Independence
Acrostic- Loop37 total reviews
Comment from sandy montgomery
I really liked the sentiment and form. They belong together. The repetition added weight to each line. I enjoyed the echoing quality very much. Thank you for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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I really liked the sentiment and form. They belong together. The repetition added weight to each line. I enjoyed the echoing quality very much. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Oatmeal
KAHPOT,
Very unique style. The theme was well chosen. The flow was smooth. Telling things very plainly and comprehensibly. Very well reflected thoughts and expressions. Nicely effective and impressive.
No SPAG or problems anywhere.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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KAHPOT,
Very unique style. The theme was well chosen. The flow was smooth. Telling things very plainly and comprehensibly. Very well reflected thoughts and expressions. Nicely effective and impressive.
No SPAG or problems anywhere.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from nbonner
I agree, independence is neglected. We as a society somehow has gotten away from that and now everything seems to be monitored. Great poem! Thank you for sharing, NB
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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I agree, independence is neglected. We as a society somehow has gotten away from that and now everything seems to be monitored. Great poem! Thank you for sharing, NB
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much****kjahpot
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Kahpot. I like this format. I've never seen it and I think you have done a great job working the last word into the first word of the next thought. I also think your presentation is gorgeous. cheers Kiwi
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Hi Kahpot. I like this format. I've never seen it and I think you have done a great job working the last word into the first word of the next thought. I also think your presentation is gorgeous. cheers Kiwi
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Thank you for an excellent and explanation****kahpot
Comment from Dean Kuch
I'd say you were able to convey your feelings and meaning quite well here, kahpot.
There are several types of independence.
Individual independence, or how we choose to conduct ourselves in our daily interactions with others.
Collective independence; how we as a nation interact with the world around us.
Mutual independence--how we all collectively work hand-in-hand to achieve our nations goals.
As you say, above ALL else, we should be able to enjoy our independence.
Well done!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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I'd say you were able to convey your feelings and meaning quite well here, kahpot.
There are several types of independence.
Individual independence, or how we choose to conduct ourselves in our daily interactions with others.
Collective independence; how we as a nation interact with the world around us.
Mutual independence--how we all collectively work hand-in-hand to achieve our nations goals.
As you say, above ALL else, we should be able to enjoy our independence.
Well done!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much , your reviews, words, poems, and stories I constantly read, are an inspiration for me, to better and help myself-many thanks, Freind ****kahpot
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You're very welcome. :)
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
This is a great inspiring poem, my friend. It's not easy to pull off an acrostic loop poem, but you did it, and very well I must say:)) ~Kerry
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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This is a great inspiring poem, my friend. It's not easy to pull off an acrostic loop poem, but you did it, and very well I must say:)) ~Kerry
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much****kahpot
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Your welcome:)
Comment from GWinterwin
Good message in your poem with words that we all need to take to heart. Too many do not understand what the words of real independence mean. We are all equal by our creator, and nothing to do with color of skin or nationality.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Good message in your poem with words that we all need to take to heart. Too many do not understand what the words of real independence mean. We are all equal by our creator, and nothing to do with color of skin or nationality.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from Daniel Silverhawk
A very nice loop poetry. In order to complete the full loop, you may think of repeating the first line at the end. It is, however, obvious that independence begins the next line in the poem.
The expectations of the nation and it's people to deliver and execute us what leaves our independence neglected and difficult to fully enjoy
Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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A very nice loop poetry. In order to complete the full loop, you may think of repeating the first line at the end. It is, however, obvious that independence begins the next line in the poem.
The expectations of the nation and it's people to deliver and execute us what leaves our independence neglected and difficult to fully enjoy
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much for your excellent review, however, this one is an Acrostic-Loop, bit hard to have first and last line repeated unless they have the same letter or word, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
'Deliver and execute
Execute the need
Need to conform
Conform to enjoy
Enjoy our independence'...
A wonderful write we sure could do with some independence now as things are increasing becoming fractious between nations. Well done on an outstanding write, kindest regards Meia x
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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'Deliver and execute
Execute the need
Need to conform
Conform to enjoy
Enjoy our independence'...
A wonderful write we sure could do with some independence now as things are increasing becoming fractious between nations. Well done on an outstanding write, kindest regards Meia x
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Thank you for such an excellent and understanding review****kahpot
Comment from Dhale89
Really enjoy this style. Would love to see a really long one possibly all letters of the alphabet used contest with this style. I read this in a upbeat tempo in my head and then slowly savouring the words it worked both ways. Really good work.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Really enjoy this style. Would love to see a really long one possibly all letters of the alphabet used contest with this style. I read this in a upbeat tempo in my head and then slowly savouring the words it worked both ways. Really good work.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Thank you very much****kahpot
