Louise & I
Flash fiction. 100 words.11 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Love this Maria. The fact that she stopped seeing Louise, makes me think she no longer needed her. I do believe this sort of thing can happen, nicely told.
cheers
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2017
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Love this Maria. The fact that she stopped seeing Louise, makes me think she no longer needed her. I do believe this sort of thing can happen, nicely told.
cheers
Comment Written 21-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2017
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I do believe it too.
Thanks for reading.
Comment from damommy
ooooo, an eerie touch of flash fiction.
You covered the entire story in this short piece, and did it well.
Thank you for sharing. 8-)
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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ooooo, an eerie touch of flash fiction.
You covered the entire story in this short piece, and did it well.
Thank you for sharing. 8-)
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Thanks, Yvonne. Have a lovely day.
Comment from robyn corum
Nice!!
MJ,
This is a totally different direction than most of the other entries I've seen for this contest.
I think it's well written and the surprise is nicely hidden until the author brings it out with dramatic flourish. Good luck!! Thanks!
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Nice!!
MJ,
This is a totally different direction than most of the other entries I've seen for this contest.
I think it's well written and the surprise is nicely hidden until the author brings it out with dramatic flourish. Good luck!! Thanks!
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Well... this one isn't for the contest... I wrote it because I like flash fiction (probably because It's difficult for me to write long texts).
Thanks for reading.
Comment from doggymad
Did you not enter this in the contest then? It is a great example of flash fiction. Before mother bursts the bubble this work gives the reader an opportunity to create their own scenario for the missing child
hugs
Freda
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Did you not enter this in the contest then? It is a great example of flash fiction. Before mother bursts the bubble this work gives the reader an opportunity to create their own scenario for the missing child
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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No, not this one. I entered another one that I can't even remember a long time ago.
Thanks for reading.
Comment from BeasPeas
Terrific entry into the contest. In 100-words you've told an interesting story. At first I thought it was an imaginary friend (and in a way it way) but the introduction of the ghost was excellent. So true, I think kids are way more perceptive than adults. Marilyn
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Terrific entry into the contest. In 100-words you've told an interesting story. At first I thought it was an imaginary friend (and in a way it way) but the introduction of the ghost was excellent. So true, I think kids are way more perceptive than adults. Marilyn
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Wow! I'm so glad to see you around again.
How are you?
Thanks for reading.
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Thanks, Maria. Feeling better each day. Cast will be on for about 5 more weeks. Just getting back onto the site. Marilyn
Comment from DR DIP
I remember a movie called drop dead Fred whether the girl had an imaginary friend.
I am sure that is an authentic picture of you and Louise Maria you were such a cutey growing up. Is this really fiction?
thanks for sharing
dip
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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I remember a movie called drop dead Fred whether the girl had an imaginary friend.
I am sure that is an authentic picture of you and Louise Maria you were such a cutey growing up. Is this really fiction?
thanks for sharing
dip
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Oh, yes, this is fiction.
I had an imaginary friend, but I think she was just that. 😜
Thanks for reading.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
And even thought flash fiction...it is true because I have seen it happen and wrote a book on it. Very well done as a short story, no problems noted
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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And even thought flash fiction...it is true because I have seen it happen and wrote a book on it. Very well done as a short story, no problems noted
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Yes, they see children can see ghosts...
What kind of book did you write?
Thanks for your review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written short story. Many children have imaginary friends they will play with for hours. This is a new revelation for me that an imaginary friend can be a ghost.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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A very well-written short story. Many children have imaginary friends they will play with for hours. This is a new revelation for me that an imaginary friend can be a ghost.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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That's what some people say...
Thanks for reading.
Comment from Bucketlist
Your creative divergent thinking was emerging. Do you have intuitive power? Gifted thinking fascinates me. I can quite believe other kids found you different, but celebrate your abilities.
You probably would be great writing a ghost story. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Your creative divergent thinking was emerging. Do you have intuitive power? Gifted thinking fascinates me. I can quite believe other kids found you different, but celebrate your abilities.
You probably would be great writing a ghost story. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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This is just fiction. I had an imaginary friend, but I don't think she was a ghost. ;)
Thanks for reading.
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Sometimes, It's hard for me to tell from your writing what's fiction what's not. I think parents are to often worried about imagination ,instead of en-
couraging it.
Comment from Teri7
This is another great flash fiction story you have penned. This was very interesting and ended differently than I thought it would. You are very creative and good with these type of writes. I enjoyed reading very much! Blessings, Teri
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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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This is another great flash fiction story you have penned. This was very interesting and ended differently than I thought it would. You are very creative and good with these type of writes. I enjoyed reading very much! Blessings, Teri
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Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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I'm glad you enjoyed it, Teri.
Thanks for reading.
