavia
This is a lovely yet profound piece. If parents only knew how children are processing the these baby and toddler years - pre-speech, I am sure they would be more careful with their words and actions.
I have been going round and round with this form. I have a question (for you, the master). lol
The rules state:
"The refrain is written in tetra-syllabic or dimeter and the other lines are twice as long - octasyllabic or tetrameter."
In your piece lines 2 & 4 (etc.) are shorter than lines 1 & 3 (and so on)
Please tell me what I am missing.
Thank you so much.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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This is a lovely yet profound piece. If parents only knew how children are processing the these baby and toddler years - pre-speech, I am sure they would be more careful with their words and actions.
I have been going round and round with this form. I have a question (for you, the master). lol
The rules state:
"The refrain is written in tetra-syllabic or dimeter and the other lines are twice as long - octasyllabic or tetrameter."
In your piece lines 2 & 4 (etc.) are shorter than lines 1 & 3 (and so on)
Please tell me what I am missing.
Thank you so much.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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Thanks for your review, Octavia. I very much appreciated your comments about the form of the poem. I went back and had another look, only to discover that you were quite right! I had the whole thing back-to-front! You gave me enough time before the contest deadline to recast the whole thing according to the correct metrical scheme, as below:
Much thought is due
before I gain the words to speak.
Much thought is due
in times like this while words accrue.
Each day I learn of life?s mystique;
fresh marvels that unfold each week.
Much thought is due.
I owe you a thumbs up for this one, but unfortunately have spent my ration for this month. Many thanks, anyway. It is always a pleasure to get a thorough review! Very few people noticed the basic error in my original!
All the best, Tony
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It's lovely, Tony.
Best of luck .... you have my vote1
Comment from Mark Valentine
This may be stating the obvious, but the fit between the picture and your words is what makes this one. The photo is awesome (Is Anna Fawcus your wife? daughter?)
At any rate, this youngster is obviously deep in thought - would that everyone would think so much before speaking.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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This may be stating the obvious, but the fit between the picture and your words is what makes this one. The photo is awesome (Is Anna Fawcus your wife? daughter?)
At any rate, this youngster is obviously deep in thought - would that everyone would think so much before speaking.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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Thanks, Mark. Yes, that's my granddaughter. My daughter is a professional photographer in New York, so I get plenty of photos for inspiration! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from rjuselius
aaawww, this is such a sweetheart of a poem dear tony! indeed, children have so many things they want to know and their curiosity is next to genius.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a big squeeze!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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aaawww, this is such a sweetheart of a poem dear tony! indeed, children have so many things they want to know and their curiosity is next to genius.
thank you for sharing!
good luck!
blessings and a big squeeze!
rebekka x
Comment Written 25-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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Thanks, Rebekka. Lovely comments and much appreciated! Tony
