Woman, Man's Soul Gift
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Comment from kahpot
An excellent poem and read it rhymes and flows wonderfully with a great story inside great artwork on top thank you for sharing, very well done****kahpot
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017
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An excellent poem and read it rhymes and flows wonderfully with a great story inside great artwork on top thank you for sharing, very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 22-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017
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Thank you.
Comment from MAB
Pleasant concept and beautiful image but I wish it flowed better and I would suggest not breaking it apart to be written it painted a nice description overall though keep it up
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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Pleasant concept and beautiful image but I wish it flowed better and I would suggest not breaking it apart to be written it painted a nice description overall though keep it up
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Comment Written 22-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from ragamuffin
Some interesting introspect throughout such a touching piece. Makes one wonder what they've missed on by passing on someone who cares. Certainly well thought out and expressed in a bittersweet prose.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Some interesting introspect throughout such a touching piece. Makes one wonder what they've missed on by passing on someone who cares. Certainly well thought out and expressed in a bittersweet prose.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Mustang Patty
the beauty of your words comes shining through. We all try to imagine what love works like, feels like, and how it grows. Your poem gives us the emotions between a man and a woman - how he feels when he's thinking about her,
~patty~
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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the beauty of your words comes shining through. We all try to imagine what love works like, feels like, and how it grows. Your poem gives us the emotions between a man and a woman - how he feels when he's thinking about her,
~patty~
Comment Written 22-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Yup. Thank you, Patty.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Your poem covers a lot of bases, from love rejected, to love growing old and stale...
The man's perspective is shown here, but the woman's perspective is hinted at as well. Indeed, love is a tricky beast - and mysteriously, an ever-changing beast.
These lines spoke the most strongly to me:
As the seasons go by,
and the leaves start to dry,
man turns inward
and bids love goodbye.
But he smiles that half-smile,
with a hope
it can no longer bring.
Steve
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Your poem covers a lot of bases, from love rejected, to love growing old and stale...
The man's perspective is shown here, but the woman's perspective is hinted at as well. Indeed, love is a tricky beast - and mysteriously, an ever-changing beast.
These lines spoke the most strongly to me:
As the seasons go by,
and the leaves start to dry,
man turns inward
and bids love goodbye.
But he smiles that half-smile,
with a hope
it can no longer bring.
Steve
Comment Written 22-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Steve.
Those lines were revised
quite a few times.
But, I do believe they now, hit home hard.
Doug
Comment from Janet Foor
A thought provoking and melancholy free verse poem Victor. It really has to be right for both the man and the woman for it to work out and still... they have to work at it to keep that "love" alive and to survive the trials of this life.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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A thought provoking and melancholy free verse poem Victor. It really has to be right for both the man and the woman for it to work out and still... they have to work at it to keep that "love" alive and to survive the trials of this life.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 22-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Janet.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello Victor. So have you fallen for someone and she's not paying attention or is this another metaphorical experience? It has a smooth flow, beautiful sentiment and sadness if she really is ignoring you. Well written. Hope you are well and your little girl is finally out of issues and back to school. :) xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017
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Hello Victor. So have you fallen for someone and she's not paying attention or is this another metaphorical experience? It has a smooth flow, beautiful sentiment and sadness if she really is ignoring you. Well written. Hope you are well and your little girl is finally out of issues and back to school. :) xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 22-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017
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Hi. Thanks. My girl's issues will be decided Oct. 31. No, noone is ever going to fall for me. Ha! Except lost hope. I did have one nice thing happen-the letter I wrote on behalf of my daughter, her attorney said it was exceptional. I hope so.
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Oh that's great. I'm sure that will help her situation. The appropriate people will know she comes from decent parents.
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well, initially, she wouldn't allow any letters. I did this in spite. You don't think it's great that a forty year professional attorney thinks my letter is good? You know how MANY letters he's read? I really don't understand your comment, I guess.
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Of course I think it is fantastic Victor. I meant exactly what I said. By you being so thoughtful and writing the piece you did, you gave that judge something to think about. You gave him notice that your daughter did not come from the streets but from a father that is willing to take responsibility and let him know she is cared for and loved. I meant absolutely no disrespect. NONE! .
Comment from Aussie
Great freestyle poem." Hope springs eternal in the human breast." From one heart to another love comes slowly, soul mates are just that; meant to be together. Well done Victor.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Great freestyle poem." Hope springs eternal in the human breast." From one heart to another love comes slowly, soul mates are just that; meant to be together. Well done Victor.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Doug.
Comment from c_lucas
When soul mates meet
And form a couple
Life becomes better
For both of them
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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When soul mates meet
And form a couple
Life becomes better
For both of them
***
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Yup, I think so.
Thank you, Charlie.
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
This is a very sweet heartfelt poem, a little sad actually. You have terrific rhyme in it.
Don't worry, my friend things will all work out for you:))) ~Kerry
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017
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This is a very sweet heartfelt poem, a little sad actually. You have terrific rhyme in it.
Don't worry, my friend things will all work out for you:))) ~Kerry
Comment Written 21-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017
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