Comment from teols2016

Excellent

A great opening. You give plenty to tease, but not too much to make it too obvious. Glad to be catching up on this. Well done.

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017

Hi there;
Thank you so much for taking the time to go back and read the earlier chapters. I am glad you decided to come along for the ride. I try to release at least one chapter per week.

~patty~

Comment from Brigitte Elko

Exceptional

This story is indeed a cohesive one, written in an easy flowing style. The images are vivid and made me be in that waiting room with the characters, all of which are strong. I am delighted that you "pulled this out" for reading. The grammar is excellent throughout and I wouldn't change a thing. This reader is anxious for the next chapter. Maybe, a comma after room in the third paragraph? Quotation marks around " Please come in" or not? Only my opinion, you are the author.
Fan Friend,
Brigitte

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017

Hi, Brigitte;
thank you for your tenacity in going back to the beginning of 'The Waiting Room.' I'm really glad you have because I believe this story is richer from the beginning. I greatly appreciate the shining sixth star on this chapter - it was fun to craft.

Thank you so much for your comments, review and suggestions,

~patty~

Comment from mrsmajor

Excellent

I have been truly missing something...there was a calming, peaceful feeling I go from this, and early on, one begins to feel this is going to be a special "Waiting Room"...but not the frightful room where one is to be harshly judged, by how your life was lead...it speaks to all mankind, no special position in life is required to become a visiter in that room... I look forward to continue reading this story, although one feels where you are going, how you get there will surely be of interest...

One thing I noticed and I could be wrong but...is there a word missing from this sentence..."The windows were frosted and there any sign of a bell"...like I said, I could be wrong...

I loved this, and the premise was one I could so easily identify with...

Warmly,
Victoria

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2017

Hi, Victoria;
thank you so much for the read and review. You did catch a nit, and I greatly appreciate it. I've been editing here and there, and when I took out a bit of that sentence, I apparently 'over edited.'

I do appreciate your time in taking a look at this story. I value your opinion because I want to appeal to believers and give information to seekers,

~patty~

reply by mrsmajor on 10-Oct-2017

You're very welcome. patty, it was my pleasure!

Comment from Sallyo

Excellent

Nice start (yes, I came back to see...). My only question is whether the seven will be playing Seven Green Bottles or whether others will come in at intervals. I'm assuming the former, as otherwise it would be difficult to find the end of the story.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017

Hi there;
thank you for taking the time to go to the first chapters. I think you will find the thread of the story and see that these seven souls will tell the tale of the final stages of our lives as humans, (at least in my opinion.)

I'm glad you are coming along on the ride,

~patty~

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

Just found this, I must have been away when you posted. Just catching up now. This sounds like it's going to be a brilliant book, and totally different. Good luck with it. xx Sandra xx

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2017

Hi Sandra;
thank you so much for reading the intro. I'm up to Chapter 4 now, and I'm thinking about just pumping it out this week - cause the story is flowing,

~patty~

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello, Patty,

A very unique story about life and death. The waiting room is the place where souls wait to be judged....or at least that is how I understand it. Good composition and story.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017

Hi Gypsy;
now that I'm home, I can take all of my hand-written notes and continue to build this novel. Thank you for reading the introduction,

~patty~

Comment from dovemarie

Excellent

Dear patty, It seemed to me that, reading your story, the "waiting room'" is the place where we go to be judged at the end of our lives. For Catholics, Purgatory can be the "waiting room." And we all have a choice to make about how much time we spend there. Your sentence structure and grammar was good, too. Dove

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017

Hi Dove;
now that I'm home, I can take all of my hand-written notes and continue to build this novel. Thank you for reading the introduction,

~patty~

Comment from JDRBAR

Excellent

Not only do I share your belief system, I couldn't imagine a better portrayal of that last appointment. It is imaginative and realistic at the same time. No obvious nits.

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017

Hi there;
now that I'm home, I can take all of my hand-written notes and continue to build this novel. Thank you for reading the introduction,

~patty~

Comment from Leena

Excellent

It's quite an interesting introduction. The detailing is perfect. The plot sounds engaging already; an appointment with the Lord himself! Eagerly waiting to read the next... Regards.

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017

Hi Leena;
now that I'm home, I can take all of my hand-written notes and continue to build this novel. Thank you for reading the introduction,

~patty~

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

There comes a time in each wordsmith's life when they must expand their boundaries. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.

 Comment Written 12-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017

Hi Charlie;
now that I'm home, I can take all of my hand-written notes and continue to build this novel. Thank you for reading the introduction,

~patty~

reply by c_lucas on 16-Sep-2017

You're welcome, Patty. Charlie