Escape Plan
Lighten up17 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We feel like this occasionally and when we do it can be all consuming. Often it is fear that clouds our mind and not the problem, to free ourselves is the ultimate goal, food for thought here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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We feel like this occasionally and when we do it can be all consuming. Often it is fear that clouds our mind and not the problem, to free ourselves is the ultimate goal, food for thought here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much for your encouraging words.
Comment from Possummagic
This is a really lovely poem and your use of apt words and phrases lends to the beauty of the poem. It will be an excellent entry in the " free verse poetry" contest. I wish you luck. PM
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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This is a really lovely poem and your use of apt words and phrases lends to the beauty of the poem. It will be an excellent entry in the " free verse poetry" contest. I wish you luck. PM
Comment Written 24-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Thanks.
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Welcome.PM
Comment from RoDanni
I'm totally rooting for whoever "I" is in this poem. to them I say, You say fear guides your every move, but you are facing down demons and that makes you very brave. If you are so fearful, where does the fire within you come from? Why say you are entirely guided by fear? (This is especially powerful..."Every fear I conquer
blazes hot enough
to melt another bar") You rock. Keep on blazing that trail to freedom
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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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I'm totally rooting for whoever "I" is in this poem. to them I say, You say fear guides your every move, but you are facing down demons and that makes you very brave. If you are so fearful, where does the fire within you come from? Why say you are entirely guided by fear? (This is especially powerful..."Every fear I conquer
blazes hot enough
to melt another bar") You rock. Keep on blazing that trail to freedom
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your comments.
Comment from Lucian Carter
A nice little free verse piece. The flow is excellent, the punctuation all in the right place. I would say every word is well chosen, but for the phrase "weighted down" I think you should drop the t. Weighed flows better.
I get this feeling. Years of mental illness makes me empathize. I can only say it is possible to break free.
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2017
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A nice little free verse piece. The flow is excellent, the punctuation all in the right place. I would say every word is well chosen, but for the phrase "weighted down" I think you should drop the t. Weighed flows better.
I get this feeling. Years of mental illness makes me empathize. I can only say it is possible to break free.
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 23-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2017
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Thanks for your review. I will take your advice, you're right.
Comment from smileycloud
strong emotional free verse
the desperation for release is so strong in your poem which brings the character to life
good luck in the contest
gave a smiley day
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2017
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strong emotional free verse
the desperation for release is so strong in your poem which brings the character to life
good luck in the contest
gave a smiley day
Comment Written 23-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2017
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Your review brightened my day.
Comment from patcelaw
Writer this is a profound message of how we all have fear which we have to overcome to truly become free. Blessings for a good weekend. Patricia
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017
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Writer this is a profound message of how we all have fear which we have to overcome to truly become free. Blessings for a good weekend. Patricia
Comment Written 22-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from ragamuffin
Fear is a good topic to write about as we're all familiar with it. Nice choice of descriptive words. It's a short piece but relays well a feeling of dread, but ultimately of hope.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017
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Fear is a good topic to write about as we're all familiar with it. Nice choice of descriptive words. It's a short piece but relays well a feeling of dread, but ultimately of hope.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Fridayauthor
This is a very interesting look at depression and fear from the point of view of someone committed to fighting it and its demons. Very nicely worded and well constructed.
The image adds to the posting as it certainly catches the reader's attention.
Thank you.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017
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This is a very interesting look at depression and fear from the point of view of someone committed to fighting it and its demons. Very nicely worded and well constructed.
The image adds to the posting as it certainly catches the reader's attention.
Thank you.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you so much for sharing your free verse entry with us. Your words flow well and the meaning comes across clearly. The imagery and context of the poem resound within each line.
A nit: 'My mind is imprisioned.(imprisoned.)'
~patty~
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017
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thank you so much for sharing your free verse entry with us. Your words flow well and the meaning comes across clearly. The imagery and context of the poem resound within each line.
A nit: 'My mind is imprisioned.(imprisoned.)'
~patty~
Comment Written 22-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Bichon
A very well written poem. You've written about a subject that applies to many, and have described it greatly. Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017
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A very well written poem. You've written about a subject that applies to many, and have described it greatly. Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your review.
