The Eidolon
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Chapter 7: House Key"Family heinously murdered. The question is by who?
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Comment from Asem.inspirations
Hello Brett:
I love how you give us just enough to keep us wondering. Reading your books is just like watching a TV mystery with all of the commercials in between and sometimes we have to wait for the next episode for a day or so.
This story is very well written, Brett. I am certainly enjoying it. I will be reading the rest of your post today as the day continues. I should be all caught up tonight, so far, so good.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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Hello Brett:
I love how you give us just enough to keep us wondering. Reading your books is just like watching a TV mystery with all of the commercials in between and sometimes we have to wait for the next episode for a day or so.
This story is very well written, Brett. I am certainly enjoying it. I will be reading the rest of your post today as the day continues. I should be all caught up tonight, so far, so good.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017
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Glad you are enjoying this story.
Appreciate your comments, support, and reviews.
Comment from Rasmine
Awesome! I'm giving you a six. I'm sorry I haven't been on too much, lately, just a lot going on in my personal life.
Keep up the entertaining writing.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Awesome! I'm giving you a six. I'm sorry I haven't been on too much, lately, just a lot going on in my personal life.
Keep up the entertaining writing.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Sometimes life does get in the way of writing, so need to apologize. That is fully understood.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh yes very nicely done and adding information without actually giving anything away is done so nicely. Adding to the descriptions of the boy, one is led to believe he did not do it.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Oh yes very nicely done and adding information without actually giving anything away is done so nicely. Adding to the descriptions of the boy, one is led to believe he did not do it.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Always appreciate your insights.
Comment from Spitfire
Trust old school Miller to blame in on the internet and violent movies. That Drew was naked when arrested suggests that he might be under the spell of some evil entity in the house.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Trust old school Miller to blame in on the internet and violent movies. That Drew was naked when arrested suggests that he might be under the spell of some evil entity in the house.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Appreciate your comments and support.
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This seems a cut and paste answer to all my reviews.
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I like to thank my reviewers for taking the time to read my writing.
Comment from BeasPeas
This is chapter three of your new book, so I'm coming into the story "cold." However, you notes and cast of characters give the reader enough information to put together the gist of the situation. Interesting with good character development and details that seem natural. Dialogue is believable. Marilyn
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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This is chapter three of your new book, so I'm coming into the story "cold." However, you notes and cast of characters give the reader enough information to put together the gist of the situation. Interesting with good character development and details that seem natural. Dialogue is believable. Marilyn
Comment Written 23-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Appreciate your comments, support, and the review.
Comment from MTF1955
Another great charter. Excellently written. You paint your characters with a find brush that brings them to life, pulling us along with them. A wonderful read. Mary
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Another great charter. Excellently written. You paint your characters with a find brush that brings them to life, pulling us along with them. A wonderful read. Mary
Comment Written 23-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from dracofelsinensis
This reads easily and there are some nice touches.
I liked "her small, warm, eggshell white clapboard house" and Marjorie's suspicion of the Internet and belief that Darden could guard youngsters against predators there. The nice, homely baking contrasts with the shocking crime that is under investigation. Then it hits us: "It was there Drew Larsen sat naked on the swing awaiting the arrival of the Police after the bloodbath". Quite an image!
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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This reads easily and there are some nice touches.
I liked "her small, warm, eggshell white clapboard house" and Marjorie's suspicion of the Internet and belief that Darden could guard youngsters against predators there. The nice, homely baking contrasts with the shocking crime that is under investigation. Then it hits us: "It was there Drew Larsen sat naked on the swing awaiting the arrival of the Police after the bloodbath". Quite an image!
Comment Written 23-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review.
Comment from doggymad
Interesting touch here with Marjorie offering what might, just might, be the first clue to what turned Drew's mind.
The murders of 20 years previously keep cropping up and I am intrigued by the parallels
hugs
Freda
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Interesting touch here with Marjorie offering what might, just might, be the first clue to what turned Drew's mind.
The murders of 20 years previously keep cropping up and I am intrigued by the parallels
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 23-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
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Comment from Sankey
Well done again, mate. Making good progress and I look forward to some solution down the road. I wonder if the boy found the murders and for some warped reason took responsibility himself.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Well done again, mate. Making good progress and I look forward to some solution down the road. I wonder if the boy found the murders and for some warped reason took responsibility himself.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Comment from Possummagic
I'm still enjoying this story. It's such a sad tale of a young boy turning into the type of monster that would be capable of the massacre he has admitted to. I feel that detective Darden is going the " extra mile" to ensure that Drew is not unjustly sentenced for the murders. Great story line and it just flows nicely. PM
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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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I'm still enjoying this story. It's such a sad tale of a young boy turning into the type of monster that would be capable of the massacre he has admitted to. I feel that detective Darden is going the " extra mile" to ensure that Drew is not unjustly sentenced for the murders. Great story line and it just flows nicely. PM
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Comment Written 23-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
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