Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

Wow this is a real account of part of your life Patty. It is so honest and poignant I commend you for writing and sharing with us. Sometimes its the best therapy for getting something off your chest.

dip

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017

Hi dip;
this was one I had to let out - so it came out in free verse; couldn't find a form to quite express these thoughts.

thank you for your understanding review,

~patty~

Comment from BOO ghost

Excellent

Where have I gone? I ponder that too as I try to shape-shift through this fracking wall. Wish BOO could find a treasure chest full of waif that buccaneers left on sunk ship and it washes ashore. You're a ghost. No pictures from that era, time period. Welcome aboard. Love free-verse, sock it to BOO! Will writing about it make this insanity stop? Good question. has not worked for BOO. Still insane. inertia have not heard that word since high school. Science? Well, bud,another good questionnaire. Why had she left me like a waif? Patty-who? Patty the gunslinger. get your bullets ready for live action! POW!



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 Comment Written 09-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017

Hi Boo;
thank you for another chocolate ticket. I'm glad you enjoyed the words, and could see the little ghost I once was,

~patty~

reply by BOO ghost on 09-Sep-2017

You may become another ghost if you get killed in a gunfight. Posting tonight. yep, I got a way of cheering people up. Got 'em shooting each other.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

Patty, this is an interesting read. I wonder just how many kids have felt like a waif in their teen years especially. I know I did as my parents were fighting and trying to kill each other. The only reason it seemed I was even tolerated in my home was to be the little household slave. Never paid for anything I did to keep our family running and never even thanked for the jobs I did, Patricia

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017

Hi Patricia;
It sounds like you were put on the desert island, too. Living a life apart, while others around you failed to notice your existence. Thank you for your understanding review,

~patty~

Comment from doggymad

Excellent

Well written poem that speaks volumes about the life you led. Your descriptions are short and to the point and show the reader the big picture.

It is uplifting to see that you have become a better person and found your true self

hugs

Freda

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017

Hi Freda; thank you so much for your thoughtful review. I am so lucky to have found my way to a much better place,

~patty~

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written hrartfelt poem. Parents don't always realize what effect their decisions have on their children emotionally and physically. It helps for me to write about the things bothering me, I seldom publish those darker thoughts.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017

thank you so much for reading Sandra. I did wonder about posting this, but I've shared so much with my readers, I felt it was only fair to share the dark, too.

~patty~

Comment from JDRBAR

Excellent

Excellent depiction of a time in your life. It's not a rare story as so much of this type of child abuse exists today, and not all children survive it emotionally. You are a much stronger person for these ugly portions of your life and you have a special talent for writing of them.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017

thank you so much for reading this piece and for understanding. As I endeavor to write the next chapter of my memoirs, I struggle with the memory of that time,

~patty~

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Hello my friend this is well written the turmoil of your childhood is still a bad memory it is hard to adapt to change when younger it should be introduced slowly otherwise it will affect you well done my friend regards Jill

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017

Hi Jill;
thank you so much for reading this piece. It was right from the spot of hurt I endure as I write the next chapter of Grammy's memoirs.

I appreciate you reading,

~patty~

Comment from Janilou

Excellent

Made me sad, reading this. I feel so sorry for any child trapped in this type of situation. Unfortunately, the same type of thing can happen even with two biological parents, if one decides they don't like the child for one obscure reason or another.

Sad, but well written, and very moving.
Nothing to suggest in the way of corrections
Jan

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 Comment Written 09-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017

Hi Jan;
thank you so much for the read and review. this was a hard one to write,

~patty~

Comment from Heather Knight

Excellent

I do love this poem. It's so real, so full of emotion.
Can you tell me how old you were when this happened? It sounds tough... especially if you were a little girl.
Thanks for sharing. I hope writing it down has helped as you expected.

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 Comment Written 09-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017

Hi Maria;
I was fifteen during the summer I wrote about. I wasn't a mere babe, but I certainly wouldn't have left my children alone for the summer when they were that old.

~patty~

reply by Heather Knight on 09-Sep-2017

I wouldn't have done it either...