Pale Sisters
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Ingress of the Envoy"Science fiction.
8 total reviews
Comment from F. Wehr3
I enjoyed this piece, Bill. Having only read maybe two pieces from the book, I'm not privy to everything you're going for, but I thought this has potential for an abundance of plot threads.
Good luck with your project,
Russell
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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I enjoyed this piece, Bill. Having only read maybe two pieces from the book, I'm not privy to everything you're going for, but I thought this has potential for an abundance of plot threads.
Good luck with your project,
Russell
Comment Written 27-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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Thanks, Russell
Comment from apky
I liked the expression:
nestled in the chamber of his ear. I could vividly imagine such a voice.
I've closely followed the story of the Pale Sisters, although I'm sure I missed several chapters at the beginning and in between.
But this introduction is powerful in impact and handling.
I look forward to how the story will progress.
Best,
Apky
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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I liked the expression:
nestled in the chamber of his ear. I could vividly imagine such a voice.
I've closely followed the story of the Pale Sisters, although I'm sure I missed several chapters at the beginning and in between.
But this introduction is powerful in impact and handling.
I look forward to how the story will progress.
Best,
Apky
Comment Written 26-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2017
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Thanks, Apky, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from nomi338
Whoa! This is a totally new and alarming direction for you. This is nothing like the mostly irreverent musings that you usually engage in. Skunk World, Caterpillar World and such. This back story does much to set up and explain the story of the Pale sisters. Yet, it came as a total surprise. The language was so different that I was knocked totally off stride.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017
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Whoa! This is a totally new and alarming direction for you. This is nothing like the mostly irreverent musings that you usually engage in. Skunk World, Caterpillar World and such. This back story does much to set up and explain the story of the Pale sisters. Yet, it came as a total surprise. The language was so different that I was knocked totally off stride.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017
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Thanks, nomi. I'm still working on the end to this story, so I thought I'd backstory us up for a while, to see how we got here.
Comment from robina1978
Nice artwork that complements your chapter very well. Two forces struggled, and in the ends with them allowing men in their area. A bit like the Genesis.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017
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Nice artwork that complements your chapter very well. Two forces struggled, and in the ends with them allowing men in their area. A bit like the Genesis.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017
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Thanks, Ine, for the exceptional review. Bill
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Thanks, Ine, for the exceptional review. Bill
Comment from Possummagic
I really enjoyed your story and had thought it was a story into the future then realised it's almost a prequel to a previous story. I like your style and hope to learn a lot from the manner in which you put stories together. PM
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017
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I really enjoyed your story and had thought it was a story into the future then realised it's almost a prequel to a previous story. I like your style and hope to learn a lot from the manner in which you put stories together. PM
Comment Written 25-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017
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Thanks, PM. I hope it all rolls out and works into the storyline.
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You're welcome. Sounds good to me!PM
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Thanks, PM. I hope it all rolls out and works into the storyline.
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You're welcome.
Comment from lyenochka
Interesting passage. I wasn't sure if this was based on history. I know the ancient Phoenicians which the current day Lebanese ascribe their ancestry to, were an advanced people who came up with an alphabet which influenced many of today's alphabets. Looking forward to see how the "Seer" will reveal himself.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017
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Interesting passage. I wasn't sure if this was based on history. I know the ancient Phoenicians which the current day Lebanese ascribe their ancestry to, were an advanced people who came up with an alphabet which influenced many of today's alphabets. Looking forward to see how the "Seer" will reveal himself.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017
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As I go along, I will replace the character names with more historically accurate leaders of the time. Thanks for taking a look. Bill
Comment from frierajac
It seems somewhat dreamy with the word gossamer as an adj. although they may have had such woven materials, who knows. I don't know if, as I can't tell from this if you are interested in authenticity. If so, a book, Memory and the Mediterranean is the best modern attempt.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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It seems somewhat dreamy with the word gossamer as an adj. although they may have had such woven materials, who knows. I don't know if, as I can't tell from this if you are interested in authenticity. If so, a book, Memory and the Mediterranean is the best modern attempt.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Gossamer, adjective, used to refer to something very light, thin, and insubstantial or delicate.
Gossamer is also the term used for spider web
Nothing to do with material
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Pure quality, as I always expect from you Bill. There is always a likeable quality associated with your work and it is good that you are setting up a good background for your main story. This attention to detail will reap rewards I am sure. I enjoyed this immensely and really enjoyed getting stuck into your work again, it is truly awesome and I always enjoy it immensely, kindest regards and best wishes, meia xx
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Pure quality, as I always expect from you Bill. There is always a likeable quality associated with your work and it is good that you are setting up a good background for your main story. This attention to detail will reap rewards I am sure. I enjoyed this immensely and really enjoyed getting stuck into your work again, it is truly awesome and I always enjoy it immensely, kindest regards and best wishes, meia xx
Comment Written 24-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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You are very kind, Meia. Thank you for the terrific review.
