Independence
Acrostic- Loop37 total reviews
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about the need and importance and use of independence in true terms as rights to equality, freedom, and or expression are not yet enjoyed; I liked.
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This speaks about the need and importance and use of independence in true terms as rights to equality, freedom, and or expression are not yet enjoyed; I liked.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Heather Knight
I had never seen an acrostic loop before but I like it very much. It is a very original form.
The rhythm created by the repetition of words is lovely.
Thanks for sharing.
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I had never seen an acrostic loop before but I like it very much. It is a very original form.
The rhythm created by the repetition of words is lovely.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written acrostic loop poem. With the word independence is more than just freedom. When people all stand together in one nation they will find it easier to reach independence.
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A very well-written acrostic loop poem. With the word independence is more than just freedom. When people all stand together in one nation they will find it easier to reach independence.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much, and your words a very true****kahpot
Comment from DR DIP
You have a lot of things going on in this poem Kahpot. That is not easy to have a poem with meaning and be an acrostic as well and still holding this rhyme scheme
Thanks for sharing
dip
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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You have a lot of things going on in this poem Kahpot. That is not easy to have a poem with meaning and be an acrostic as well and still holding this rhyme scheme
Thanks for sharing
dip
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Ogden
I commend your efforts to construct an acrostic poem in this difficult loop form. However, independence is NOT neglected when properly defining equality. 'Essential," with the opposite meaning of 'neglected,' would be perfect, instead. "Conform" is another word that is not a good choice. To 'assimilate' would be a helpful step to becoming able to enjoy independence.
Those changes would gve the intended meaning to your poem, 'Independence.'
Don
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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I commend your efforts to construct an acrostic poem in this difficult loop form. However, independence is NOT neglected when properly defining equality. 'Essential," with the opposite meaning of 'neglected,' would be perfect, instead. "Conform" is another word that is not a good choice. To 'assimilate' would be a helpful step to becoming able to enjoy independence.
Those changes would gve the intended meaning to your poem, 'Independence.'
Don
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much, and I understand what you say and I agree, thank you for helping me****kahpot
Comment from smileycloud
an acrostic loop is incredibly unique and a little tricky to keep the flow
but I guess you know that you have done it really really well
good form great style
fine content
excellent flow of storyline
have a smiley dat
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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an acrostic loop is incredibly unique and a little tricky to keep the flow
but I guess you know that you have done it really really well
good form great style
fine content
excellent flow of storyline
have a smiley dat
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much, I am trying to improve my way and ideas of expressing myself, many thanks very encouraging****kahpot
Comment from bob cullen
Originality always wins points from me. And the style here is original.
I love how it runs the full circle and finishes up where it started.
I really think the first and last line sum this poem up. Then we can enjoy our independence but we must never neglect it.
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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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Originality always wins points from me. And the style here is original.
I love how it runs the full circle and finishes up where it started.
I really think the first and last line sum this poem up. Then we can enjoy our independence but we must never neglect it.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much, I am trying to improve my ideas, this is very encouraging, many thanks****kahpot
