Selections For Book Project
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "No Strings Attached"possible selections for inclusion in book project
9 total reviews
Comment from Lucian Carter
A good poem on a serious topic. I like the imagery and the contrast of many of them. A good reminder that everyone is a dancer and a singer and an artist at heart. Even the most unfortunate of us can dream.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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A good poem on a serious topic. I like the imagery and the contrast of many of them. A good reminder that everyone is a dancer and a singer and an artist at heart. Even the most unfortunate of us can dream.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2017
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I really like the way you put your synopsis. Very insightful. Thanks a million. :))
Comment from nordicgirl
This is an amazing read. I sense a vision of the homeless here as neglected and helpless for the most part. Man seems to feel without responsibility I guess. Maybe God has no part in it either. Fascinating at the very least and needing more consideration. NG
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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This is an amazing read. I sense a vision of the homeless here as neglected and helpless for the most part. Man seems to feel without responsibility I guess. Maybe God has no part in it either. Fascinating at the very least and needing more consideration. NG
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Way too kind. Thanks. :))
Comment from Lady t darealest
Interesting read. Couldn't really get into it but it was still a good piece of art. I will definitely look you up for more of your work
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Interesting read. Couldn't really get into it but it was still a good piece of art. I will definitely look you up for more of your work
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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I appreciate the thorough read. I long free verse can be difficult, I admit. Sometimes it's just supposed to get an emotional reaction or get you to think perhaps. Thanks so much for some honest input. MUCH appreciated. :))
Comment from frierajac
It is as if you are saying, to me,these are my reflections today upon the writing
withn the context of the writing community on fanstory. It is interesting and also
universal.
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It is as if you are saying, to me,these are my reflections today upon the writing
withn the context of the writing community on fanstory. It is interesting and also
universal.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
Comment from luther maddox
this is very good work but points I do get lost trying to incorporate the inner voice, the schematic nature of the dialogue expressing the free verse poetic nature of it.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017
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this is very good work but points I do get lost trying to incorporate the inner voice, the schematic nature of the dialogue expressing the free verse poetic nature of it.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017
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I actually don't understand what you're saying. But thanks for reading and commenting. mike
Comment from B.B. Rose
You have some incredible images and "stanzas" here. The pieces dealing specifically with the homeless, e.g., "chilled to the bone...a bridge can be crossed" are dynamite. But these vie with muddier stanzas whose images are vague and the metaphors such a long stretch as to be unavailable to most readers...(puppy dog, fate laughing in a raindrop)....Shorter, tighter, perhaps less arcane. You are obviously a skilled writer, but you seem to write more for yourself than an audience.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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You have some incredible images and "stanzas" here. The pieces dealing specifically with the homeless, e.g., "chilled to the bone...a bridge can be crossed" are dynamite. But these vie with muddier stanzas whose images are vague and the metaphors such a long stretch as to be unavailable to most readers...(puppy dog, fate laughing in a raindrop)....Shorter, tighter, perhaps less arcane. You are obviously a skilled writer, but you seem to write more for yourself than an audience.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Thanks so much. What a great review. I appreciate you reading so completely. Yes, there are some stretches I admit. I do write for myself to a degree, but I hope the reader gets something from it too. Sometimes I just write for the reader too. :))
Comment from smileycloud
I really like the profound opposites/similarities and the complexity of how one thing can mean good to some and the opposite effect to others
the logic in your poem is outstanding
the river is heartless
for it does not love
but it is blameless
for it does not hate
fate laughs within a raindrop
this stanza is so realistic
good entry Michael thank you for the contest
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017
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I really like the profound opposites/similarities and the complexity of how one thing can mean good to some and the opposite effect to others
the logic in your poem is outstanding
the river is heartless
for it does not love
but it is blameless
for it does not hate
fate laughs within a raindrop
this stanza is so realistic
good entry Michael thank you for the contest
have a smiley day
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017
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I'm horrible at responses. I'm really too busy to be posting since I don't have time to respond, but I can't help myself. I LOVE your insightful reviews and you ALWAYS make me smile. I had to come and find one of your reviews just to let you know. mike
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Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
This is utterly superb. A fantastic entry for the contest, I wasn't sure how this contest would actually work but here you have taken the idea of worked it into perfect imagery and ideas. Fantastic turns of phrase and superbly worked poem, I truly enjoyed this as a break from the norm and it is an amazing stark, modern piece, quite amazing, well done, good luck in the competition and kindest regards Meia x
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017
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This is utterly superb. A fantastic entry for the contest, I wasn't sure how this contest would actually work but here you have taken the idea of worked it into perfect imagery and ideas. Fantastic turns of phrase and superbly worked poem, I truly enjoyed this as a break from the norm and it is an amazing stark, modern piece, quite amazing, well done, good luck in the competition and kindest regards Meia x
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017
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I remembered this wonderful review and came looking for it in the horrible mess that is my unanswered review list. LOL
I'm so pleased you enjoyed this piece. This is how I write when I'm writing what I please. So I'm extra delighted you enjoyed it. I'm sorry I didn't have time to review your piece about Gone With the Wind, but I LOVED IT. Wow, it was sooooo entertaining and well written. A great deserved win. Just a handful here write at that level. Bravo. mike
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello poet. I thought this one was strong. The words create their own visual which gets stronger each stanza. I love the one about how the wind causes the hair to bounce like applause and then you hit your reader with the homeless card. Like I said a powerful write. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Hello poet. I thought this one was strong. The words create their own visual which gets stronger each stanza. I love the one about how the wind causes the hair to bounce like applause and then you hit your reader with the homeless card. Like I said a powerful write. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Thanks, Kiwi
I'm delighted you enjoyed and especially that you singled out the hair bouncing on the shoulders ... I liked that too. :))
Thanks so much.
