Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

How sad. I've cared for a few people with ALS, and it's an awful disease. I'm glad Jenny had Joey back in her life. Maybe Ron does care for her as much as he's able to.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017

Hi Cindy;
sorry its taken so long to reply to your review; been working on my other writing.

thank you for reading the latest in this book. another chapter should be posted shortly.

~patty~

Comment from Asem.inspirations

Excellent

Good morning, Patty:

I am happy that this story turned out so well, not in the sense that she lost her husband to such a painful and horrible disease (and death.) but that she and Ron were able to reconnect with their son after giving him up for adoption. This was good for all of them. I loved that their son got to spend so much time with Ron and that he was there for his mother and stepsisters for the funeral.

So much has happened during the years but in the end it was a success story. It is good that they all have each other.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017

Hi Tier;
there is still one more chapter. It completes the story and ties up all the loose ends,

~patty~

Comment from Natali Holden

Excellent

The reason that I ended up fanning you was because of this story. And after I became your fan, you didn't post anymore to it... until now. I really enjoyed it! The last ending was awful to suffer through, this one is the same! I can't wait for more!
Natali ;)

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017

Hi Natali;
so sorry I took so long to get back to this. I need to wait and see what happened in real life. There's two more chapters, but feel free to join me in the saga of 'The Waiting Room.'

~patty~

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Patty,

I haven't been following the whole story, so perhaps it's presumptuous of me to make any sort of 'structural' comments. The piece is really well written and it's easy to see that you have talent, but you're skimming over all the story. You're telling all the highlights and leaving out the STORY. I recently learned in a class that we should be careful about mentioning things that happened previously if we're not willing to tell the readers exactly what happened. We only pique their interest and leave the with questions and feeling dissatisfied.

Perhaps find a different way to share this info? Either let them experience the stuff first hand OR let them find out about these highlights during a conversation between two characters, maybe, so the reader still feels like he's taking part...?

Just a thought. Thanks and good luck!

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017

Hi Robyn;
that's a good idea, and I will address it. The problem with this for me is I had to wait to see what happened in 'real life,' before I could finish the story. I think I have a way of putting it into dialogue, but given what happened, that may be rough for me.

Thank you so much for your thoughtful review; it gives me some pause, and a better way to write it,

~patty~

Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)

Excellent

Such a moving write. I hope it all comes together for the characthers. You have a very realistic way of writing. well done I enjoy your writes so much kind regards Meia xx

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017

Hi Meia;
thank you so much for the lovely critique. I will be wrapping up this story with the next one or two parts. I hope you will enjoy the rest of the book,

~patty~

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Exceptional

Hello my friend this is truly a love story that is beginning to blossom it is so romantic that a couple can go through so much and still remain close I enjoyed regards Jill

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017

Hi Jill;

thank you so much for the lovely critique. I will be wrapping up this story with the next one or two parts. I hope you will enjoy the rest of the book,

~patty~

Comment from apky

Excellent

Aw, this is going to kill me. I want to know how they get together again and whether the love is still there. I'm guessing Ron is probably alone too - or does he have someone?

Can't wait for the next.

Four-wheeling ~ Sorry, Patty, but what's four-wheeling?

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017

Hi Aki;
thank you so much for the lovely critique. I will be wrapping up this story with the next one or two parts. I hope you will enjoy the rest of the book,

~patty~

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Wow - that was a speedy journey through decades. So the next thought is - will Jenny and Ron get together? Not sure whose hand Jenny is holding in 2017...

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2017

thank you so much for the lovely critique. I will be wrapping up this story with the next one or two parts. I hope you will enjoy the rest of the book,

~patty~

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

Patty, thanks for writing this part of the story. I had wondered where the relationship had taken Jenny and Ron. I see you say it will be continued and I look forward to reading more of the story. Patricia

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017

Hi Patricia;

I got away from this story for a bit. I will get this novel finished so I can concentrate on 'The Waiting Room.' Only two more chapter of this one. Thank you so much for sticking with it and me,

~patty~

Comment from pbomar1115

Excellent

Patty, the story turned out to be lovely. To see Jenny and Ron's hopeful future together gives me a gleeful feeling. I read the beginning of this story and clearly, I did not see it going in this direction. I love it.

Phillip

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017

Hi Phillip;
thank you for the lovely review of this chapter. There's only a bit more of this book, and then I will concentrate on 'The Waiting Room.'

~patty~

reply by pbomar1115 on 18-Sep-2017

Wow. You write fast. I will try keeping up although I must write more. Good luck, Patty.

Phillip