Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Your story held my interest. Good character development and a smooth flow of story. It is interesting that Ron and Jenny are connecting again after so long a time. I am looking forward to the next chapter.

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017

Hi there;
thank you so much for reading this chapter of my book, 'The Products of Love.' I hope you will follow it to its conclusion - just two more chapters to go,

~patty~

Comment from Drew Delaney

Excellent

This is such a sad story. ALS is a really scary disease. I think it is even worst than cancer. You are doing a great job writing this story. Have a great week,
Drew xx

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017

Hi Drew;
thank you so much for reading and reviewing. This book is just about to come to an end - only two more chapters. Then, I can concentrate on 'The Waiting Room,' I hope you will follow along,

~patty~

reply by Drew Delaney on 18-Sep-2017

I plan on it, Patty!

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Patty,

So much in such a chapter in the book. You told this part of the story in an awesome way. The presentation is great--I like how you dated the different parts & brought everything together in a smooth flowing story.

Ron's card at the end is great. You leave readers wondering the 'what ifs.'

[8 little paragraphs up for the blue writing of the card: Is 'tread' the right word? I know one can tread water [well, I can't]. Even with an 'ed' would it be better?]

Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017

Hi Jan;
thank you so much for reading this chapter of the book, 'Products of Love.'

Tread is a synonym for walk, and means 'to walk along,' so I think it fits.

I'm glad you enjoyed this and hope you will be there through the finish in just a few more parts,

~patty~

Comment from His Grayness

Excellent

While this is a very lengthy and somewhat complex storyline to stick with, what is important is how well the writing is delivered and how well the writing grips the reader to hang in there to the end. For those reasons, this is a six star work and I obviously have only five, but thank the author for a fine read! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017

Hi Vance;
thank you so much for the lovely review. I'm truly glad you enjoyed it,

~patty~
ps; thank you for the virtual six

Comment from rtobaygo

Excellent

Good afternoon, Patty
Out of sixes and it's only Monday afternoon.

Time will heal most wounds, as it did with her son Joey and his dad. It will be interesting to see if Ron has changed enough for Cathy to consider him as a friend --or more.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017

Hi Ray;
as always, I'm more than happy to take a virtual six.

Thank you so much for the lovely review of this piece,

~patty~

Comment from royowen

Excellent

What a lovely sympathy card from Ron, simple but to the point, from her reaction she probabably still had a spark glowing there. There son (Ron and Jenny's) has contacted Ron, and they've quickly developed a close relationship, I'm betting Ron and Jenny reform a tenuous connection, well done, Patty, great theme. Blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017

Hi Roy;
thank you so much. This is bittersweet in the writing. Its based on a true story, so I can't take too much creative license, but I hope everyone likes how it turns out,

~patty~

reply by royowen on 18-Sep-2017

Ah but you can Patty, it's a familiar theme, but aren't they all?

Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

Hello, Patty,
Good chapter. I think I missed one chapter, but awesome that the boy found his father. I had found my brother about twenty years ago -- he recently passed away, and I was never informed. Funny, I guess some people don't matter. Sorry, just don't know how to feel about not being told.
TC
Nome

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017

Hi there;
familial relations are the strangest of all. I'm sorry to hear you were slighted like that; it hurts. My stepfather passed away about four years after my Mom, and no one told me. I found out when his Christmas card was returned that year.

~patty~

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

In the last chapter, I read Jenny had just found out she was preggers. Now, she's got an eighteen-year-old-son, time flies. My wife and I were watching TV one evening when there was a knock on the door. I opened it and saw a young man in his twenties. He was the spitting image of my brother when he was that age. I said I don't have to ask who you are. He said he was trying to find his father and found my name in the phone book. I said your father just moved to town. I'll give you his address, but you're going to be disappointed when you see what you're going to look like when you're old.

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017

LOL!! There were a few chapters in between (they had been published PRIOR to the rest -- had to do with a contest entry -- )

thanks for sharing your story with me -- what a thought,

~patty~

Comment from doggymad

Excellent

I was beginning to think you had abandoned this story. Great to have another chapter now.

It is great that Joey got to bond with his father and look forward to seeing how things work out when Jenny and Ron get together, that is if they do

hugs

Freda

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017

Hi Freda;

I was having a hard time finishing, and took a break from this one. I want to get it finished before I get much deeper into 'The Waiting Room.' I really enjoy having a few projects to keep me going - otherwise, I get bored or lazy,

I'm glad you liked this one,

~patty~

Comment from Curly Girly

Excellent

Oh, what a sad tale. To raise one's son for 18 years before he meets his father--very sad. The lost years are never caught up. Nothing will be the same.
Newly widowed, she has now received a card from Ron. It sounds as if he might still be interested in renewing their old relationship. Things could work out.

Typo:
"Hi Joey, Ron eked out the words from his dry mouth.
"Hi Joey,["] Ron eked out the words from his dry mouth.

Nicole

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017

Hi Nicole;
thank you so much for catching the nit.

I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter. I'm wrapping this novel up in two more parts. (Then to concentrate on 'The Waiting Room.')

~patty~