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Perennials of War

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Is Anderson a gallant knight? Can he recover Shan

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Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
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I am praying for you and all threatened by the hurricanes. This is as usual spot on Mrs. Wilkey, you have added an interesting dimension to the story in this chapter which as usual entertained me very much. Kindest regards Meia xx

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
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It seems he will go to any length to please Shana -

another enjoyable chapter, Barbara - looking forward to the next.

better tell Kuznetsov to come out (on the) sidewalk to talk with us - missing words

Margaret

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017
    Thank you for the catch. I will take care of that.
Comment from rheabug
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Another fine addition to your book. I am enjoying this and thank you for sharing. One minor thing I found and I may be wrong. The sentence, "You'd better tell Kuznetsov to come out sidewalk to talk with us, should it say, to come out on the sidewalk? I think it was very good. Hugs...

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
    I have made that correction. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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Anderson is no wimp, that's for sure. He would PAY for the painting? Is he that rich or is the painting that cheap or both? Seems this dispute belongs in a court, but which one? Might be corruption ... there always is in govt.

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
    Anderson is that rich. Did you forget how much he is paying in child support and alimony. He's an old baron. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Janilou
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An action-packed chapter that moves the plot right along!
I found only one minor thing to comment on.

"I doubt it, but be ready for anything." Anderson input the code that unlocked the car door.

Input doesn't seem to be the right word.
I would suggest

"I doubt it, but be ready for anything." Anderson entered the code that unlocked the car door.

Or

"I doubt it, but be ready for anything." Anderson punched in the code that unlocked the car door.

Otherwise, a good chapter.

Jan

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
    I have changed that area. Thank you for the suggestion.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
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Yes my friend this is well written and it seems that Anderson will go to any length to please Shana and get her painting back that should be in her family I enjoyed well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
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Hi Barbara, this is a great continuation to the story, and the twist to it. I wonder what will happen now. It could turn really nasty.
'You'd better tell Kuznetsov to come out sidewalk ...' = to come out to the sidewalk.
All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
    I can't believe I did that. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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Oh I loved that!!! What fun to have the tables turned on them, very well done, Barbara, I love a bit of action and you came up with the goods in this part!! LOL, I think Anderson has stirred up the hornet's nest here. Brilliant writing, just loving this story! :) Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
    Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from rtobaygo
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Good Morning, Barbara

Excellent continuation. The action was succinct and spot on. How your main characters handled themselves was spot on. You had the minimum of physical contact but with the maximum effect. Enjoyed.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rama devi
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Fast paced tension well portrayed, dear. True to character dialog too. Fine descriptive detail that enhances without bogging it down. No major nits...just one typo:

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At the Anastasiya's Tea Room's door, the man dressed in the long, red jacket and black,(no ,) top hat stared at them.

Exciting scene!

Love,
rd

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2017


reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
    Come on, I try to make sure I have all the commas and you tell me I have too many. LOL I'm teasing. I always appreciate your help. Commas are my down fall.
reply by rama devi on 16-Sep-2017
    :-))) They are not easy to tame. Took me a decade!