The Marionette
A Picture This Challenge30 total reviews
Comment from smileycloud
great work for the power of positive thinking and the search for true happiness
manipulation and control come so easily to some people
and giving up to the negative vibes are the ways in which the victims feel they can keep the peace
your lovely little pippet tells a very powerful story
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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great work for the power of positive thinking and the search for true happiness
manipulation and control come so easily to some people
and giving up to the negative vibes are the ways in which the victims feel they can keep the peace
your lovely little pippet tells a very powerful story
have a smiley day
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Dear Friend, than you for your review and the five stars. It amazes me just what other people find in the words I have written. I look at my work anew and see what they see. Amazing!! I hope you have a smiley day too. Lots of them filled with sunshine .cheers Cass
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Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
A very different take on the picture than those I have read. Very well done comparing the strings of the doll to the strings of life
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A very different take on the picture than those I have read. Very well done comparing the strings of the doll to the strings of life
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Dear Barb, Thank you for your review and the five stars. The first line was my response to seeing the picture for the first time and it all went off from there. I am glad you like it cheers Cass
Comment from butterfly4265
I have enjoyed a number of similar yet different poems based on this Picture Challenge, and this one I really like! Your poem has great flow, right from the opening words "poor little thing, tied up with string". You grabbed my attention and didn't let go. I can also very much relate to the message conveyed in your words. I know this isn't a contest, but if it was, it would get my vote. I also rarely give 6 stars but this is well deserved. Very well done!
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I have enjoyed a number of similar yet different poems based on this Picture Challenge, and this one I really like! Your poem has great flow, right from the opening words "poor little thing, tied up with string". You grabbed my attention and didn't let go. I can also very much relate to the message conveyed in your words. I know this isn't a contest, but if it was, it would get my vote. I also rarely give 6 stars but this is well deserved. Very well done!
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Dear Butterfly4265, Thank you for your review and the awesome SIX stars. Yes I usually give my sixers judiciously so yours is a great compliment. thanks again cheers Cass
Comment from frierajac
And the dance you do, you do alone. It sounds to me as though this borders on a lyric, which is very enjoyable and has some insight. It also works well as a fairytale poem with its warning to children.
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And the dance you do, you do alone. It sounds to me as though this borders on a lyric, which is very enjoyable and has some insight. It also works well as a fairytale poem with its warning to children.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Dear frierajac, Thank you for your review and the five stars. The pictured puppet does have a frail, fairy like air about her, which prompted the first line of the poem "Poor little thing" Thanks again cheers Cass
Comment from Kazzawin
I thought this quite clever as you draw comparisons of life with that of a puppet on a string, longing to escape the controlling grip of the puppeteer.
Certain aspects of life can be out of our control...work, health etc but on the whole one should ensure that life in general is never out of one's own grip.
That, indeed, would be the epitome of a soulless life.
I particularly like the last three lines. Thought provoking.
Lovely artwork : )
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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I thought this quite clever as you draw comparisons of life with that of a puppet on a string, longing to escape the controlling grip of the puppeteer.
Certain aspects of life can be out of our control...work, health etc but on the whole one should ensure that life in general is never out of one's own grip.
That, indeed, would be the epitome of a soulless life.
I particularly like the last three lines. Thought provoking.
Lovely artwork : )
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Dear Kazzawin, Thank you for your review and the five stars. "A soulless life" as you so aptly put it is just what I visualised for the hapless creature held captive by the cruel strings. Well spotted cheers Cass
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Good morning Cass:
This is a great poem. I've seen a few of these picture this challenge, poems since yesterday. They all took this direction with this picture but your poems get right to the point. It makes it clear that if you don't want to be with that controlling ruler, narcissist type of person, who believes it is his/her sole purpose on this earth to control every little and large thing that you do, then get away from that person. Put them as far away from you and out of your life - as possible. No one should ever allow themselves to be this miserable with someone who enjoys making anyone they could - miserable. Misery loves company is such a true statement.
I love your poem also because it also makes it clear that escape is possible. Standing up and taking charge of your own life, making your own decisions is possible. One just has to make that decision and do it. Very nicely done, Cass! Very nicely done...
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Good morning Cass:
This is a great poem. I've seen a few of these picture this challenge, poems since yesterday. They all took this direction with this picture but your poems get right to the point. It makes it clear that if you don't want to be with that controlling ruler, narcissist type of person, who believes it is his/her sole purpose on this earth to control every little and large thing that you do, then get away from that person. Put them as far away from you and out of your life - as possible. No one should ever allow themselves to be this miserable with someone who enjoys making anyone they could - miserable. Misery loves company is such a true statement.
I love your poem also because it also makes it clear that escape is possible. Standing up and taking charge of your own life, making your own decisions is possible. One just has to make that decision and do it. Very nicely done, Cass! Very nicely done...
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Dear Tier V King, Thank you for your review and the five stars. Your comments speak from the heart and I sense a courageous soul who has made some difficult decisions in life and now lives by them. Your comments are most welcome and generous. Thanks again cheers Cass
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem and an excellent interpretation of the photo for the 'picture this' challenge. Many people live under the control of a puppeteer which they think they are not able to escape from.
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A very well-written poem and an excellent interpretation of the photo for the 'picture this' challenge. Many people live under the control of a puppeteer which they think they are not able to escape from.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Dear Sandra, Thank you for your review and the five stars. Your comment has been echoed by many other readers. It seems that there are a lot of people who have had to "cut loose" from something or someone and see the message of my poem as an affirmation of their own actions. I feel highly complimented Thanks again cheers Cass
Comment from rheabug
An excellent poem for the presentation. Loved the picture you chose. Love the message in your poem. We all at one time or another are moved by the strings that hold us. Good job. Hugs..
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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An excellent poem for the presentation. Loved the picture you chose. Love the message in your poem. We all at one time or another are moved by the strings that hold us. Good job. Hugs..
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Dear rheabug, Thank you for your review and the awesome SIX stars. I didn't actually choose the picture, it was chosen for me by the Picture This Challenge. The image is a sad one of a sweet faced puppet on strings. As soon as I saw it I thought "Poor little thing" and the poem took off from there Hugs and a cuddle cheers Cass
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Dear Cass, It was wonderful and I enjoyed the poem! You have a gift for words. Hugs...
Comment from tfawcus
I have read several poems in response to this picture, all on a very similar theme to yours. However, this one has a dancing rhythm to it which is very much in keeping with the idea of the puppet being jerked this way and that by the puppet-master. The aabccb rhyme scheme also accentuates this feel, together with the blend of shorter 'a' and 'c' lines being interspersed with the longer 'b' lines. It's a very good construction for this type of poem.
I also like the positive ending to yours, giving hope that it really is possible to cut free from a one-sided relationship and establish one's own identity and the freedom to dance on one's own terms.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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I have read several poems in response to this picture, all on a very similar theme to yours. However, this one has a dancing rhythm to it which is very much in keeping with the idea of the puppet being jerked this way and that by the puppet-master. The aabccb rhyme scheme also accentuates this feel, together with the blend of shorter 'a' and 'c' lines being interspersed with the longer 'b' lines. It's a very good construction for this type of poem.
I also like the positive ending to yours, giving hope that it really is possible to cut free from a one-sided relationship and establish one's own identity and the freedom to dance on one's own terms.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Dear Tony, Thank you for your review and the five stars. The poem started off in my head as soon as I saw the picture ,and continued until it was complete. The end of the piece has my usual trademark "happy ever after note", but the rhyme scheme was completely from La Muse. (She who Must Be Obeyed) or else! Thaks again for your generous comments cheers Cass
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Cass.
Once again, I must apologize for not having a six left.
A fabulous take on the picture and very cleverly thought out with the puppet masters of the world getting a mention.
I miss the group and once I get the first manuscript ready and sent I'll rejoin it.
Great job, mate.
Cheers Fez
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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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G'day Cass.
Once again, I must apologize for not having a six left.
A fabulous take on the picture and very cleverly thought out with the puppet masters of the world getting a mention.
I miss the group and once I get the first manuscript ready and sent I'll rejoin it.
Great job, mate.
Cheers Fez
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Dear Fez, Thank you for your review and the five stars . This poem was a delight to write. The Muse was well in attendance, so it just fell into words off my fingers with little need to edit or re arrange. I sincerely hope your Muse is just as helpful, and the book is coming along a treat. cheers Cass
