This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Joe Speaks"Veronica is sent back again
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Comment from rwilliam
What fun twists. I like that you surprise us with the other voice at the most unexpected times. Great writing my friend.
I like the scene you paint. I feel like I'm home when I read this. It's a cozy place and I feel I 'know' it.
Congratulations on the awards. I look forward to reading more. :-)
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017
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What fun twists. I like that you surprise us with the other voice at the most unexpected times. Great writing my friend.
I like the scene you paint. I feel like I'm home when I read this. It's a cozy place and I feel I 'know' it.
Congratulations on the awards. I look forward to reading more. :-)
Comment Written 11-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017
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Thank you so very much, Rebecca, for the lovely stars and wonderful review! It's heartwarming to read that you feel as if you 'know' the cottage, that is such a compliment. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from C.A. Wittman
This story reminds me a little of a novel I read years ago about a couple, the man was white and the woman black. They both kept getting yanked back and forth between their current time and the 1840's when slavery still existed. I think it was called, Kindred. Anyhow, I'm enjoying your story. I look forward to reading what happens next.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017
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This story reminds me a little of a novel I read years ago about a couple, the man was white and the woman black. They both kept getting yanked back and forth between their current time and the 1840's when slavery still existed. I think it was called, Kindred. Anyhow, I'm enjoying your story. I look forward to reading what happens next.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017
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I'll have to look for that book on Amazon, I love reading that sort of story. I hope it's still in circulation. Thank you for reading this part, my friend and the lovely comments. Big hugs. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Ravenbrok
I've not followed each chapter, as I was away for an extended period of time. With that said, however, I was able to easily pick up on the storyline, which is a definite credit to flow of storytelling. I appreciated that fact that gender was explained as this seems to be forgotten in most storylines of this nature. Close attention was paid to specific differences, using candlelight and light switches to convey period differences. Bravo!
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
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I've not followed each chapter, as I was away for an extended period of time. With that said, however, I was able to easily pick up on the storyline, which is a definite credit to flow of storytelling. I appreciated that fact that gender was explained as this seems to be forgotten in most storylines of this nature. Close attention was paid to specific differences, using candlelight and light switches to convey period differences. Bravo!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
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That is such a lovely review, Ravenbrok! Thank you so very much, I really appreciated those comments. I nice to have you back as well! Big hugs. :) Sandra x
Comment from frogbook
Weaving the parts of the story like a complicated and intricately woven tapestry, you are. These little children talking in other voices is always a rather scary thought.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
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Weaving the parts of the story like a complicated and intricately woven tapestry, you are. These little children talking in other voices is always a rather scary thought.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
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I like that, a complicated and intricately woven tapestry! LOL, Thank you, JoAnn, that put a big smile on my face. Things will be changing soon. :) Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from RGstar
I am not going to go in and correct or re-correct anything, I wanted just the feel of this to try to give it justice having missed so much, so must rely on what the moment gives.
You worked well in organizing your characters, as well bringing out the natural personalities, in respect of the role the character plays.
So, with this chapter, I am awarding that sixth star, for it well in proportion, and gives the feel of something that flows well in for, and because of other chapters.
Well done.
Have a great day.
My best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
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I am not going to go in and correct or re-correct anything, I wanted just the feel of this to try to give it justice having missed so much, so must rely on what the moment gives.
You worked well in organizing your characters, as well bringing out the natural personalities, in respect of the role the character plays.
So, with this chapter, I am awarding that sixth star, for it well in proportion, and gives the feel of something that flows well in for, and because of other chapters.
Well done.
Have a great day.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 11-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much, RG, I'm over the moon with the 6 you've given me. I'll have to pop up to London and give you a hug! I really appreciate what you said, thank you! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Cousin.
""MUMMY. Make him stop." Ann's angry, ear-splitting voice shrieked down the stairs." (Wow. That start packs a huge punch. Well done.)
" I switched the light back on and lifted Michael off the ottoman stool where he had been implementing his reign of terror. " (Hahahaha!)
"It was that strange voice again, not Michael's." (Ouch!)
"It's possible it's a gender thing and he couldn't have the use of a female host." (Ah, now I see.)
Scary stuff, mate. I really feel sorry for that poor little bloke.
Another great chapter, with nothing that needs editing that I could spot. I always love your dialogue, it's so authentic that it takes me into the conversation.
Great job.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
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G'day Cousin.
""MUMMY. Make him stop." Ann's angry, ear-splitting voice shrieked down the stairs." (Wow. That start packs a huge punch. Well done.)
" I switched the light back on and lifted Michael off the ottoman stool where he had been implementing his reign of terror. " (Hahahaha!)
"It was that strange voice again, not Michael's." (Ouch!)
"It's possible it's a gender thing and he couldn't have the use of a female host." (Ah, now I see.)
Scary stuff, mate. I really feel sorry for that poor little bloke.
Another great chapter, with nothing that needs editing that I could spot. I always love your dialogue, it's so authentic that it takes me into the conversation.
Great job.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 10-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
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Good morning, my wonderful cousin!
I love your reviews, they are fun to read and thorough. That was a lovely compliment about the dialogue, I'm more Mildred than Veronica most of the time, but like Veronica for the rest. My late husband used to say he could take me to the dustman's ball and the Lord Mayor's ball and fit in with both, LOL, I never knew if that was a compliment or not.
Thank you so much for the lovely review and shiny 6 stars, you are so supportive, and encouraging. Big hugs and lots of love. :) Sandra xx
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lol. Always welcome.
Do they have a Feral's Ball?
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I'm sure you would fit in anywhere, you have that charm about you. ;)
Comment from apky
Another wonderful and scary chapter, that's so well written.
It must be dreadful for the family having Joe in Michael's body, and especially for his sister who might be just mixed up between confusion, annoyance of the little one and scared about a grownup body in her brother.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
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Another wonderful and scary chapter, that's so well written.
It must be dreadful for the family having Joe in Michael's body, and especially for his sister who might be just mixed up between confusion, annoyance of the little one and scared about a grownup body in her brother.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much, my friend, for this encouraging review. I'm so pleased you still enjoy it. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Ric Myworld
Just the thought of hearing your own child speaking with the voice of someone else would be enough to scare ... oh, well, you know what, out of me. Thanks for another fine chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
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Just the thought of hearing your own child speaking with the voice of someone else would be enough to scare ... oh, well, you know what, out of me. Thanks for another fine chapter. :-)
Comment Written 10-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017
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LOL! Thank you, Ric. You have a wonderful way with words, you don't have to say much to express your thoughts! LOL, I love it. Thank you, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from wordsfromsue
Poor Joe, sometimes he enjoys the future and sometimes he seems so sad. He's got to be missing his famly.
Wouldn't Ann freak out if she knew a grown up was hanging out in her brother's body?!
Can't wait to read the next chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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Poor Joe, sometimes he enjoys the future and sometimes he seems so sad. He's got to be missing his famly.
Wouldn't Ann freak out if she knew a grown up was hanging out in her brother's body?!
Can't wait to read the next chapter. :-)
Comment Written 10-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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She would, but her mum and dad wouldn't tell her that. One more piece, the second half of this and then ..... LOL!!! Big hugs, my dear friend! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Ulla
Hi Sandra, this is just such another great chapter to the story. I totally understand the worry that Michael is being used as the host. It's quite scary actually. I just cant wait to reading on. It's such great writing.
I'm on holiday now. I'm just outside Madrid, and will be picking up my friend Marjory, from Scotland, at the airport the day after tomorrow. Don't think I'll have time to post for the next two weeks. Hugs from Spain. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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Hi Sandra, this is just such another great chapter to the story. I totally understand the worry that Michael is being used as the host. It's quite scary actually. I just cant wait to reading on. It's such great writing.
I'm on holiday now. I'm just outside Madrid, and will be picking up my friend Marjory, from Scotland, at the airport the day after tomorrow. Don't think I'll have time to post for the next two weeks. Hugs from Spain. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 10-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2017
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I was thinking about you today. I looked to see if you had written another part of either of your stories, and was going to ask Alexis if she knew what you are doing. So, I'm double pleased to hear from you.
Thank you so much for taking time out to come and read this part, and for the lovely six stars. Have a glorious holiday and hope to hear all about it when you come back. Big hugs my friend . :) sandra xxxx
