The Marionette
A Picture This Challenge30 total reviews
Comment from nbonner
Yes, I agree. I have been one of those people controlled like a puppet, someone just pulling the strings, and its no fun. Run for your life if you can get away. I thought the poem was very well written. Nice metaphor and imagery used. Thank you for sharing, NB
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Yes, I agree. I have been one of those people controlled like a puppet, someone just pulling the strings, and its no fun. Run for your life if you can get away. I thought the poem was very well written. Nice metaphor and imagery used. Thank you for sharing, NB
Comment Written 14-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Dear nbonner, Thank you for your review and the five stars. Many people have made similar comments to yours and I feel quite humbled to have so many share their thoughts and life's experiences with me. cheers Cass
Comment from RGstar
Nicely added to the task. So many interesting angles to the image undertaken, and though may seem static bound by string, it was a marvelous choice for the challenge. You have written your own take and scenario adding to the intrigue.
Well done.
Have a great day.
RGstar
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Nicely added to the task. So many interesting angles to the image undertaken, and though may seem static bound by string, it was a marvelous choice for the challenge. You have written your own take and scenario adding to the intrigue.
Well done.
Have a great day.
RGstar
Comment Written 14-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Dear RGstar, Thank you for your review and the five stars. It is surprising what others read into a poem . I have had so many comments and expressions that , while similar to what I wrote, differ with the individual. Quite exciting really. It is delightful to be read by people who "speak the same language" cheers Cass
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your picture challenge "Marionette". I liked your rhyming scheme which you kept to all the way through. You told a beautiful story.
All the very best in this contest.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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I enjoyed reading your picture challenge "Marionette". I liked your rhyming scheme which you kept to all the way through. You told a beautiful story.
All the very best in this contest.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Dear marybell1, Thank you for your review and the awesome SIX stars. Happy ever after stories are the best kind, aren't they?
I couldn't leave her there, I had to set her free, so that's why I made sure I ended the poem on an up note. Thanks again cheers Cass
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You are most welcome. I did enjoy reading it.
All the best.
Marybell1.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Beautifully rhymed with warm sentiments of freedom which many do not have or appreciate, love the style of your poem, it is truthful and honest and a joy to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Beautifully rhymed with warm sentiments of freedom which many do not have or appreciate, love the style of your poem, it is truthful and honest and a joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Dear Dolly, Thank you for your review and the awesome SIX stars. This piece is pretty much as I wrote it with few alterations. It came to me as a whole piece written in one go. Your comments are generous and most welcome .Thanks again cheers Cass
Comment from ronnie k
I read this over to see that it revealed the beauty of change and a warning of not, you gave the opening verse a misleading voice that delivered and exceptional message, wonderful write, thank you
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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I read this over to see that it revealed the beauty of change and a warning of not, you gave the opening verse a misleading voice that delivered and exceptional message, wonderful write, thank you
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Dear Ronnie k, Thank you for your review and the five stars. I have been thrilled with the response to this piece, which is quite a boost to morale as I haven't posted anything of real note for some time. Thanks again cheers Cass
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about controlling someone's life as wishes without thinking of other's rights to work and by this exploitation goes on that either do not understand, life goes on; I like.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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This speaks about controlling someone's life as wishes without thinking of other's rights to work and by this exploitation goes on that either do not understand, life goes on; I like.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Dear Friend, Thank you for your review and the five stars. It was generous of you to take the time to read my work and comment. cheers Cass
Comment from patcelaw
Your message with this is photo is wonderful. Many people have been kept dancing to the whims of a puppet master and never feel free. I did this for some time in my life, but how sweet it was when I was able to break free of those strings holding me captive. Patricia
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Your message with this is photo is wonderful. Many people have been kept dancing to the whims of a puppet master and never feel free. I did this for some time in my life, but how sweet it was when I was able to break free of those strings holding me captive. Patricia
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Dear Patricia, thank you for your review and the five stars. I feel honoured by the confidences shared by so many readers of breaking their own restrictive bonds and dancing to their own tune.
To speak or write words that encourage or inspire others to be something greater than themselves is surely a God given gift.
Praise Him cheers Cass
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Then you'll live on a string
And never will sing
The song that is yours alone.
Cut now from his grasp
And, freed from his clasp
Your feet will dance on their own. ' Brilliantly rhymed, flowed perfectly, a pleasure to read, well done, the above is particularly impressive xx kind regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Then you'll live on a string
And never will sing
The song that is yours alone.
Cut now from his grasp
And, freed from his clasp
Your feet will dance on their own. ' Brilliantly rhymed, flowed perfectly, a pleasure to read, well done, the above is particularly impressive xx kind regards Meia xx
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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"Dear Meia, Thank you for your review and the five stars. This piece has been well received by many so I am quite "chuffed" at the response. Your comments are most welcome cheers Cass
Comment from Bichon
Very creative poem. You have described the little puppet excellently, especially in the second verse. I could almost imagine the little thing, but of course the photo helped too haha. Brilliant write.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Very creative poem. You have described the little puppet excellently, especially in the second verse. I could almost imagine the little thing, but of course the photo helped too haha. Brilliant write.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
Dear Bichon, thank you for your review and the five stars. The poem is just as I wrote it without hesitation or correction. This is definitely a Muse Inspired effort with no editing allowed . She gets really narky if I question her dictates, so I'll leave it for a while and then, (perhaps) do a little bit of careful re arranging. While she isn't looking. cheers Cass
Comment from Leineco
I like your approach to this artwork - seeing it as a "warning". I also like that you stepped back and wrote as an observer, instead of as the actual "trapped marionette".
The poem had a catchy meter and interesting rhyme scheme (though there are a few stumbles that felt a little forced. . .but I understand how that often occurs later in a poem as maintaining what came organically, through inspiration, becomes more difficult once the dictates of form exert a kind of obsession. . .Lord knows I have been there a couple zillion times (lol)
Interestingly and nicely done :-)
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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I like your approach to this artwork - seeing it as a "warning". I also like that you stepped back and wrote as an observer, instead of as the actual "trapped marionette".
The poem had a catchy meter and interesting rhyme scheme (though there are a few stumbles that felt a little forced. . .but I understand how that often occurs later in a poem as maintaining what came organically, through inspiration, becomes more difficult once the dictates of form exert a kind of obsession. . .Lord knows I have been there a couple zillion times (lol)
Interestingly and nicely done :-)
Comment Written 13-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Dear Friend, thank you for your review and the five stars. There is nothing I appreciate more than a comment from another poet. Particularly when that poet is as gifted as yourself. the rhyme scheme is presented as it came to me, but it may be subject to an edit at some point in time. thanks again cheers Cass
